广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, there was an advertisement about noodles that impressed me when I was a child. I saw it on television while watching with my younger brother, and the catchy jingle made it memorable for me.

建议: Improve fluency by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and use more precise vocabulary. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

示例: Yes, I often see advertisements on trains, buses, and other public transport in my country. Moreover, these ads are displayed widely throughout the city, making them very common.

建议: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples.

示例: I like advertisements that relate to my interests. For instance, if an ad features something I admire, I pay attention; otherwise, I tend to ignore it.

建议: Use clearer sentence structures and avoid awkward phrasing. Provide specific examples and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I prefer advertisements related to business, especially those that teach how to improve business and communication skills with customers, as I find them very useful.

建议: Avoid redundancy and improve coherence by using linking words. Make your answer more natural and concise.

示例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer because social media platforms are widely used by brands to promote their products through ads and videos.

× When I was child, I was quite impressed about an advertisement which was about noodles.

✓ When I was a child, I was quite impressed by an advertisement which was about noodles.

The phrase 'When I was child' is missing the article 'a' before 'child'. Also, the preposition 'about' after 'impressed' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'by'. So, it should be 'When I was a child' and 'impressed by an advertisement'.

× I was quite impressed about an advertisement which was about noodles.

✓ I was quite impressed by an advertisement which was about noodles.

The verb 'impressed' is followed by the preposition 'by' to indicate the cause of the impression, not 'about'. So, 'impressed by an advertisement' is correct.

× I watched it on television while I was watching it with my younger brother.

✓ I watched it on television with my younger brother.

The phrase 'while I was watching it with my younger brother' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'I watched it on television with my younger brother' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× It is uh, quite common in my country to see any adverse advertisement posters on trains and other transports like bus and also anywhere, uh, in the city.

✓ It is quite common in my country to see various advertisement posters on trains and other transport like buses and also anywhere in the city.

The word 'adverse' is incorrect here; it should be 'advertisement'. Also, 'transports' is incorrect; 'transport' is uncountable or pluralized as 'buses' for vehicles. 'Any' is not appropriate here; 'various' fits better. Removing filler words like 'uh' improves clarity.

× It is uh, quite common in my country to see any adverse advertisement posters on trains and other transports like bus and also anywhere, uh, in the city.

✓ It is quite common in my country to see advertisement posters on trains and other transport like buses and also anywhere in the city.

The preposition 'on' is correct for 'posters on trains'. The phrase 'like bus' should be 'like buses' to match plural form. Also, 'any' is unnecessary here.

× Well, it depends on my interest on something.

✓ Well, it depends on my interest in something.

The correct preposition after 'interest' is 'in', not 'on'. So, 'depends on my interest in something' is correct.

× But if the advertisement is not my type, I would definitely ignore that.

✓ But if the advertisement is not my type, I would definitely ignore it.

The pronoun 'that' is less appropriate here; 'it' is the correct pronoun to refer to 'advertisement'.

× For example, if any advertisement is showing that how to improve your business skills and communication skills with customers, I would be really grateful.

✓ For example, if any advertisement shows how to improve your business skills and communication skills with customers, I would be really grateful.

The phrase 'showing that how' is incorrect. It should be 'shows how'. Also, 'any advertisement is showing' is awkward; simple present 'shows' fits better in this conditional sentence.