聚会— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally relevant but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'which had truly cherries' and 'strength. My relationship'. Try to use clearer expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, definitely. I really enjoy attending parties because they give me a chance to spend quality time with my friends and family. For example, during celebrations, we share stories and create unforgettable memories. These gatherings help me relax and strengthen my relationships with loved ones.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to form complete sentences and use correct verb forms. Also, avoid redundancy and be more concise. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: When I was a kid, I was not allowed to attend parties with my friends because my family was very strict. They always told me that parties were not good for children, so I mostly avoided going to them.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing like 'for enjoy the moments' and 'With cherish moment'. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating words and keep your answer concise and coherent.

示例: Yes, I have organized a party for my birthday celebration. I invited my friends and family to enjoy the moments with me and celebrate my special day together. It was a cherished moment for all of us.

× For instance, during celebrations we share stories and create unforgettable memories which had truly cherries.

✓ For instance, during celebrations we share stories and create unforgettable memories which are truly cherished.

The phrase 'which had truly cherries' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'which are truly cherished' to express that the memories are valued. 'Cherished' is the past participle used as an adjective here, and 'had' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.

× This gathering help me relax and strength.

✓ This gathering helps me relax and strengthens my relationship with loved ones.

The subject 'This gathering' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' instead of 'help'. Also, 'strength' is a noun; the correct verb form is 'strengthens' to indicate the action of making the relationship stronger.

× My relationship with loved ones.

✓ My relationship with loved ones improves.

The sentence lacks a verb, making it incomplete. Adding a verb like 'improves' completes the sentence and conveys the intended meaning.

× When I was kid I was not allowed to go for parties with my friends because my family was so strict and they always taught me that parties are not good for the kids.

✓ When I was a kid, I was not allowed to go to parties with my friends because my family was so strict and they always taught me that parties are not good for kids.

The phrase 'When I was kid' is missing the article 'a' before 'kid'. Also, 'go for parties' should be 'go to parties' as the correct preposition is 'to' when referring to attending events. 'The kids' is better as 'kids' in general.

× So I. Mostly avoid to go in a party.

✓ So I mostly avoided going to parties.

The sentence is fragmented and incorrectly structured. 'Avoid to go' is incorrect; the correct form is 'avoid going'. Also, 'in a party' should be 'to parties'. The past tense 'avoided' fits the context of past habits.

× Yes, I have organized a party on my birthday celebration and I had invited my friends and family members for enjoy the moments with me and also also celebrate the birthday of mine.

✓ Yes, I have organized a party for my birthday celebration and I invited my friends and family members to enjoy the moments with me and also celebrate my birthday.

The phrase 'had invited' is past perfect, which is unnecessary here; simple past 'invited' is appropriate. 'For enjoy' should be 'to enjoy' as the infinitive form is needed. 'Also also' is a repetition error. 'Celebrate the birthday of mine' is better as 'celebrate my birthday'.

× With cherish moment.

✓ It was a cherished moment.

'With cherish moment' is incorrect. The correct form is 'It was a cherished moment' where 'cherished' is an adjective describing the noun 'moment'.