网站— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答总体清晰且相关，但存在用词错误（例如“opposite”应为“website”或“site”），句子可更简洁自然；可以用1个主题句 + 1–2个具体细节，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。注意避免重复“basketball”过多。

示例: I often visit a sports website called The Pioneer of Basketball. It covers the latest news, player stories and game analyses, so I can keep up with transfers and match highlights when I don’t have time to watch full games.

建议: 回答明确且信息具体，但句子略冗长且有重复（例如“website”与“basketball”多次出现）。可以用更自然的连接词并给出一两个具体示例来丰富细节。

示例: My favourite website is The Pioneer of Basketball, a site that publishes player interviews, match reports and transfer news. For example, it recently posted an in-depth profile of a rising player and a detailed summary of last week’s big game.

建议: 结构清楚、回答直接，但可以合并句子使表达更流畅，并提供具体例子说明“less attractive”（例如少了深度分析或视频）。使用连接词提升连贯性。

示例: Yes. First, some sections now require a small subscription fee. Second, the content seems less engaging than before—there are fewer in-depth analyses and more short news snippets.

建议: 回答主题明确但重复严重（多次提到“shopping websites”），句型较单一。建议用一到两句概括并加入具体例子或原因（例如促销活动、便利性）。控制句子数量并使用连接词。

示例: Shopping websites are extremely popular in my country because they offer convenience, frequent discounts and fast delivery. For example, many people use multiple platforms to compare prices during big sales like Singles’ Day.

建议: 回答平衡但有些重复和口语化表述（例如“full of all sorts of information”）。建议给出具体场景说明何时用网站何时用书，并使用连接词使原因更清晰。

示例: I prefer both: I use websites for quick updates or practical tutorials because they’re fast, while I turn to books for in-depth study and reliable references when I need thorough explanations.

建议: 回答目的明确且有具体动机，但句子略重复（例如多次说明分享材料）。可以补充网站形式或目标受众并用一两句说明计划如何组织内容。

示例: Yes. I’d like to create a personal site to share my teaching materials and classroom tips with other educators and students. I plan to organize lessons by topic and upload downloadable resources and video demonstrations.

建议: 内容具体但结尾“ I purchase online.”突兀且不明确，应说明购买了什么或去掉。回答可用更连贯的结构，列举2个具体实例并解释收获。

示例: Websites have taught me practical skills: I learn Japanese through online courses that include exercises and quizzes, and I improve my basketball techniques by watching short tutorial videos that demonstrate drills and shooting form.

× I often visit one opposite called the Pioneer of Basketball.

✓ I often visit a site called The Pioneer of Basketball.

原句中使用了短语 "one opposite"，这是不正确的搭配。应该用名词 site 或 website 来指代网站，并用不定冠词 a 引出名称。建议使用固定搭配 "visit a site/website called ..."。

× I also like to catch the latest information about what's going on in the basketball field.

✓ I also like to catch the latest information about what's going on in the basketball world.

“basketball field”通常指具体的体育场地，而不是指篮球界的新闻或动态。表示行业或領域时应使用 “the basketball world”。中文建议：将“basketball field”改为“basketball world/界”。

× one of my favorite websites is called the Pioneer of Basketball, which is a website providing all sorts of information about what's going on in the basketball world.

✓ One of my favorite websites is called The Pioneer of Basketball, which is a website providing all sorts of information about what's going on in the basketball world.

句首应大写“One”。此外，网站名称前的定冠词 The 若为名称一部分应大写以示区分。中文建议：句首首字母大写，专有名称按惯例大写。

× For example, it tells people stories about basketball players, games and the transactions.

✓ For example, it tells people stories about basketball players, games and transactions.

“the transactions”在此并不指特定的交易，使用定冠词不恰当，应去掉“the”。中文建议：当泛指时不要使用定冠词“the”。

× Yes, there are actually 2 changes.

✓ Yes, there are actually two changes.

数字书写与风格问题：在正式书面表达中应将阿拉伯数字写为单词（two），此外更地道的表达可以是“There have actually been two changes”表示变化已经发生（见下条）。中文建议：正式语境中将数字写成单词，并根据上下文考虑时态。

× The first change is that some sections are going to charge a small amount of subscription fee.

✓ The first change is that some sections are going to start charging a small subscription fee.

原句中“are going to charge a small amount of subscription fee”搭配不自然，通常说“start charging a small subscription fee”或“will charge a small subscription fee”。中文建议：使用固定搭配“start charging”或直接说“will charge”，并用“a small subscription fee”更地道。

× Another change is that I think the content is less attractive than before.

✓ Another change is that I think the content is less attractive than before.

句子语法本身无大错，但可更地道地使用“the content has become less attractive than before”以突出变化发生。此处标注为提示性质，中文建议：可用完成时强调变化："内容变得不如以前有吸引力"。

× one kind of website that is particularly popular among Chinese people is the shopping websites.

✓ One kind of website that is particularly popular among Chinese people is shopping websites.

原句中主谓结构不一致，“one kind of website ... is the shopping websites”中单复数不匹配。应去掉定冠词并保持复数一致，或改为“one kind of website ... is the shopping website”。中文建议：保持单复数一致：若谓语指一类事物，后面用复数泛指。

× Nearly all people around me visit shopping websites.

✓ Nearly everyone/Almost all the people around me visit shopping websites.

“Nearly all people”不太地道，建议用“Nearly everyone”或“Almost all the people”。中文建议：用更自然的表达“几乎我周围的所有人都会访问购物网站”。

× Some of them visit more than one shopping websites and shopping websites are important part of our life.

✓ Some of them visit more than one shopping website, and shopping websites are an important part of our lives.

“more than one shopping websites”中“one”要求后接单数名词，应该是“one shopping website”。另外“important part of our life”需改为“an important part of our lives”以匹配可数且使用复数所有格。中文建议：注意“more than one”后名词应为单数，并将“our life”改为“our lives”。

× Actually, I prefer using both.

✓ Actually, I prefer using both of them.

原句“prefer using both”略显不完整，应明确指代“both of them（websites and books）”。中文建议：补全指代对象，用“both of them/ both books and websites”。

× Sometimes I obtain information by visiting websites because it's really quick and popular.

✓ Sometimes I obtain information by visiting websites because it's really quick and convenient.

“popular”用于描述网站受欢迎，而不是信息获取的速度或方式。此处应使用“convenient”或“quick”。中文建议：根据语义选择正确形容词，例如“快捷/方便”。

× Besides, it is full of all sorts of information that can satisfy my needs.

✓ Besides, it is full of all sorts of information that can satisfy my needs.

句子语法基本正确，仅作为确认。可选改为“it is full of information that meets my needs”。中文建议：可以用“满足我的需求”更地道。

× I work as a teacher at a sector school.

✓ I work as a teacher at a secondary school.

“sector school”不是常见用法，推测为“secondary school（中学）”。如果原意为某类学校，应使用正确名词。中文建议：确认原意并用正确学校类别词。

× I have enough teaching materials and experience that I want to share.

✓ I have enough teaching materials and experience that I want to share with others.

原句缺少受词，动词“share”需一个宾语或宾语短语，补上“with others”使句意完整。中文建议：动词“share”后加上与之共享的对象，如“with others”。

× Actually, I have learned quite a lot since from visiting websites.

✓ Actually, I have learned quite a lot from visiting websites.

原句中“since”与句子其余部分搭配不当，去掉“since”即可。若想用“since”需加时间点如“since I started visiting websites”。中文建议：去掉多余的“since”，或补全“since”的时间点。

× For example, I learn Japanese from online courses and learn how to play basketball by watching short videos online.

✓ For example, I have learned Japanese from online courses and learned how to play basketball by watching short videos online.

语境为过去一段时间内通过网站学到的东西，应使用现在完成时或过去时来表示已学会的动作。把动词改为完成时（have learned）或过去时（learned）更合适。中文建议：根据语境用现在完成时表示从过去到现在的经历。

× I purchase online.

✓ I purchase things online.

原句虽可理解但过于简略。补足宾语“things”使句子更完整自然，也可说“I buy things online”。中文建议：加上宾语，例如“我在网上购买物品”。