聚会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevabınızda bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam belirsizlikleri var. "Potty" kelimesi yanlış kullanılmış ve cümleniz doğal değil. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde bağlaçlar eksik ve cümle yapıları daha akıcı olabilir. Cümlenizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için basit ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

示例: Yes, I love parties very much. I usually host a party at my house once a year with four or five friends. During the party, we buy chips, chocolates, and sodas to enjoy together.

建议: Cümlenizde zaman uyumu ve dilbilgisi hataları mevcut. "Don't give a don't have a party" ifadesi anlam açısından karışık. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde bağlaçlar ve daha net ifadeler kullanarak anlatımınızı güçlendirebilirsiniz.

示例: When I was a child, I usually didn't have parties at my house. Instead, I went to my friends' parties. Also, I often celebrated my birthday at my friends' homes because I didn't like my own house very much.

建议: Cümleniz oldukça karışık ve bazı kısımlar tamamlanmamış. Zaman ifadeleri ve cümle yapıları düzeltilmeli. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha açık ve mantıklı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız.

示例: I have never organized a party myself, but my mother has always arranged them for me. In fact, I will have a party at my home with my friends in two days. The last party was after we returned from abroad.

× I give potty once in a year in my house with my friends.

✓ I give a party once a year in my house with my friends.

The word 'potty' is incorrect; the correct word is 'party'. Also, 'once in a year' should be 'once a year' for natural English usage.

× We usually four or five person in.

✓ We are usually four or five people.

The word 'person' should be plural 'people' when referring to more than one individual. Also, the sentence structure needs 'are' to be grammatically correct.

× In a party we buy some chips, some chocolates and sodas.

✓ At a party, we buy some chips, chocolates, and sodas.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'at' is used for events. Also, 'some' is unnecessary before each item; listing them naturally is better.

× When I was a child I usually don't give a don't have a party in my house.

✓ When I was a child, I usually didn't have a party in my house.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't' with past time 'when I was a child'. The correct past tense negative form is 'didn't have'.

× I go my friend's parties and when my birthday comes I usually have my birthday in my friends homes because when I was a kid I hated my house a lot.

✓ I went to my friends' parties, and when my birthday came, I usually had my birthday at my friends' homes because when I was a kid, I hated my house a lot.

The verbs should be in past tense to match 'when I was a kid'. Also, possessive form 'friends'' needs an apostrophe, and 'homes' should be singular or plural consistently.

× I didn't, but my mother organized all of my parties even right now, because two days after two days I will have a party in my home and I will be with my friends.

✓ I haven't, but my mother has organized all of my parties even until now, because in two days I will have a party at my home and I will be with my friends.

The present perfect tense 'haven't' fits better for experience. 'Even right now' is better expressed as 'even until now'. 'Two days after two days' is redundant; 'in two days' is correct. Preposition 'at' is used for locations.

× Last time after we going abroad some of.

✓ Last time, after we went abroad, some of us...

The sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'After we going' should be 'after we went' (past tense). The sentence needs completion for clarity.