交通— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be consistent in tense and give a brief specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in present tense, then add one specific example and a linking word. Avoid past tense if describing current surroundings.

示例: Yes, there are a lot of crosswalks near where I live. For example, there are pedestrian crossings at every major intersection and outside the two local schools, which makes it easy and safe to walk around.

建议: Answer directly and expand with a concise reason using linking words and specific details. Use natural phrasing (e.g., “I wouldn’t change much”) and explain why, mentioning one or two concrete aspects to support your view.

示例: I wouldn’t change much about the traffic in my area because the system is well organized. For instance, most intersections have traffic lights and cameras, and there are regular patrols by traffic police, so congestion and unsafe driving are uncommon.

× Yes, absolutely. There were many crosswalks from where I live.

✓ Yes, absolutely. There are many crosswalks near where I live.

The student used past tense 'were' which implies the crosswalks existed only in the past. The question asks about the area where the student currently lives, so present tense 'are' is required. Also 'from where I live' is unnatural; use 'near where I live' or 'around where I live' to indicate location. Suggestion: use present simple for current facts (there are) and 'near/around where I live' for location.

× I think not because everything is properly set up by traffic.

✓ I don't think so because traffic is properly managed.

The original sentence is awkward and uses 'set up by traffic' which is ungrammatical. The phrase 'I think not' is not the natural response to 'Is there anything you would like to change...'; 'I don't think so' is preferred. Also 'set up by traffic' incorrectly uses 'set up' and the agent; 'traffic is properly managed' or 'traffic systems are properly set up' are correct alternatives. Suggestion: use 'I don't think so' for negation of that question and rephrase the clause to a passive or active structure that correctly expresses management of traffic.

× Traffic police are all under cameras.

✓ All traffic police are monitored by cameras.

The phrase 'under cameras' is an incorrect prepositional choice. Use 'monitored by cameras' or 'are under CCTV surveillance' to express that cameras record or watch them. Also 'Traffic police are all' is unnatural word order; 'All traffic police are...' is better. Suggestion: use 'monitored by cameras' or 'under camera surveillance' to convey intended meaning.