礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更直接、简洁，减少犹豫语（如 “umm”）并用一两句补充原因和例子。可以用一开始的主题句表明立场，然后用具体细节说明家庭习惯如何影响你。注意语法（例如时态和冠词）。

示例: Not really. My family rarely exchanges gifts, even on birthdays or festivals, so I haven't practised giving them. As a result, I often feel unsure about what to choose.

建议: 回答要更连贯并注意时态和词序（用过去式描述过去事件）。避免重复，提供具体细节并用连接词把句子串起来，说明你选择礼物的原因和对方的反应。

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions. Last month I bought my brother a figurine of a Japanese anime character because he collects them, and he was really happy when he opened it.

建议: 答案表达清晰但略重复。可以用一句主题句说明首要考虑，再补充具体标准（兴趣、实用性或预算），使用连接词让内容更丰富和有条理。

示例: My main consideration is whether the recipient will like it. I usually think about their hobbies and needs, and I also consider whether the gift is practical and within my budget.

建议: 回答要简洁并纠正语法错误（如“hand me”应为“make”或“give”）；减少犹豫词，说明是否有计划以及具体细节（材料、风格、时间）。这样的细节能提高分数。

示例: Not yet, but I plan to. My mother loves reading, so I want to make her a handmade fabric book cover with a floral pattern and a small pocket for bookmarks.

建议: 观点明确但表达不够流畅。简化句子并用连接词展开理由（例如举例或对比），纠正语法（subject-verb agreement），避免重复词。

示例: No, not necessarily. I believe a thoughtful or personalised gift shows your feelings more than an expensive one; for example, a handwritten letter or a customised photo frame can mean more than an expensive item.

× Actually, I'm not good at giving gifts because umm, in my family we don't have the habits of giving gifts to others even in any festivals or anyone's birthday.

✓ Actually, I'm not good at giving gifts because, in my family, we don't have the habit of giving gifts to others, even on festivals or anyone's birthday.

句子中“habits”与后文的表达不一致，英语中常用单数形式“the habit of doing something”来表示某一家庭或人通常不做某事；另外介词搭配应为“on festivals”或“on someone's birthday”。建议使用单数“habit”，并把“in any festivals”改为“on festivals”，使表达更地道。

× Last time when last month when my brother's birthday, I have gave him a birthday gift.

✓ Last month, for my brother's birthday, I gave him a birthday gift.

句中同时使用了时间状语“last month”与现在完成时“have gave”造成时态和形式错误；正确的过去式是“gave”，而且不能和现在完成时助动词“have”连用。应使用简单过去时“gave”并删去多余的“when”。

× It's like a figures of an Japanese enemy.

✓ It's like a figure of a Japanese enemy.

“figures”是复数，而前面用不定冠词“a”应对应单数“figure”。另外“an Japanese”错误，元音前用“an”，辅音“J”前应使用“a”。因此改为“a figure of a Japanese enemy”。

× He likes the Japanese enemy very much and he was quite happy and feeling good.

✓ He likes the Japanese enemy very much, and he was quite happy and felt good.

句中混用了现在时“likes”与过去时“was”。这里叙述的是过去收到礼物时的反应，应把感受也用过去时，所以“feeling good”改为过去式“felt good”。此外“feeling good”在此位置需用谓语过去式。

× He was the gift.

✓ He liked the gift.

原句“He was the gift.”结构不通，语义错误。想表达的是“他喜欢那份礼物”或“那份礼物让他开心”，应改为“He liked the gift.”以符合英语表达习惯。

× I think, I hope the the one who received the gift would feel happy and delighted after receiving my gifts.

✓ I hope the person who receives the gift would feel happy and delighted after receiving my gift.

重复词“the the”需删除；“the one who received”时态和后文不一致，应使用一般现在或将来时“the person who receives”或“will receive”。“gifts”应与上下文一致改为单数“gift”或保持一致数。建议使用“the person who receives the gift”。

× And that's the main reason for me to give out a a gift.

✓ And that's the main reason for me to give a gift.

有重复词“a a”，且短语“give out a gift”冗余，常用“give a gift”。删去重复并使用“give a gift”。

× Yeah. To make him or her feel happy.

✓ Yeah. To make the recipient feel happy.

“him or her”可以被接受，但更自然的表达是“the recipient”或“them”以避免重复性别表述。建议使用“the recipient”或单数they（if acceptable）。

× Actually no, because I haven't thought that so I would try.

✓ Actually no, because I haven't thought about it, so I haven't tried.

原句“haven't thought that”搭配错误，应为“haven't thought about it”。另外“so I would try”时态和意义不明确；如果想表达到目前为止没尝试，应用现在完成时“haven't tried”。

× I really want to hand me some some useful tools, umm and give it to my mom because she likes reading very much and I will try to make a handmade book cover to her.

✓ I really want to make some useful things and give them to my mom because she likes reading very much, and I will try to make a handmade book cover for her.

“hand me”用法错误，意为“把……给我”，应改为“make”或“hand to”；重复“some some”需删除。“useful tools”在此语境可以改为“useful things”。短语“make a handmade book cover to her”错误，正确介词为“for her”。因此改为“make some useful things and give them to my mom”并用“for her”。

× Do expensive gifts better express your feelings?

✓ Do expensive gifts better express your feelings? (或: Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?)

原问句语序略显不自然，推荐把副词“better”放在动词之后或保留原句的可接受结构。最好形式为“Do expensive gifts express your feelings better?” 更符合英语习惯。

× I don't think so because giving a gift is more to to tell others your your attitude that you wants to make him or her feeling appreciate but not umm judge by the value of.

✓ I don't think so, because giving a gift is more about showing your attitude that you want to make someone feel appreciated, not judging by its value.

句中有重复词“to to”，“your your”需删除。动词“wants”与主语“you”不一致，应为“want”。短语“feeling appreciate”错误，正确为“feel appreciated”。结尾“judge by the value of”结构不完整，应为“not judging by its value”或“not being judged by its value”。建议重整为上面修正句子。