广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần nói rõ, mạch lạc và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp cơ bản. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (ví dụ: "Yes, an advertisement impressed me when I was a child."), tránh lỗi diễn đạt như "You were a child when I was a try" và dùng liên từ để nối ý (ví dụ: "because" hoặc "which showed"). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (năm, hình ảnh trong quảng cáo, cảm xúc của bạn) và giữ tối đa 3-4 câu để tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

示例: Yes. When I was a child, a TV advertisement about the environment impressed me a lot because it showed animals suffering from pollution. I remember a scene of a bird covered in oil, which made me feel sad and more aware of environmental issues. That ad stayed with me and influenced how I think about recycling.

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "this help" → "this helps" hoặc viết chủ ngữ rõ ràng) và làm đầy đủ câu ví dụ. Dùng liên từ để nối ý ("for example" đã tốt) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về loại quảng cáo bạn thấy (sản phẩm, dịch vụ, digital screens) và tần suất. Giữ 2–4 câu, rõ ràng và mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, I often see a lot of advertising on trains and other transport because it helps raise people's awareness of products and services. For example, there are large posters on the outside of trains and digital screens inside carriages showing ads for travel apps and local shops. They are especially common during rush hour.

建议: Cần tránh lỗi từ vựng sai ("eat your advertisements" không đúng). Bắt đầu trực tiếp ("Yes, I like some advertisements, especially those about the environment") rồi giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao. Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng (umm, uh) và dùng cấu trúc đơn giản, rõ ràng. Thêm một ví dụ cụ thể để minh hoạ.

示例: Yes, I like some advertisements, especially environmental ones, because they help raise public awareness about pollution and conservation. For example, a short PSA showing plastic waste on beaches made me think twice about using single-use plastics.

建议: Cần câu trả lời trực tiếp và sửa ngữ pháp ("it raises" → "they raise", "encourage" → "encourage" with correct subject-verb agreement or use singular/plural consistently). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về cách quảng cáo truyền tải thông điệp (hình ảnh, nhạc, thông điệp kêu gọi hành động) và giữ 2–4 câu. Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý.

示例: I prefer environmental advertisements because they raise awareness about issues like pollution and recycling. For instance, ads that show dramatic images of polluted rivers and then suggest simple actions, such as recycling or reducing plastic use, encourage people to take responsibility.

建议: Cần sửa lỗi từ và cách diễn đạt ("prevalent Valent" không đúng). Trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết: loại quảng cáo (social media, pop-ups), cảm xúc của bạn (thú vị, phiền nhiễu) và tần suất. Tránh câu mơ hồ, dùng từ vựng phù hợp như "prevalent" hoặc "everywhere".

示例: Yes, of course. I often see advertisements on my phone and computer because they appear on social media and websites. They are everywhere nowadays; some are interesting and relevant to me, while others can be annoying when they interrupt videos.

× You were a child when I was a try I remember a television advertisement about the environment that really impressed me.

✓ When I was a child I remember a television advertisement about the environment that really impressed me.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and an unclear phrase 'you were a child when I was a try'. This is a sentence structure error; rearrange to 'When I was a child, I remember...' and remove the unclear words. Use a comma after the introductory time phrase for clarity.

× I saw it on TV and it showed animals suffering because of pollution.

✓ I saw it on TV; it showed animals suffering because of pollution.

The sentence is understandable but linking two independent clauses with 'and' creates a run-on feel. Use a semicolon or break into two sentences for correct structure.

× So it.

✓ So it had a strong emotional impact on me.

'So it.' is an incomplete sentence lacking a verb and clear meaning. Provide a full clause that expresses the intended idea; this fixes the sentence structure error.

× I often see a lot of advertisement on trains and other forms of transport because this help raise people awareness of products and services.

✓ I often see a lot of advertisements on trains and other forms of transport because they help raise people's awareness of products and services.

'A lot of' requires a plural noun here ('advertisements'). 'This' should be 'they' to agree with plural noun; 'help' requires plural subject; add the possessive apostrophe in 'people's'. These are quantifier and agreement issues.

× For example, there are large posters on the outside of trains and digital.

✓ For example, there are large posters on the outside of trains and digital screens inside them.

The original ends abruptly with 'digital' (an adjective) without a noun. Complete the noun phrase (digital screens) to fix the sentence structure.

× Well, I eat your advertisements, especially about the environment because, umm, this can contribute to raising people's awareness, uh, protecting the environment.

✓ Well, I like advertisements, especially those about the environment, because they can contribute to raising people's awareness and protecting the environment.

'Eat your advertisements' is incorrect word choice; should be 'like advertisements'. Use 'those' as a demonstrative adjective for 'advertisements'. Replace 'this' with 'they' to agree with plural, and join parallel gerunds with 'and'. These are adjective/adverb and pronoun use issues.

× Do you like? I prefer environmental advertisements because it raises awareness about issues like pollution and recycling.

✓ I prefer environmental advertisements because they raise awareness about issues like pollution and recycling.

Remove 'Do you like?' which is misplaced. 'It' should be 'they' to match plural 'advertisements', and verb should be 'raise' to agree with plural subject. This is a pronoun and subject-verb agreement issue.

× This advertisement also encourage people to take responsibility for protecting the environment.

✓ These advertisements also encourage people to take responsibility for protecting the environment.

'Advertisement' should be plural to match context, so the subject is plural and verb must be 'encourage'. The error involves incorrect verb agreement; change noun to plural and verb to plural form.

× I always see the advertisement on my phone.

✓ I always see advertisements on my phone.

'The advertisement' implies a specific single ad; general statement requires plural 'advertisements' or 'ads'. This is a quantifier/article usage issue.

× It's so prevalent Valent nowadays and sometimes I think it's so interesting.

✓ It's so prevalent nowadays and sometimes I think it's very interesting.

'Valent' is not an English word; likely intended 'very' or 'so'. Replace with correct adverb 'very' and remove the unknown word. Ensure adverb placement before adjective 'interesting'.