历史— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to make your response more concise and structured by directly answering the question first, then adding specific details. Avoid redundancy and ensure sentences are complete and connected logically.

示例: Yes, I studied history at school as it was a compulsory subject. I found it challenging to memorise many names and events because our country has a rich ancient history. However, learning these helped me understand our culture better.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organise your ideas clearly, use linking words to connect points, and be specific about the methods you use to learn history.

示例: At school, I learned the basics of history through lessons and discussions. Additionally, my family and I often watch historical documentaries together, which deepens my understanding. Nowadays, I also use the internet and social media to access a wide range of historical information.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and precise vocabulary. Use linking words to connect your points and explain your ideas more clearly with specific examples or reasons.

示例: I believe learning history is important because it gives us a sense of belonging and identity. Moreover, by understanding past events, people can learn valuable lessons since history often repeats itself, which helps prevent making the same mistakes.

建议: Your response is somewhat unclear and contains incomplete sentences. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use appropriate vocabulary. Also, avoid vague phrases and provide specific reasons to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, I think learning history is very important, especially in today's fast-paced world. Although some people find it challenging, understanding history helps us learn from past experiences and avoid repeating mistakes.

× Yes, during school time we had lots of subject and it was a compulsory subject during school time.

✓ Yes, during school time we had lots of subjects and it was a compulsory subject during school time.

The word 'subject' should be plural 'subjects' because it refers to multiple items. Using the singular form here is incorrect when talking about more than one subject.

× It was really difficult to memorize the name of a lot of people.

✓ It was really difficult to memorize the names of a lot of people.

The word 'name' should be plural 'names' because it refers to multiple people. When referring to more than one person, the plural form is required.

× Since we live in ancient country.

✓ Since we live in an ancient country.

The sentence is incomplete and missing an article before 'ancient country'. Adding 'an' makes the sentence grammatically correct and complete.

× We had lots of events during that time.

✓ We had lots of events during that time.

This sentence is correct as 'events' is plural and matches 'lots of'. No correction needed.

× It was really horrifying for us on.

✓ It was really horrifying for us.

The preposition 'on' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. Removing it makes the sentence correct.

× During your school time, we had the opportunity to learn about the basic things about history and after that we could watch lots of the humanity with our families.

✓ During our school time, we had the opportunity to learn about the basic things about history and after that we could watch lots about humanity with our families.

The pronoun 'your' should be 'our' to match the speaker's perspective. Also, 'watch lots of the humanity' is incorrect; it should be 'watch lots about humanity' or 'learn about humanity'.

× So it's raised our knowledge about the history.

✓ So it raised our knowledge about history.

The phrase 'it's raised' is incorrect here; the past tense 'it raised' fits better. Also, 'the history' should be 'history' without 'the'.

× Nowadays we can use our cell phones and Internet and social media to get lots of and vast information about his.

✓ Nowadays we can use our cell phones, the Internet, and social media to get lots of vast information about this.

'Internet' should have the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'lots of and vast information' is awkward; 'lots of vast information' is better. 'his' is incorrect and should be 'this'.

× Actually, I believe that it's really important to study history because it's a producer sense of belonging and identity.

✓ Actually, I believe that it's really important to study history because it produces a sense of belonging and identity.

The word 'producer' is incorrect here; the verb 'produces' fits the sentence. The phrase 'a producer sense' is incorrect; it should be 'a sense'.

× The other thing that I like to mention is that it's really important for most people around the world.

✓ Another thing that I would like to mention is that it's really important for most people around the world.

The phrase 'The other thing that I like to mention' is awkward; 'Another thing that I would like to mention' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× They can get lots of precious experience and history repeat itself.

✓ They can get lots of precious experience and history repeats itself.

The verb 'repeat' should be in third person singular form 'repeats' to agree with the singular subject 'history'.

× I believe that, and they can prevent loss.

✓ I believe that, and we can prevent loss.

The pronoun 'they' is unclear and inconsistent; 'we' fits better to include the speaker and listeners.

× Some people don't like great history because they prefer to face with lots of challenging.

✓ Some people don't like great history because they prefer not to face lots of challenges.

The phrase 'prefer to face with' is incorrect; 'prefer not to face' is correct. Also, 'lots of challenging' should be 'lots of challenges'.

× But I believe that history repeats itself and also we can learn, purchase and precise experience and it's prevent lots of.

✓ But I believe that history repeats itself and also we can learn, acquire, and preserve experience, and it prevents a lot of problems.

The verbs 'purchase' and 'precise' are incorrect here; 'acquire' and 'preserve' are appropriate. 'It's prevent' should be 'it prevents'. The sentence was incomplete and unclear, so it was restructured for clarity.