广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更自然、时态和语法要正确，同时表达要更具体。例如说明广告内容、为什么印象深刻以及记忆细节。避免重复与模糊用词，控制在最多五句内。

示例: Yes. When I was nine, a TV jingle for a traditional medicine aimed at the elderly stuck in my mind. The song was simple and catchy, and it repeated the product’s name and uses several times, so even now I can remember the tune. Because of that melody, the advert left a lasting impression on me.

建议: 回答较好，但可以更自然连贯并加一两个具体例子（如某种食品或景点），使用连接词使语义更流畅。注意少量语法修正（例如“target drivers and visitors”可前置原因）。

示例: Yes, I do. I often notice large billboards along highways advertising local food and tourist attractions. For example, I frequently see posters for regional snacks and beach resorts, which clearly target drivers and visitors heading to those spots.

建议: 观点明确但句子有语法错误和冗余。改进可用更自然表达并加入原因细节（例如如何影响观看体验），保持不超过五句。

示例: No, I don't like most adverts because they interrupt my viewing. They often pop up during videos or appear before content on streaming sites, which I find annoying, so I usually skip them when possible.

建议: 回答方向好，但用词和语法需改进（例如“development”不合适，动词一致性）。可以给具体例子并说明为何喜欢这类广告，以及它带来的影响。

示例: I prefer adverts with genuine intentions that aim to benefit society rather than just sell products. For example, I like public service campaigns about recycling or road safety because they raise awareness and encourage positive behaviour in the community.

建议: 回答清晰且具体，但可改进语法和拼写（如“Billy Billy”应为“Bilibili”），并压缩句子以更自然表达。可以补充一两种广告形式或举例说明如何减少干扰。

示例: Yes, I see many online ads on my phone and computer, especially on video platforms like YouTube and Bilibili. Most are skippable after a few seconds, but that brief interruption is annoying because it breaks the flow of the video.

× When I was nine years old, there is an medicine advertisement for the elders.

✓ When I was nine years old, there was a medicine advertisement for the elderly.

“There is” 与过去时间状语 “When I was nine years old” 时态不一致，应使用过去时的 “There was”。此外，“an medicine” 冠词与以辅音音素开头的名词搭配错误，应为 “a medicine”。“the elders” 用法不自然，描述年长者用 “the elderly” 更合适。建议整体用过去时并修正冠词和名词搭配。

× It is brainwash sons and makes me to keep recipes in my brain.

✓ It brainwashed children and made me remember the jingles.

原句时态混乱且动词形式错误。应使用过去时与前句保持一致：用过去式 “brainwashed” 和 “made”。“sons” 用词不当，改为更中性的 “children”。动词 “make” 后接宾语和动词不带 to，所以改为 “made me remember”。“recipes” 语义不清，推测指广告歌曲或歌词，用 “jingles” 更贴切。建议注意时态一致和使役动词结构（make + 人 + 动词原形）。

× Till then I still remember those songs.

✓ Even now I still remember those songs.

“Till then” 用法不当，表达“直到那时”与想表达的“直到现在仍然记得”不符。使用 “Even now” 或 “To this day” 更自然。保持现在时 “still remember” 是可以的，但时间词需要改为与现在时相配。建议用固定表达 “Even now” 或 “To this day”。

× Yes, I often see a lot of outdoor advertising, especially along the highways where there are many huge billboards.

✓ Yes, I often see a lot of outdoor advertising, especially along the highways where there are many huge billboards.

该句语法基本正确，仅确认无改动。时态为一般现在时，表达习惯事实，适合题意。

× Most of these ads promote local food and drinks for tourist attractions, so they target drivers and visitors.

✓ Most of these ads promote local food and drinks at tourist attractions, so they target drivers and visitors.

介词错误（应为 “at tourist attractions” 表示在旅游景点提供的食物和饮料），这里也涉及介词使用问题，应归类为介词错误并调整表述。建议将 “for tourist attractions” 改为 “at tourist attractions”。

× No, I don't like advertisements because they really pop up when I watching TV or watching a video.

✓ No, I don't like advertisements because they really pop up when I'm watching TV or watching a video.

动词短语 “watching” 前应有适当的助动词以构成现在进行时，原句缺少 “am”。因此应为 “when I'm watching”。另外可简化为 “when I'm watching TV or videos”。建议注意进行时需要 be 动词。

× They feel annoying and distracting so I usually skip them if I can.

✓ They are annoying and distracting, so I usually skip them if I can.

使用 “feel” 描述广告的性质不自然，形容词直接用 “are” 更恰当。将 “feel annoying” 改为 “are annoying” 更符合英语表达。建议区分感受动词与系动词用法。

× I prefer a development that are made with genuine intentions and aim to benefit society, not just to make money.

✓ I prefer developments that are made with genuine intentions and aim to benefit society, not just to make money.

原句主语“a development”与后面谓语复数不一致，应统一。若谓语用复数 “are” 则主语也应为复数 “developments”。另外“aim to benefit society” 与主语复数保持一致。建议保持主谓一致，或改为单数并调整谓语。

× For example, I like public service or environmental campaigns that raise awareness and helps the community.

✓ For example, I like public service or environmental campaigns that raise awareness and help the community.

从句中主语为复数 “campaigns”，谓语应为复数形式 “help”，而不是单数 “helps”。这是主谓一致的问题，归类为形容词/副词使用不完全准确也可视作主谓一致。建议主谓在人称和数上一致。

× Yes I do. There are a lot of online advertisements, especially on video sites like YouTube and Billy Billy.

✓ Yes, I do. There are a lot of online advertisements, especially on video sites like YouTube and Bilibili.

句子大致正确，但 “Billy Billy” 为拼写错误，正确应为 “Bilibili”。“There are” 与现在时一致，适用于一般陈述。建议注意专有名词拼写。

× They are usually skippable but you still have to watch them for a few seconds which I find very annoying and frustrating because they interrupt the viewing experience.

✓ They are usually skippable, but you still have to watch them for a few seconds, which I find very annoying and frustrating because they interrupt the viewing experience.

句子主要是标点和从句衔接问题。语法结构正确，但需要在连接处加逗号以分隔非限定性定语从句，提升可读性。关于语法类型，注意动词-ing 形式使用正确。建议在复合句中使用恰当标点。