广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 答案缺乏句子結構和連貫性，語法錯誤較多，表達不夠清晰。提高建議：1) 開頭用一個直接的主題句回答問題，例如 “Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me.” 2) 用1–2句具體描述廣告的內容（例如畫面或音樂）和為何留下印象（例如情感或味覺聯想）。3) 使用連接詞（because, so, and）使敘述更流暢。4) 注意時態和主謂一致，把冗詞刪減，控制在3–4句之內。

示例: Yes. There was a candy commercial that impressed me when I was a child. It showed a colorful box of sweets and cheerful music, which made the candy look very tempting. Because the ad focused on the fun of sharing, I always wanted to try those candies.

建议: 答案能表達基本意思但語法與詞序不自然，內容不夠具體。提高建議：1) 用清晰的主句直接回答（Yes/No）。2) 用一兩個支持細節說明看到的廣告類型和呈現方式（poster, loudspeaker, digital screen）。3) 解釋個人感受時給出原因並用連接詞（because, so）連接。4) 保持句子簡潔，避免口頭停頓。

示例: Yes, I often see advertisements on trams and buses. They are usually food ads shown on posters or played on loudspeakers, which I find annoying because the loud announcements disturb my ride.

建议: 答案有合理觀點但語言表達重複且不夠精確。提高建議：1) 開門見山給出立場（I do / I don't）。2) 提供1–2具體理由並舉例（discover new products, find holiday deals）。3) 使用正確詞彙（promote products, inform people）和連接詞使論述更有邏輯。4) 確保句子簡短且語法正確。

示例: Yes, I like some advertisements because they help me discover new products and holiday deals. For example, a food ad once introduced a local festival I attended, which was really helpful.

建议: 答案重複且表達不清晰，缺少具體細節和連接詞。提高建議：1) 直接陳述喜好（I prefer food advertisements）。2) 解釋原因並給出具體例子（new product launches, creative visuals, recipe ideas）。3) 使用連接詞（for example, because）使語句連貫。4) 控制在2–3句內，避免冗詞。

示例: I prefer food advertisements because they often show new products and creative recipes. For example, a restaurant ad that showcased a seasonal dish made me want to try it immediately.

建议: 能表達反感但語法與詞彙使用不準確且不夠具體。提高建議：1) 用正確的句型描述頻率（I often see ads on my phone and computer）。2) 具體說明為何反感（interruptions, pop-ups, privacy concerns）。3) 使用連接詞（because, so）並給出解決或偏好（I prefer ad-free apps）。4) 保持語句簡潔、語法正確。

示例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer. They are usually pop-ups or targeted banners, which I find annoying because they interrupt my browsing and slow down my device, so I prefer using ad-blockers or paid apps.

× Uh, when I was a child, I often be adopted by the candy advertisement because I think the candy, uh, by depressed, was depressed by the distant is very delicious and sweet and made me want it.

✓ Uh, when I was a child, I was often attracted by candy advertisements because I thought the candy shown in them looked very delicious and sweet and made me want to try it.

原句使用了不正确的被动结构“be adopted by the candy advertisement”，应使用“be attracted by”表示“被……吸引”。此外，句子中“by depressed, was depressed by the distant”词序和用词混乱，需改为“shown in them”或类似表达来指代广告中展示的内容。整体上要使用过去时态（was / thought）来与句首的“when I was a child”保持时态一致。建议：用固定短语“be attracted by sth.”表示“被……吸引”；把描述广告内容的部分改为从句或短语，如“the candy shown in them”。

× Uh, I think it's impression.

✓ Uh, I think it left an impression on me.

原句缺少宾语，‘it's impression’结构不正确，应使用短语‘left an impression on me’表示‘给我留下了印象’。建议将动词和宾语放在正确位置构成完整句子。

× Yes, on the tram I uh, there are always uh, uh, people to read loud the advertisement of some uh, uh, food like the umm, chicken and so on.

✓ Yes, on the tram there are always people loudly reading advertisements for foods like chicken and so on.

原句语序混乱且‘to read loud’结构不自然，应使用副词‘loudly’修饰动词‘reading’。此外，‘advertisement of some food’应改为‘advertisements for foods’或更自然的复数形式。建议把副词置于动词前后形成自然表达并保持名词复数一致。

× Uh, I'm not very like it because I think a little bit nervous and made me.

✓ Uh, I don't really like it because it makes me a little nervous.

原句中‘I’m not very like it’是错误的代词/动词搭配，应该用‘I don't like it’。此外，‘a little bit nervous and made me’语序错误且缺主语，应改为‘it makes me a little nervous’来表达原因。建议注意主语和谓语的搭配以及情态表达。

× I like the advertisements because it's a way for people to know about the new things like food and a very good place to enjoy my holidays.

✓ I like advertisements because they're a way for people to learn about new things like food, and they are also a good way for me to enjoy my holidays.

原句中不该在复数名词前一直使用定冠词‘the advertisements’（除非特指）。此外，‘it's’应与复数主语一致改为‘they're’，并且句子要将不同意思的并列部分清晰分开。建议：当泛指复数事物时省略定冠词并保持主谓一致。

× Uh, I think, uh, it's a way not only for business to promote their project, but also wait for our people to know more about something.

✓ Uh, I think it's a way not only for businesses to promote their products, but also for people to learn more about things.

原句中‘business’应使用复数或不可数复合名词‘businesses’，并且‘promote their project’不自然，常说‘promote their products’或‘promote their services’。‘wait for our people to know’完全错误，应改为‘for people to learn’。建议注意名词单复数及固定搭配‘not only ... but also ...’两侧结构一致。

× I like the advertising of food because I think this kind of advertisement will always give me a surprise, like they always have the new thing to Expression Express, umm.

✓ I like food advertisements because I think they always surprise me; they often introduce new things or new dishes.

原句中‘give me a surprise’更自然为‘surprise me’。‘have the new thing to Expression Express’严重错误，应改为‘introduce new things’或‘show new dishes’。注意动词选择和固定搭配，避免重复或错误词形。

× So I've always hoped to read more about it, about food.

✓ So I've always hoped to read more about it — about food.

原句基本可理解，但可在标点上调整以提高自然度。此外‘read more about it, about food’中重复‘about’显得笨重，建议用破折号或简化结构使句子更流畅。

× Yeah, so in my daily life, I often, uh, be send some advertisements, umm, on my phone or computers.

✓ Yeah, so in my daily life I often receive/send some advertisements on my phone or computer.

原句使用了错误的被动或非谓语结构‘be send’，应使用被动或主动的正确形式，如‘I often receive advertisements’或‘I often get/send advertisements’。另外‘computers’复数与‘my’搭配可简化为‘computer’或保持复数但前文一般用单数。建议使用正确的动词形式并保持主谓一致。

× I think it's a little bit noisy and uh, makes me life a mess.

✓ I think it's a little bit annoying and it makes my life a mess.

原句中‘noisy’用于描述广告在手机中不太合适，可用'annoying'更自然。‘makes me life a mess’语序和所有格错误，应为‘makes my life a mess’。建议使用正确的形容词并把所有格放在名词前。

× I don't like these ways to get the advertisement.

✓ I don't like these ways of receiving advertisements.

原句‘to get the advertisement’不自然，应改为‘ways of receiving advertisements’或‘I don't like getting advertisements this way’。注意使用名词化结构或动名词短语更符合习惯表达。