广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够连贯，句子结构不完整，表达不自然。建议练习完整句子表达，避免断句，增加细节描述。

示例: Yes, there was a milk tea advertisement that impressed me when I was a child because it showed how smooth and delicious the drink was.

建议: 表达混乱，语法错误较多，逻辑不清晰。建议简化句子结构，明确表达观点，并使用连接词。

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses because these places are crowded, so advertisers can reach many people.

建议: 回答内容不清晰，词汇使用错误，句子不完整。建议使用简单明了的句子表达观点，并解释原因。

示例: No, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt my videos and waste my time.

建议: 表达基本清楚，但句子结构不够流畅，词汇使用有限。建议丰富词汇，使用连接词使表达更自然。

示例: I like advertisements about cameras because I am interested in photography, and they help me learn new techniques.

建议: 表达较简单，缺乏细节和连贯性。建议增加具体描述，使用连接词使表达更完整。

示例: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone, especially on Instagram, but some of them seem suspicious to me.

× I still remembered that is a milk tea advertisements.

✓ I still remember that it was a milk tea advertisement.

这里应该使用一般现在时的“remember”来表达现在仍然记得的事实，而不是过去时“remembered”。另外，advertisements是复数，但前面用的是单数指代，应改为单数advertisement。

× It had smooth.

✓ It was smooth.

这里的形容词“smooth”需要用系动词“was”连接，不能单独用“had”。

× It has.

✓ It has it.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，应该补充宾语使句子完整。

× I see a lot of advertisements on trains or buses because I think the public, the public's attention has most has a lot of crowded, so that can makes advertisements bring a lot.

✓ I see a lot of advertisements on trains or buses because I think the public is usually crowded, so advertisements can attract a lot of attention.

原句中“the public's attention has most has a lot of crowded”结构混乱，应该表达“公众通常很拥挤”，且“makes advertisements bring a lot”表达不清，改为“advertisements can attract a lot of attention”更准确。

× No I don't in my view I usually use my phone to watch some Cummings but when I need to watch a new chapter I always need to watch a new addict and that make me feel waste my time.

✓ No, I don't. In my view, I usually use my phone to watch some comedies, but when I need to watch a new chapter, I always need to watch a new ad, and that makes me feel like I'm wasting my time.

原句中“Cummings”应为“comedies”，“addict”应为“ad”，“make”应为第三人称单数“makes”，且“feel waste my time”应改为“feel like I'm wasting my time”。

× I like the type about camera because my interest is photograph, so I always like to explore some take, photograph, take techniques.

✓ I like the type about cameras because my interest is photography, so I always like to explore some photography techniques.

“camera”应为复数“cameras”，“photograph”应为名词“photography”，“take, photograph, take techniques”表达混乱，应改为“photography techniques”。

× Yes I do. I often see advertisements on my mobile phone like Instagram. There are full of suspicious posts.

✓ Yes, I do. I often see advertisements on my mobile phone, like on Instagram. It is full of suspicious posts.

“like Instagram”前应加介词“on”表示在Instagram上；“There are full of suspicious posts”主谓不一致，应改为“It is full of suspicious posts”。