广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds, correct basic grammar (e.g. 'would be an advertisement' not 'a advertisement'), and add one specific detail to support why it was memorable. Keep answers under five sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: A clear response: "Yes. The most memorable ad from my childhood was for a milk brand. It showed funny cows doing human things, which made me laugh because it was unusual and very colorful, so I remember it even now."

建议: Improve grammar and coherence: begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g. 'Yes, I often see ads on trains'), avoid repetition and fillers, and organize supporting details with linking words like 'for example' or 'such as'. Be specific about types and locations of ads.

示例: A clear response: "Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and at stations. For example, there are posters inside carriages and large banners on station platforms advertising jobs, consumer products and local services."

建议: Clarify your position and use correct grammar: state whether you like ads, give reasons, and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'. Remove unclear phrases ('don't act') and avoid long, confused sentences. Keep it to two or three clear sentences.

示例: A clear response: "I don't mind advertisements because they inform me about new products. For example, I learn about healthy snacks or new phones this way, which can be useful when I decide to buy something."

建议: Be precise and correct grammar: start with a topic sentence ('I prefer food advertising, especially fruit ads'), explain why using linking words ('because', 'so') and give a specific effect or example. Correct mistakes like 'bought trays' -> 'show trays' and avoid run-on sentences.

示例: A clear response: "I prefer food advertisements, especially those for fruit. They often show fresh, colorful trays of fruit which look delicious, so I usually feel hungry after watching them and try to avoid such ads at night."

建议: Make the answer concise and grammatical: start with a direct yes/no, then give one or two clear examples using linking words like 'for example' and correct phrasing ('ads on social media' not 'ad advertisement'). Avoid repetition.

示例: A clear response: "Yes, I see ads everywhere online, especially on social media. For example, YouTube always plays an ad before videos, and apps often show sponsored posts in my feed."

× Well, yes, the first thing come to my mind would be a advertisement about a brand of milk.

✓ Well, yes, the first thing that comes to my mind is an advertisement about a brand of milk.

Error: missing relative pronoun and subject-verb agreement; article incorrect. 'the first thing that comes' requires 'that' and 'comes' for third person singular. Use 'is' to link subject and complement. Use 'an' before a vowel sound 'advertisement'. Suggestion: include 'that' or 'which', change 'come' to 'comes', use 'is', and replace 'a' with 'an'.

× Umm, what's big uh, It impressive to me was uh, uh, the cows in the advertisement were really, uh, funny and really interesting to me back then.

✓ What was really impressive to me was that the cows in the advertisement were very funny and interesting to me back then.

Error: awkward phrasing and incorrect clause structure. 'It impressive to me was' is incorrect order; use 'What was impressive to me was that...'. Use 'very' instead of 'really' repeated for clarity. Suggestion: reorder sentence to 'What was really impressive to me was that...'. Keep past tense 'were' for 'back then'.

× I usually take a lot of train to places, then that's it.

✓ I usually take trains to get to places, and that's it.

Error: 'a lot of train' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'trains' or 'a lot of trains' and correct verb phrase 'take trains to get to places'. Suggestion: use 'trains' plural and clearer connector 'and'.

× When I see a loss of advertisement on the train, outside of the train and also inside the trains, there were so many advertisement about uh, uh, workplace and jobs and, uh, the other, uh, brand of, uh, items.

✓ When I see lots of advertisements on and outside trains, and also inside trains, there are many advertisements about workplaces, jobs, and other brands of products.

Errors: 'a loss of' should be 'lots of' or 'a lot of'; 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements'; inconsistent tense 'there were' should be present 'there are' when speaking generally. 'workplace' should be plural or 'workplaces' and 'brand of items' better as 'brands of products'. Suggestion: use 'lots of advertisements' and plural nouns, maintain present tense for general statements.

× Well, I personally don't act because it's helped me exposed to the new trains around me, uh, with might be adventurous for uh, me in the future, such as nutrient snacks or, uh, new advanced technologies, new phones or laptop, so I always find at work.

✓ Well, I personally don't act on them because they have helped expose me to new trends around me that might be useful in the future, such as nutritious snacks, new technologies, phones, or laptops, which I often find useful at work.

Multiple errors: 'don't act' vague; 'it's helped me exposed' incorrect passive/participle usage—should be 'they have helped expose me' or 'have helped me be exposed'. 'trains' wrong word; should be 'trends'. 'with might be adventurous' wrong modal/structure; use 'that might be useful'. 'nutrient snacks' incorrect adjective order/word; use 'nutritious snacks'. 'new phones or laptop' needs plural agreement 'laptops'. Suggestion: clarify subject 'they' (advertisements), use present perfect 'have helped', use correct nouns and plural forms, and correct word 'trends'.

× Well I always prefer watching fruit advertising because the way they bought trays, the food and the ingredient was so delicious and tasty.

✓ Well, I always prefer watching fruit advertisements because the way they present the fruits, the food, and the ingredients is so delicious and tempting.

Errors: 'advertising' should be plural noun 'advertisements' or 'advertising' as uncountable but context suits 'advertisements'. 'they bought trays' is incorrect—likely 'they present trays' or 'they show trays'; 'ingredient' should be plural 'ingredients'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the way ... is' not 'was' if speaking generally. 'delicious and tasty' redundant; 'tempting' is clearer. Suggestion: use correct verbs ('present' or 'show'), pluralize 'ingredients', and maintain subject-verb agreement.

× This is always make me hungry and craving for the food after watching the ad in the night.

✓ This always makes me hungry and craving for food after watching the ad at night.

Errors: subject-verb agreement: 'This is always make' should be 'This always makes'. 'the food' unnecessary article; use 'food'. 'in the night' incorrect preposition; use 'at night'. Suggestion: change verb form to 'makes', remove unnecessary 'the', and use 'at night'.

× So I always try not to watch this later in the night will make me hungry.

✓ So I always try not to watch these later at night because they will make me hungry.

Errors: sentence incorrectly combines clauses; missing conjunction 'because'. 'this' should match plural 'these' if referring to ads; 'in the night' should be 'at night'. Suggestion: use 'because' to link reason, match plurality, and use 'at night'.

× Yes, absolutely I see ad advertisement everywhere thought uh social media platforms, uh, with advice will be uh common for everyone these days.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I see advertisements everywhere through social media platforms, and ads are common for everyone these days.

Errors: 'ad advertisement' redundant; use 'ads' or 'advertisements'. 'thought' should be 'through'. 'with advice will be common' is ungrammatical—intended 'ads are common'. Suggestion: simplify to 'I see advertisements everywhere through social media platforms' and use clear subject-verb structure.

× Umm, so but umm, for instance, when I need to watch YouTube a video on YouTube, I will definitely have ad before in it videos.

✓ For instance, when I watch a video on YouTube, I will definitely see an ad before the video.

Errors: redundant 'YouTube a video on YouTube'; awkward phrasing 'have ad before in it videos'. Use 'watch a video on YouTube' and 'see an ad before the video'. Suggestion: remove redundancy and use correct collocations 'see an ad' and 'before the video'.