朋友— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. For example, use 'I have known her since grade 5' instead of 'I know her since grade 5'. Also, avoid redundancy and improve fluency by combining ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I have a friend whom I've known since grade 5. Our parents are friends, and we became close because we share the same interests. She is very kind, and I always try to be kind to her in return.

建议: Use more natural expressions and correct grammar. Instead of 'chit chatting', say 'chatting'. Also, explain your ideas clearly and avoid vague phrases like 'we suffer everything together'.

示例: Usually, my friends and I chat, go for walks, or study together in groups. We enjoy spending time because we support each other through difficult times.

建议: Improve subject-verb agreement and sentence structure. Use 'My friends and I often meet at school' instead of 'Me and my friends are often meet each other at school'. Also, clarify your ideas with linking words.

示例: My friends and I often meet at school because we attend every day. One of my friends is in the same class as me, so we are lucky to see each other often.

建议: Use correct tenses and clearer sentence structure. For example, say 'I used to go out with my friends often, but now that we are in grade 11, we have to focus on creating portfolios for university and studying harder, so we don't hang out as much.'

示例: I used to go out with my friends often, but now that we are in grade 11, we need to focus on preparing university portfolios and studying more, so we don't hang out as frequently.

建议: Try to organize your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect sentences. Also, clarify your meaning, for example, explain 'I have to trust' more fully.

示例: Friends are very important to me because they support me in achieving my goals. However, I also value myself and understand that I cannot spend all my time with them, so I need to trust myself as well.

建议: Use consistent tenses and clearer linking words. For example, say 'I prefer spending time with one friend because I feel I get more attention, but I also enjoy being with a group of friends.' Avoid calling your preference 'selfish' as it may sound negative.

示例: I prefer spending time with one friend because I feel I get more attention, but I also enjoy spending time with groups of friends.

建议: Use more natural expressions and correct grammar. For example, say 'I would invite my best friends to my home because I want them to have fun and enjoy themselves. I often visit my friends' houses, so I want to return their kindness and spend quality time together.'

示例: I would invite my best friends to my home because I want them to have fun and enjoy themselves. Since I often visit their houses, I want to return the kindness and spend quality time with them.

× I know her since grade 5.

✓ I have known her since grade 5.

The sentence requires the present perfect tense to indicate an action that started in the past and continues to the present. 'I know' is simple present, which is incorrect here. Use 'have known' instead.

× we became close because of we have same interest

✓ we became close because we have the same interests

The phrase 'because of' should be followed by a noun or noun phrase, not a clause. Also, 'same interest' should be plural 'same interests' and 'the' is needed before 'same interests'.

× she she's really nice

✓ she's really nice

The phrase 'she she's' is redundant. Only one subject pronoun is needed. Remove the extra 'she'.

× I was being nice to her back for the return.

✓ I was nice to her in return.

The phrase 'was being nice' is awkward here; simple past 'was nice' is better. Also, 'for the return' is incorrect; use 'in return' to express reciprocation.

× Things I usually do with my friends are talking, chit chatting and going for a walk or even study in a group like studying group.

✓ Things I usually do with my friends are talking, chit-chatting, going for a walk, or even studying in a study group.

Parallel structure requires all items in the list to be in the same form (gerunds). 'Chit chatting' should be hyphenated 'chit-chatting'. 'Study in a group like studying group' is awkward; better to say 'studying in a study group'.

× We had so much fun together because we suffer everything together.

✓ We have so much fun together because we suffer through everything together.

The tense should be present perfect 'have' to indicate ongoing experience. Also, 'suffer everything' is incorrect; use 'suffer through everything' to express enduring difficulties together.

× Me and my friends are often meet each other at school.

✓ My friends and I often meet each other at school.

Subject pronouns should be used ('I' not 'me'). Also, 'are often meet' is incorrect verb form; it should be 'often meet'.

× one of my friend are in the same section as me,

✓ one of my friends is in the same section as me,

'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends' (plural 'friends'). The verb should agree with singular subject 'one', so 'is' not 'are'.

× I and her are very lucky.

✓ She and I are very lucky.

The correct order is 'She and I' as subjects. Also, use subject pronouns 'she' and 'I'.

× which we have to starting to create portfolio for university or studying like studying harder than grade 10

✓ which we have to start creating a portfolio for university or study harder than in grade 10

'Have to starting' is incorrect; use 'have to start'. Also, 'create portfolio' needs an article 'a portfolio'. 'Studying like studying harder' is awkward; better 'study harder'.

× I cannot hang out with them for all the time.

✓ I cannot hang out with them all the time.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here. The phrase should be 'all the time' without 'for'.

× I have to trust.

✓ I have to trust myself.

The verb 'trust' requires an object. 'Trust' alone is incomplete; 'trust myself' clarifies the meaning.

× I feel like I get more attention when I was with one friend.

✓ I feel like I get more attention when I am with one friend.

The tense should be consistent; 'feel' and 'get' are present, so 'was' should be 'am'.

× I want them to feel fun and enjoyable.

✓ I want them to have fun and enjoy themselves.

'Feel fun' is incorrect; 'have fun' is the correct expression. Also, 'enjoyable' is an adjective describing things, not feelings; use 'enjoy themselves'.

× Therefore, I used to go to my friend's house too.

✓ Therefore, I usually go to my friend's house too.

'Used to' implies past habit no longer done. Since context is present, 'usually go' is better.

× So I want to return that kindness back and I want to spend quality time with my friends.

✓ So I want to return that kindness and spend quality time with my friends.

'Return' already implies 'back', so 'back' is redundant. Also, 'I want to' repeated can be omitted for smoother sentence.