聚会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid vague phrases like 'have lost', and use correct grammar. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy parties because they allow me to relax and have fun. For instance, I can indulge in treats like cake, which I usually avoid to maintain my diet. Therefore, parties are a special occasion where I can enjoy myself without worries.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains repetition and grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid repeating words, and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Provide specific details about frequency and reasons.

示例: When I was a child, I rarely attended parties because my parents wanted me to focus on my studies. As a result, I was not allowed to go out with friends often, which limited my chances to join social events.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Be sure to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar, and provide specific details. Avoid vague phrases like '80s birthday' and explain clearly what you mean.

示例: Yes, I have organised a party before. For example, I arranged a special celebration for my 80th birthday because it was an important milestone. It was the first formal party I had ever organised myself.

× in party we could have lost

✓ at parties we could have fun

The phrase 'in party' is incorrect because 'party' is a countable noun and needs an article or plural form. Also, 'have lost' is incorrect in this context; likely the student meant to say 'have fun' or 'do things'. The correct phrase is 'at parties we could have fun' to express the idea of enjoying parties.

× You could do anything you can't do in daily life

✓ You can do things you can't do in daily life

The modal verb 'could' suggests past ability or possibility, but here the student is talking generally about parties, so 'can' is more appropriate to express general ability or possibility.

× I couldn't eat a cake because I need to lose weight, but I can eat so many in a party

✓ I couldn't eat cake because I needed to lose weight, but I can eat a lot at a party

'A cake' is singular and countable, but usually 'eat cake' is uncountable when referring to cake in general. Also, 'so many' is used with countable plural nouns, but 'cake' is uncountable here, so 'a lot' is better. 'In a party' should be 'at a party' because 'at' is the correct preposition for events.

× at that time I I attended quality seldom

✓ at that time I seldom attended parties

The word 'quality' is incorrect here; likely the student meant 'parties'. Also, the adverb 'seldom' should be placed before the verb 'attended' for correct word order. The sentence should be 'I seldom attended parties'.

× just focus my learning

✓ just focus on my learning

The verb 'focus' requires the preposition 'on' when followed by a noun. Therefore, 'focus my learning' is incorrect; it should be 'focus on my learning'.

× my friend, because my parents asked me to study hard

✓ my friends, because my parents asked me to study hard

The plural 'friends' is more appropriate here because the student refers to going out with multiple friends.

× I organized a first party for myself

✓ I organized my first party for myself

The phrase 'a first party' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'my first party' to indicate the first party the student organized.

× I actually haven't a formal party before

✓ I actually haven't had a formal party before

The verb 'have' in the present perfect negative form requires the past participle 'had'. 'Haven't a formal party' is incorrect; it should be 'haven't had a formal party'.