广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail (e.g., what made it memorable). Use linking words to sequence ideas.

示例: Yes. A chocolate TV advert made a big impression on me as a child. It had a very catchy jingle and showed a family in the countryside, which felt warm and nostalgic. Because the tune was unique and the visuals were vivid, I remembered the advert after hearing it only once.

建议: Answer directly and tighten grammar. Use one linking phrase to explain why repeated exposure works, and give one concrete example of an ad you notice.

示例: Yes. I often see ads on trains and buses, such as printed posters and digital screens at stations. Because commuters see these ads repeatedly, companies increase brand recall; for instance, I often notice a local coffee chain’s poster near my station every morning.

建议: Combine fragments into a smooth response. Give a clear reason and one specific example of a useful ad. Remove filler and correct verb forms.

示例: Yes. I like ads because they help me discover useful products. For example, while browsing shopping apps I often see targeted suggestions for accessories I need, which saves me time compared with searching manually.

建议: Be precise and avoid hesitation. Use correct vocabulary (jingles, ads) and one clear supporting detail about effect on you. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid repeating the same example twice.

示例: I prefer ads with catchy jingles because a strong tune stays in my head. For example, a chocolate ad’s melody stuck with me after hearing it once, and I still remember it years later.

建议: Clarify meaning and fix grammar. Say how ads appear (targeted based on browsing) and give one clear action you take (e.g., click or ignore). Avoid unclear phrases like “clean the links” or “discover new atoms.”

示例: Yes. I frequently see targeted ads on my phone and computer based on my browsing history. Sometimes I click those ads to learn about new products, although I often ignore ones that are not relevant.

× Oh yes, when I was a child I remember a chocolate advertisement with a very catchy jingles and countryside lyrics.

✓ Oh yes, when I was a child I remember a chocolate advertisement with a very catchy jingle and countryside lyrics.

The noun 'jingles' is plural but the adjective 'a very catchy' requires a singular noun. Use 'jingle' to match the singular article 'a'. For improvement, ensure determiners ('a', 'an', 'the') match singular/plural nouns.

× It made a strong impression on me after I heard it and only once time and I could tell the whole stories and was so unforgettable as stayed for.

✓ It made a strong impression on me after I heard it only once, and I could tell the whole story; it was so unforgettable and stayed with me.

Multiple tense and number errors: 'only once time' is ungrammatical — use 'only once'. 'Whole stories' should be singular 'whole story' because it refers to one advertisement. 'Was so unforgettable as stayed for' is awkward; use 'it was so unforgettable and stayed with me'. For improvement, keep clauses concise, match singular/plural, and use common expressions (e.g., 'stayed with me').

× Yes, I often see advertising on public transport, for example, the bags, printed posters inside the trains and digital screens on the buses and at the stations.

✓ Yes, I often see advertising on public transport, for example on bags, printed posters inside trains, and on digital screens on buses and at stations.

Preposition use was inconsistent: use 'on bags', 'inside trains' (no article with plural 'trains'), 'on buses', and 'at stations' is more natural. For improvement, use 'on' for surfaces and 'inside' for interior spaces; drop unnecessary articles with general plurals.

× This repeated exposure is a really good and effective strategies for companies to let the people see the advertisement many times so that they can remember the products easier.

✓ This repeated exposure is a really good and effective strategy for companies to let people see advertisements many times so that they can remember products more easily.

Mismatch between singular subject 'This repeated exposure' and plural 'strategies' — use singular 'strategy'. 'The people' and 'the advertisement' are unnecessarily definite; use 'people' and 'advertisements' for general statements. 'Easier' modifies verbs incorrectly; use 'more easily'. For improvement, ensure subject-verb and noun-number consistency and prefer adverb forms for verb modification.

× Yes, I like advertisements because they help me to discover new products. When I shopping online.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements because they help me discover new products when I shop online.

Fragment: 'When I shopping online.' lacks a verb form and creates a sentence fragment. Change 'shopping' to 'shop' and attach the clause to the previous sentence to form a complete thought. For improvement, avoid sentence fragments; ensure each clause has a subject and finite verb.

× For example, I usually will browsing the shopping apps and sometimes I will see the ads that recommended the useful items just what I needed so I wouldn't have to find the alternatives otherwise, which makes it easier and more effective to find things.

✓ For example, I usually browse shopping apps and sometimes I see ads that recommend useful items that I need, so I don't have to look for alternatives; this makes it easier and more efficient to find things.

Incorrect verb forms: 'will browsing' should be 'usually browse' (simple present for habitual actions). 'That recommended' should be 'that recommend' to match present habitual context. 'Just what I needed' mixes past tense; use 'that I need'. 'Wouldn't have to' is conditional and not needed; use 'don't have to'. For improvement, use simple present for habitual actions and keep tenses consistent.

× I especially like advertisements with the catching jiggles and strong lyrics, which can leave my mood and leave a strong impression on me.

✓ I especially like advertisements with catchy jingles and strong lyrics, which can lift my mood and leave a strong impression on me.

Use 'catchy' (adjective) not 'catching', and 'jiggles' is misspelling of 'jingles'. 'Leave my mood' is incorrect; use 'lift my mood' or 'improve my mood'. For improvement, choose correct adjective forms and collocations (e.g., 'catchy jingle', 'lift my mood').

× For example, my favorite chocolate adds has such a memorable tune that I heard it just only once.

✓ For example, my favorite chocolate ad has such a memorable tune that I heard it only once.

'Adds' should be 'ad' (singular noun), and 'has' agrees with singular 'ad'. 'Just only once' is redundant; use 'only once'. For improvement, avoid redundant words and use correct singular/plural forms.

× But uh, I've been uh, to remember and seen it for many years.

✓ But I have remembered and seen it for many years.

Incorrect verb forms: 'I've been to remember' is ungrammatical; use present perfect 'I have remembered' to indicate a state continuing to present. 'Seen' needs auxiliary 'have' — 'have seen'. Combine as 'I have remembered and seen it for many years.' For improvement, use present perfect for experiences extending to the present and ensure auxiliary verbs are used with past participles.

× Yes, I often see the advertisements from my digital devices and they are usually based on my history searching and sometimes I clean the links to learn the new products they publish for me and because of the targeted ads of discover new atoms and explore new things.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements on my digital devices; they are usually based on my search history, and sometimes I click the links to learn about new products they promote for me because targeted ads help me discover new items and explore new things.

Prepositions and word choice errors: use 'on my digital devices' not 'from'. 'History searching' should be 'search history'. 'Clean the links' is incorrect; context suggests 'click the links'. 'Publish' is awkward; use 'promote'. 'Atoms' is a typo for 'items'. For improvement, choose proper prepositions, correct collocations ('search history', 'click links'), and check for typos.