礼物— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Use correct verb forms and reduce repetition.

示例: I try to be thoughtful when giving gifts. For example, I ask about the person’s interests and choose something useful, so they can enjoy it rather than just keeping it on a shelf.

建议: Give a full sentence as a topic sentence and add a short explanation or example using a linking word. Avoid listing without context.

示例: I usually give gifts on special occasions such as Onam and Christmas. For instance, I often buy small presents for family members during these festivals to celebrate together.

建议: Organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons with linking words. Correct awkward phrases and avoid unfinished sentences. Be concise (max 5 sentences).

示例: When choosing a gift, I focus on the recipient’s preferences and practicality. Because I want the gift to be used, I often research their hobbies and pick something useful, which usually makes them excited.

建议: This answer is quite good but can be improved by condensing and adding a linking phrase to show sequence. Correct small grammar errors ("last year" not "on last year").

示例: Yes. Last year during a trip to India I bought a handmade bag that was unique and cost about ₹1,000, so I gave it to my mother and she was very happy with it.

建议: Provide a direct opinion sentence followed by one clear reason using a linking word. Fix grammar and awkward phrasing ("those who receive gifts"; "I don't judge gifts by price").

示例: No, I don't think expensive gifts express feelings better. In my view, people value the thought behind a gift more than its price, so I prefer meaningful or useful presents rather than costly ones.

× I don't know about that, but I'm always try to get the gifts that they like because I always check what they like and dislike and I try to buy something useful for them.

✓ I don't know about that, but I always try to get gifts that they like because I always check what they like and dislike and try to buy something useful for them.

The phrase 'always try' must use the base verb 'try' after 'always' with the subject 'I'. The original had an extra auxiliary 'am' ('I'm always try') which is incorrect; use simple present 'I always try'. Also remove the extra 'the' before 'gifts' for natural plural use. Suggestion: use 'I always try to' + base verb for habitual actions.

× Especially on occasions like Onam, Christmas, birthday parties and wedding parties.

✓ I usually give gifts on occasions such as Onam, Christmas, birthdays and weddings.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. It lists occasions but does not answer the question in full sentence form. Also 'birthday parties and wedding parties' is wordy; use 'birthdays and weddings' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: include subject and verb to make a complete sentence.

× I always try to find what they like and dislike so it might take long time but my gifts are useful though for them I am 100% sure about it maybe.

✓ I always try to find out what they like and dislike, so it might take a long time, but my gifts are useful; I am 100% sure of that.

Use 'find out' (phrasal verb) to mean discover preferences. 'Take long time' needs an article: 'take a long time'. 'Sure about it maybe' is awkward; replace with 'I am 100% sure of that'. Also add commas to separate clauses and improve clarity.

× I can make them more lighted and thrilled after the gift. That's why I.

✓ I can make them feel happier and more excited with the gift. That's why I do it.

'More lighted' is unidiomatic; use 'feel happier' or 'more excited'. The fragment 'That's why I.' is incomplete; add 'do it' to finish the thought. Suggestion: use standard adjectives 'happy' and 'excited' and complete the sentence.

× Yes, on last year when I went to India for my vacation, I saw one handmade bag.

✓ Yes, last year when I went to India for my vacation, I saw a handmade bag.

Use 'last year' without the preposition 'on'. 'One handmade bag' is awkward; use 'a handmade bag'. Maintain past tense 'went' and 'saw' correctly.

× It was a rare piece and it cost around ₹1000 for just a bag.

✓ It was a rare piece and it cost around ₹1000 for just a bag.

Sentence is mostly acceptable, but 'for just a bag' is slightly informal; consider 'for a single bag' or omit 'for' and say 'it cost around ₹1000' to be cleaner. No major grammar change required.

× But it was looking good. So I presented that to my mom and she felt very joyful after.

✓ But it looked good, so I gave it to my mom and she felt very joyful afterward.

Use simple past 'looked' rather than 'was looking' for a completed action. 'Presented that to my mom' is formal; 'gave it to my mom' is more natural. Use 'afterward' instead of 'after' to indicate subsequent feeling.

× No, I don't think so because those who receiving gifts, they won't think about money.

✓ No, I don't think so because those who receive gifts don't think about money.

Use the base verb 'receive' after 'those who'. Remove the redundant pronoun 'they' because the clause already expresses the subject. Also use present simple for general truth: 'don't think'.

× From my perspective, I'm not the kind of person who validating gifts based on money, so I don't think so.

✓ From my perspective, I'm not the kind of person who evaluates gifts based on their cost, so I don't think so.

'Who validating' is incorrect; after 'who' use a verb in correct form 'evaluates' (third person singular) to agree with 'person'. Alternatively use relative clause 'who evaluates gifts'. Replace 'based on money' with 'based on their cost' for clarity.