聚会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現があり、より自然で簡潔な表現に改善できます。例えば、"I had never participated in parties before I came to France" のように言い換え、感想も簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。

示例: Yes, I like parties. Before I came to France, I had never attended any parties, so this was my first experience, and I found it really enjoyable.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、"I had a party once a week, usually on Fridays because the next day was the weekend" のように言い換え、理由と楽しんだことを明確に述べると良いでしょう。

示例: When I was a kid, I had a party once a week, usually on Fridays because the next day was the weekend. I really enjoyed spending time with my friends and family during those parties.

建议: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや口語的な表現があります。例えば、"I haven't organized a party myself, but my family used to organize one for me and my sister every year" と言い換え、将来の計画も丁寧に述べると良いでしょう。

示例: No, I haven't organized a party myself. However, my family used to organize a party for me and my sister every year, which was very memorable. I hope to organize parties for my children in the future.

× However, until I came to France in Europe, I had never participated in the parties.

✓ However, until I came to France in Europe, I had never participated in parties.

The use of 'the parties' is incorrect here because it refers to specific parties previously mentioned, but the sentence is talking about parties in general. Removing 'the' corrects the article usage.

× So this is my this was my first time I joined the party in Europe, but I think it is awesome, so awesome for me.

✓ So this was my first time joining a party in Europe, and I think it was awesome for me.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly and has awkward phrasing. 'This is my this was my' is redundant and incorrect. Using past tense consistently and changing 'I joined the party' to 'joining a party' improves fluency and correctness.

× When I was a kid I had a party, one party a week.

✓ When I was a kid, I had one party a week.

The phrase 'I had a party, one party a week' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'I had one party a week' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× It was had in every Friday because the next day is weekend.

✓ It was held every Friday because the next day was the weekend.

The verb 'had' is incorrect here; 'held' is the correct verb for events. Also, 'in every Friday' should be 'every Friday' without 'in'. Additionally, 'the next day is weekend' should be past tense 'was the weekend' and include the article 'the' before 'weekend'.

× So I enjoyed these times with my friends, my family.

✓ So I enjoyed those times with my friends and my family.

'These times' refers to present or near present, but the context is past, so 'those times' is more appropriate. Also, 'my friends, my family' should be connected with 'and' for clarity.

× No, I haven't. I however, my family used to organize a party for me or for my sister every year.

✓ No, I haven't. However, my family used to organize a party for me or my sister every year.

The sentence is missing a conjunction or proper punctuation after 'I haven't'. Starting the next sentence with 'However' and removing the comma after 'I' improves clarity and correctness.

× It was one of the memorable events for me and I wanna organize party for my children in the future.

✓ It was one of the most memorable events for me, and I want to organize parties for my children in the future.

'Wanna' is informal and should be replaced with 'want to' in formal speech. 'Organize party' is incorrect; it should be 'organize parties' to match plural form. Also, adding 'most' before 'memorable' is more natural.