工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Start with a direct response, then add specific details about your job. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

範例: I am currently working full-time on a contract basis at a PCB designing company called Intronics. I really enjoy my job because it allows me to develop various technical skills and gain practical experience in the electronics industry. Over time, this experience has been very rewarding and challenging.

建議: Your answer should start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. Then, provide specific supporting details using linking words to make your answer coherent.

範例: I work in Ottawa, the capital city of Canada, at a graphic design company. There, I help create visual content for various clients. I really enjoy the creative environment and the opportunity to work on different projects.

建議: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid confusing phrases.

範例: Yes, it is definitely a good place to work. For recent graduates who want to improve their teamwork and problem-solving skills, this company offers great opportunities. Although operating machines can be challenging, the work involves beginner-level troubleshooting, which helps employees learn and grow.

建議: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by avoiding incomplete sentences and adding linking words for coherence. Be more specific about what you enjoy.

範例: Yes, I really like the place where I work because everyone is very friendly and supportive. They patiently teach me whenever I make a mistake and are always willing to explain things clearly. As a result, I have gained valuable hands-on experience by working with different team members, which I enjoy a lot.

建議: Your answer is too brief and fragmented. Provide a complete sentence with more details about your plans and reasons. This will make your answer more natural and effective.

範例: My future work plan is to become an engineer, which has always been my dream job. I am currently gaining experience to help me achieve this goal.

× No, I currently working full time on a contract basis at a PCB designing company names in Tronics.

✓ No, I am currently working full time on a contract basis at a PCB designing company named Intronics.

The sentence is missing the auxiliary verb 'am' before the present participle 'working'. In English, the present continuous tense requires the verb 'to be' plus the '-ing' form of the main verb. Also, 'names' should be 'named' to correctly describe the company name.

× I really enjoy my job like because it allows me to develop.

✓ I really enjoy my job because it allows me to develop.

The phrase 'like because' is incorrect; 'like' is unnecessary here. The correct conjunction to express reason is 'because' alone.

× Variable technical skills can practical experience in electronics industry over my time over there has been very rewarding and has been hard.

✓ Developing various technical skills and gaining practical experience in the electronics industry during my time there has been very rewarding and challenging.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper structure. It needs to be rephrased to clearly express the idea of acquiring skills and experience, and to connect the clauses properly.

× In Ottawa, the capital city of Canada employed graphic design company where I helped create visual content of.

✓ I work in Ottawa, the capital city of Canada, at a graphic design company where I help create visual content for various clients.

The original sentence lacks a main verb and is incomplete. Adding 'I work' and correcting the preposition to 'for' clarifies the meaning.

× Various clients.

✓ for various clients.

The phrase 'Various clients.' is a fragment and needs the preposition 'for' to indicate the relationship with 'create visual content'.

× I really enjoyed the creative environment and the opportunity to work on different projects.

✓ I really enjoy the creative environment and the opportunity to work on different projects.

Since the student is currently working there, the present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate instead of past tense 'enjoyed'.

× Yes, definitely it's very good place to work.

✓ Yes, definitely it's a very good place to work.

The indefinite article 'a' is needed before 'very good place' because it is a singular countable noun and not previously specified.

× If you're a big nerd, just finished your school and you don't know you know how to work, or you don't know the teamwork, don't know problem solving skills, this is the best place to work.

✓ If you're a big nerd, have just finished school and don't know how to work, or don't have teamwork or problem-solving skills, this is the best place to work.

The sentence has redundant and incorrect pronoun usage and verb forms. 'Just finished your school' should be 'have just finished school'. Also, 'don't know you know how to work' is redundant and confusing; it should be 'don't know how to work'. 'Don't know the teamwork' should be 'don't have teamwork skills' or 'don't know teamwork'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× Because machine operator is not a good easy thing.

✓ Because being a machine operator is not an easy job.

The phrase lacks the article 'a' before 'machine operator' and 'easy thing' is awkward; 'easy job' is more natural. Also, 'good easy thing' is incorrect; 'not an easy job' is appropriate.

× But you it's a troubleshooting like it's very beginner level of the. Explain.

✓ But troubleshooting is at a very beginner level. Let me explain.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be rephrased to convey that troubleshooting is beginner level and to introduce an explanation.

× Yes, so I really like the place where I work because everyone is very friendly and supportive.

✓ Yes, I really like the place where I work because everyone is very friendly and supportive.

The word 'so' is unnecessary and informal in this context and can be omitted for clarity.

× They patiently teach me whenever I make a mistake and are always willing to explain things clearly.

✓ They patiently teach me whenever I make a mistake and are always willing to explain things clearly.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× So this is my job.

✓ So, this is my job.

Adding a comma after 'So' improves the sentence flow.

× Gaining hands on experience with different team members has been available and enjoy.

✓ Gaining hands-on experience with different team members has been valuable and enjoyable.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Available and enjoy' is incorrect; it should be 'valuable and enjoyable' to express the positive experience.

× My future work plans to become an engineer.

✓ My future work plan is to become an engineer.

The phrase 'work plans' should be singular 'work plan' to match the singular verb 'is'. Also, 'to become an engineer' is the correct infinitive phrase expressing the goal.

× Which is my dream job.

✓ This is my dream job.

The original sentence is a fragment. It should be connected to the previous sentence or rewritten as a complete sentence.