工作— Part 1 評分報告

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a direct response about your work or study status, using simple and clear sentences. Avoid unnecessary or confusing details and focus on the main point.

範例: I work as a nurse at Denison Hospital, which is located in my city. I have been working there since 2022.

建議: Your answer should be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct statement about your workplace, then add a reason why you like it. Use correct vocabulary and grammar to make your answer natural and effective.

範例: I work in the children's ward at Denison Hospital. I enjoy working there because I like helping children and my colleagues are very supportive.

建議: Your answer is confusing and difficult to understand. Try to use simple sentences and clear vocabulary to describe why your workplace is good. Mention specific positive aspects like friendly colleagues and teamwork.

範例: Yes, it is a good place to work because my colleagues are friendly and helpful. We support each other during difficult times and work well as a team.

建議: Your answer should be more clear and concise. Directly say if you like your workplace and explain why. Use correct vocabulary and avoid repetition for a natural response.

範例: Yes, I like my workplace because it has a friendly environment. We often have training classes and good cooperation among colleagues, which makes our bond stronger.

建議: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Clearly state your future career plans using simple and correct sentences. Avoid unrelated or confusing words.

範例: In the future, I plan to continue working as a nurse and improve my skills by attending training and gaining more experience in patient care.

× When is time and I'm calling to order in Denison hospital and we certainly hospital which is located in divorce in there and in this is specialized for the domain and range and I have been alternate since 2022 until now.

✓ When it is time, I call to order at Denison Hospital, which is located in Divorce. It specializes in the domain and range, and I have been an attendant since 2022 until now.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors including missing subjects, incorrect conjunctions, and unclear phrasing. Breaking it into clearer sentences and correcting prepositions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× When is time and I'm calling to order in Denison hospital and we certainly hospital which is located in divorce in there and in this is specialized for the domain and range and I have been alternate since 2022 until now.

✓ When it is time, I call to order at Denison Hospital, which is located in Divorce. It specializes in the domain and range, and I have been an attendant since 2022 until now.

The prepositions 'in' and 'to' were incorrectly used. 'Call to order' should be 'call to order at' a place, and 'located in divorce in there' is incorrect; it should be 'located in Divorce.' Correct preposition use is essential for clarity.

× Well, I've already told I I work in the children's with and it is located in the person and I enjoy working there.

✓ Well, I've already told you I work in the children's ward, and it is located in the hospital. I enjoy working there.

The phrase 'children's with' is incorrect; it should be 'children's ward' (singular). Also, 'located in the person' is incorrect; it should be 'located in the hospital.' Correct singular and plural forms and nouns are necessary for meaning.

× Well, I've already told I I work in the children's with and it is located in the person and I enjoy working there.

✓ Well, I've already told you I work in the children's ward, and it is located in the hospital. I enjoy working there.

The pronoun 'I' is repeated unnecessarily and 'told' requires an object pronoun 'you' to be correct. Proper pronoun use is important for sentence clarity.

× Before he did some good place to work because all the colleagues Sandy insurgence and understated people live in friendly as soon as they help they help each other in their in their difficulties and pop of the difficulties, challenges and sharing their thought nature each other and warning they may need some extra bonding strong.

✓ Before, it was a good place to work because all the colleagues were supportive and understanding. People lived in a friendly environment, helping each other with their difficulties and challenges, sharing their thoughts, and supporting each other when extra bonding was needed.

The original sentence is confusing with many unclear phrases and poor sentence structure. Rewriting it into clear, grammatically correct sentences improves understanding.

× Before he did some good place to work because all the colleagues Sandy insurgence and understated people live in friendly as soon as they help they help each other in their in their difficulties and pop of the difficulties, challenges and sharing their thought nature each other and warning they may need some extra bonding strong.

✓ Before, it was a good place to work because all the colleagues were supportive and understanding. People lived in a friendly environment, helping each other with their difficulties and challenges, sharing their thoughts, and supporting each other when extra bonding was needed.

Words like 'Sandy insurgence' and 'understated' are incorrect adjectives here. Correct adjectives like 'supportive' and 'understanding' should be used to describe colleagues properly.

× Before he did some good place to work because all the colleagues Sandy insurgence and understated people live in friendly as soon as they help they help each other in their in their difficulties and pop of the difficulties, challenges and sharing their thought nature each other and warning they may need some extra bonding strong.

✓ Before, it was a good place to work because all the colleagues were supportive and understanding. People lived in a friendly environment, helping each other with their difficulties and challenges, sharing their thoughts, and supporting each other when extra bonding was needed.

The pronoun 'he' is incorrectly used to refer to a place. It should be 'it' for places or things. Proper pronoun use is essential for clarity.

× Of course, everyone like with the Oracle America because it is very that's very friendly environment. Sometimes, sometimes, sometimes there is acting classes schedule, but also there is a friendly cooperative and friendly cooperative frames with his other than it also makes our bond stronger than our.

✓ Of course, everyone likes working at Oracle America because it is a very friendly environment. Sometimes there are acting classes scheduled, and there is a friendly, cooperative atmosphere which makes our bond stronger.

Incorrect adjective and adverb usage such as 'that's very friendly environment' and repeated words 'sometimes' need correction. Also, 'like with' should be 'likes working at.' Proper adjective and adverb use improves sentence quality.

× Of course, everyone like with the Oracle America because it is very that's very friendly environment.

✓ Of course, everyone likes working at Oracle America because it is a very friendly environment.

The verb 'like' does not agree with the singular subject 'everyone.' It should be 'likes.' Subject-verb agreement is important for grammatical correctness.

× Sometimes, sometimes, sometimes there is acting classes schedule, but also there is a friendly cooperative and friendly cooperative frames with his other than it also makes our bond stronger than our.

✓ Sometimes there are acting classes scheduled, and there is a friendly, cooperative atmosphere which makes our bond stronger.

The phrase 'acting classes schedule' is incorrect; it should be 'acting classes scheduled.' Also, 'frames with his other than it' is unclear and likely incorrect preposition use. Correct prepositions and phrasing are necessary.

× Continue press nursing nurse in my future by Paul provide anything to get opposing uploading a single record and nursing care.

✓ I plan to continue working as a nurse in the future, providing care and maintaining accurate patient records.

The original sentence is unclear and incorrectly uses future tense. Using 'I plan to continue' correctly expresses future intentions. Clear and correct future tense usage is important.