广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar, sentence structure and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas. Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

示例: When I was a child, a sports advertisement impressed me because it showed children exercising happily. The ad explained how regular exercise can improve fitness and reduce stress, so I started trying different sports like running and football. Because of that ad, I continued exercising through my school years and felt healthier.

建议: Focus on correct grammar and remove repetition. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then provide one or two specific examples and use linking words (for example, also, moreover). Correct verb tenses and article use (e.g., 'advertisements', 'on planes').

示例: Yes, I see many advertisements on public transport. For example, buses and trains in my city have digital screens showing ads for local businesses and services, and I also noticed posters and video ads on planes during flights.

建议: Make your opinion clear and support it with one or two concise reasons. Use correct grammar and linking words such as because or however. Avoid long, unclear clauses and keep sentences short and direct.

示例: Honestly, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt what I'm doing and waste time. I also think some ads are harmful because they encourage people to buy things they don't need, which can be misleading.

建议: Clarify vocabulary and give specific examples. Use correct plural forms and simpler phrases instead of unclear ones like 'edge advertisements'. Start with a clear topic sentence, then list two specific types with brief reasons.

示例: I prefer informative advertisements, such as those about education, sports programs, or historical documentaries. For instance, an educational ad about online courses helps me learn about new classes, and a sports promotion inspires me to join local teams.

建议: Use correct tense and word order, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific contexts where ads appear. Use linking words (for example, when, so) and express feelings briefly and clearly.

示例: Yes, I often see ads on my phone and computer. For example, when I listen to music on YouTube or study online, I get several video ads, which is frustrating because they interrupt my work and waste time.

× Yes, when I was a child I watch advertisement which is related to sports.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I watched advertisements which were related to sports.

The speaker refers to past events so the verb should be in past tense ('watch' -> 'watched') and 'advertisement' should be plural ('advertisements') because they likely mean more than one; also use 'were related' to match past tense and plural noun. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and match noun number with verbs.

× Me sports helps make body fit and control and we can be relaxed.

✓ Sports helped keep the body fit and helped us stay relaxed.

The sentence uses 'Me' incorrectly instead of a subject pronoun and inconsistent tense. Replace 'Me' with the subject (implicit 'sports' as subject) and keep past tense to match earlier context. Use 'helped' + base verb for past habitual effect and 'us' for the object pronoun. Suggestion: use correct subject/object pronouns and consistent tense.

× So that's why I am doing different type of exercises due to advertisement.

✓ So that's why I did different types of exercises because of those advertisements.

Tense and phrasing are inconsistent: earlier context is past ('when I was a child'), so use past 'did'. 'Different type of' should be plural 'different types of'. 'Due to' is better replaced with 'because of' for clarity here. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use correct plural forms.

× Yes, definitely. In my home country, whenever I use public transportation such as trains or buses, I usually see advertise a lot of advertisements on the screen of the buses or other trains.

✓ Yes, definitely. In my home country, whenever I use public transportation such as trains or buses, I usually see a lot of advertisements on the screens of buses and trains.

Redundant and misplaced words: 'see advertise a lot of advertisements' is incorrect. Use 'see a lot of advertisements'. 'Screen' should be plural 'screens' and 'on the screens of buses and trains' is clearer. Maintain present simple because the question is general. Suggestion: remove redundancy and correct noun plurality and word order.

× Moreover, when I when I used to travel at the plane, I also saw.

✓ Moreover, when I used to travel by plane, I saw them as well.

Duplicate 'when I' should be removed. Use 'travel by plane' not 'at the plane'. 'I also saw' needs an object ('them' referring to advertisements). Keep past habitual 'used to'. Suggestion: avoid duplications and use correct preposition for modes of transport.

× Well honestly I don't like advertisements at as it spend too much time to watch and sometimes the advertisements are too harmful for us as it may attract people and then people try to purchase or do that things which are they seen on advertisements.

✓ Well, honestly I don't like advertisements because they take too much time to watch, and sometimes advertisements are harmful because they may attract people and then people try to buy or do the things they saw in the advertisements.

Multiple issues: 'at as' is incorrect connector; use 'because'. 'It spend' should be 'they take' to match plural 'advertisements'. 'Do that things which are they seen' is ungrammatical — use 'do the things they saw'. Maintain consistent verb forms and pronouns. Suggestion: use 'because' for reasons, match plural subjects with plural verbs, and use past form 'saw' for what was seen in ads.

× I like different type of edge advertisements which are beneficial or better for people, such as advertisements related to educational purposes, advertisements related to sports and historical events.

✓ I like different types of useful advertisements that are beneficial for people, such as those related to education, sports, and historical events.

'Different type of' should be 'different types of'. 'Edge advertisements' is unclear—use 'useful' or 'beneficial'. 'Educational purposes' can be simplified to 'education'. Use parallel structure and concise phrasing. Suggestion: use plural forms and clear adjectives, keep parallel lists.

× Honestly yes, whenever I am listening any song on the YouTube, I saw a lot of advertisement in just one play.

✓ Honestly, yes. Whenever I listen to a song on YouTube, I see a lot of advertisements in just one play.

Use present simple 'listen' and 'see' for habitual actions. Use 'listen to' not 'listening any'. 'YouTube' does not need 'the'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms for habitual actions and correct prepositions.

× Sometimes I do educational work, there are there are a lot of advertisements come.

✓ Sometimes when I do educational work, a lot of advertisements appear.

Remove duplicate 'there are there are' and incorrect 'a lot of advertisements come'. Use 'appear' or 'show up' to describe ads appearing. Combine clauses with 'when' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid duplication and use appropriate verbs for appearance.

× I usually irritated from these type of advertisement which take much time for me.

✓ I usually get irritated by these types of advertisements because they take up too much of my time.

'I usually irritated from' is incorrect; use 'I usually get irritated by'. 'These type' should be 'these types' or 'this type'. 'Take much time for me' should be 'take up too much of my time'. Suggestion: use correct passive/active structures and appropriate expressions for time consumption.