广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect words (e.g., "heated" is wrong). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

示例: Yes. I remember a TV advert for a shoe brand that interrupted my favorite show, which annoyed me a lot. Because it played loudly during the program, I would always mute the TV or leave the room. That is why childhood ads often made a negative impression on me.

建议: Answer directly, use linking words to connect past habit with current situation, and provide clearer, more grammatical descriptions. Be specific about what you saw and why it stood out.

示例: Not now, because I rarely use public transport. However, when I was a child I took the bus home from school and often saw colourful circus posters advertising elephants and shows, which looked very eye-catching and memorable.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence about your attitude, then explain the change with specific details and linking words. Avoid filler words and repetition. Mention one or two concrete examples of your work to show credibility.

示例: I have mixed feelings about ads: I disliked them as a viewer, but now I work in the advertising industry. I design 3D ads for products, and recently I created a campaign for Lenovo. It was rewarding because it allowed me to be creative while earning a good income.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence naming the style you prefer, then explain why with a specific reason or brief example. Use linking words to make the idea cohesive and avoid filler phrases like "you know."

示例: I prefer humorous ads, especially playful campaigns like the old Pepsi–Coca-Cola feuds. Because they poke fun at each other in a light-hearted way, I find them memorable and entertaining.

建议: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and provide one clear reason and a brief example of how you react. Use linking words to structure the response and replace vague phrases with precise language.

示例: Yes, I see ads all the time on my phone and computer, especially on Instagram and YouTube. Although some ads are useful or creative, many interrupt my browsing; therefore I usually skip, scroll past, or mute them unless they are engaging.

× As a girl, I used to hate advertisements.

✓ When I was a girl, I used to hate advertisements.

The original sentence is understandable but missing the time-marker 'When I was' which is more natural English for referring to childhood. This is a sentence structure/naturalness issue; to improve, include a clear time reference: 'When I was a girl...'. Note: this does not match any exact ID from the provided list, so no listed ID applies.

× You know, they used to come in between my favorite shoes and I just heated them.

✓ You know, they used to come in between my favorite shows and I just hated them.

The sentence contains wrong word choice 'shoes' for 'shows' and 'heated' instead of 'hated'. These are lexical errors rather than verb participle issues. Correct the words to 'shows' and 'hated'. Use careful proofreading and pronounce/spell words correctly when transcribing.

× I I used to usually mute them whenever they used to come around.

✓ I usually used to mute them whenever they came on.

The original has redundant 'used to' with 'usually' and unnecessary repetition. Also 'come around' is colloquial; 'came on' is natural for ads appearing. For improvement, avoid double marking of habitual past ('used to' plus 'usually') and use a single correct habitual form.

× I don't usually use public transport but but when I was a kid I used to take bus back home from school.

✓ I don't usually use public transport, but when I was a kid I used to take the bus home from school.

Missing article 'the' before 'bus' and duplicated 'but'. Also combine present habit ('don't usually') and past habit ('used to') correctly. Add comma before 'but' for clarity. Use 'the bus' when referring to a specific mode of transport taken regularly.

× They used to play this funny jumbo circus posters advertising about their elephants and lands and tigers.

✓ They used to display these large circus posters advertising their elephants, lions and tigers.

The original mixes nouns and modifiers incorrectly: 'play' is wrong for posters (use 'display'), 'jumbo' and 'posters' ordering is awkward, and 'lands' is likely a miswording for 'lions'. Correct word choices and word order: 'display these large circus posters advertising their elephants, lions and tigers.' Proofread to ensure correct animal names.

× It's OK, I hated them, but currently I'm working in the advertisement industry.

✓ It's OK, I hated them, but currently I'm working in the advertising industry.

Use 'advertising industry' rather than 'advertisement industry'—'advertising' is the correct noun form. Keep contrast between past feeling ('hated') and present situation ('I'm working') consistent. Use 'advertising' to refer to the industry.

× I make 3D advertisement for products.

✓ I make 3D advertisements for products.

Count noun and pluralization: use plural 'advertisements' or '3D ads'. Also 'make' (present simple) is fine for current job. Ensure noun number matches meaning.

× Uh, recently I worked with Lenovo and it was, it was fun.

✓ Recently I worked with Lenovo, and it was fun.

No major grammar error except repeated filler 'it was, it was'. Remove repetition and add comma for clarity. 'Recently I worked' is appropriate past tense for a completed recent project.

× You get to do something creative at the same time it pays well.

✓ You get to do something creative, and at the same time it pays well.

Run-on sentence lacking conjunction punctuation; add 'and' or restructure: 'You get to do something creative, and at the same time it pays well.' Alternatively: 'You get to do something creative, and it pays well.'

× I used to like this funny feud between Pepsi and Coca-Cola.

✓ I used to like the funny feud between Pepsi and Coca-Cola.

Use definite article 'the' before a specific, well-known feud. 'This' is less appropriate. Use 'the' to refer to a known rivalry.

× Uh, they used to, you know, slightly roast each other in their advertisements.

✓ They used to, you know, slightly roast each other in their advertisements.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It correctly uses 'used to' for past habitual action and 'slightly roast' as verb phrase. No listed error applies, so no ID given.

× I used to find it very hilarious.

✓ I used to find it very hilarious.

This sentence is grammatically correct: 'used to' expresses past habitual feeling. 'Very hilarious' is informal but acceptable. No change needed.

× Yes, these days you can't avoid them.

✓ Yes, these days you can't avoid them.

Correct sentence; no change needed.

× Uh, even if I'm using Instagram or YouTube, they're everywhere.

✓ Even when I'm using Instagram or YouTube, they're everywhere.

'Even if' suggests hypothetical; 'even when' or 'when' is better for real situations. Use 'even when' to indicate that whenever you use these apps, ads appear.

× I mean, it's good, it's good, but sometimes it is annoying.

✓ I mean, it's fine, but sometimes it is annoying.

Repetition 'it's good, it's good' is redundant; replace with 'it's fine' or single 'it's good'. This is stylistic rather than strict grammar error.

× Either the ad should be slightly creative or humorous.

✓ The ad should be either slightly creative or humorous.

Position of 'either' is awkward. Place 'either' before the first of the two alternatives: 'either slightly creative or humorous.' This improves clarity and conforms to standard conjunction structure.

× Otherwise I just, you know, scroll away or mute them.

✓ Otherwise I just, you know, scroll away or mute them.

This sentence is acceptable; 'scroll away' and 'mute' are correct verb forms. No change needed.