广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples to support your points.

示例: Yes, I remember a fast food chain advertisement from my country that impressed me as a child. It focused on family and friendship, which made it very emotional and memorable.

建议: Improve clarity by completing your sentences and using proper grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about the advertisement's content and impact.

示例: Yes, I recently saw a mental health promotion on the train by the Singaporean government. The ads showed comforting words to support friends who are struggling, which I found very helpful.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by linking your ideas more smoothly and avoiding repetition. Try to use varied vocabulary and provide a brief reason for your opinion.

示例: No, I don't like advertisements because they interrupt my videos on YouTube. Although I understand their purpose, I prefer uninterrupted viewing for better entertainment.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and incomplete sentences. Make your answer more concise and structured by clearly stating your preference and explaining why with linking words.

示例: I like advertisements with catchy songs because they stay in my mind and make me interested in the products and the company.

建议: Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and provide specific examples.

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone or computer, especially on websites like YouTube or free sites funded by sponsors.

× Yes, a few advice advertisements that stood out for me as a child where it was from a fast food chain restaurant that was widely popular in my home country.

✓ Yes, a few advice advertisements that stood out for me as a child were from a fast food chain restaurant that was widely popular in my home country.

The word 'where' is incorrectly used instead of 'were' which is the past tense of 'be' for plural subjects. Also, 'advice' is uncountable and should not be pluralized, but since it is used as an adjective here, it is acceptable. The main issue is the verb 'where' which should be 'were' to agree with the plural subject 'advertisements'. Suggestion: Use 'were' for plural past tense of 'be' verbs.

× Most of their advertisements revolve around family, touching friendships and relationships, and it evokes emotions.

✓ Most of their advertisements revolve around family, touching on friendships and relationships, and they evoke emotions.

The verb 'touch' when used in this context requires the preposition 'on' to correctly express the idea of addressing or dealing with something. Also, the subject 'advertisements' is plural, so the verb should be 'evoke' instead of 'evokes'. Suggestion: Use 'touch on' to indicate addressing topics and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Apparently, the Singaporean government is promoting mental health and specifically posted on their ads the different words I can use to comfort my friend or friends who are struggling with.

✓ Apparently, the Singaporean government is promoting mental health and specifically posted on their ads different words I can use to comfort my friend or friends who are struggling.

The phrase 'struggling with' is incomplete without an object. Since the object is omitted, it is better to remove 'with' to make the sentence complete and clear. Suggestion: Avoid ending sentences with prepositions when the object is missing; remove 'with' here.

× I see advertisement and advertisement quite a lot, especially when I'm on websites like YouTube or unpaid websites that are funded by sponsors or companies that requests for marketing.

✓ I see advertisements quite a lot, especially when I'm on websites like YouTube or unpaid websites that are funded by sponsors or companies that request marketing.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match the context of seeing many ads. Also, 'companies that requests' is incorrect because 'companies' is plural and should be followed by 'request' without 's'. The phrase 'requests for marketing' is awkward; 'request marketing' is more appropriate. Suggestion: Use plural forms for plural subjects and ensure subject-verb agreement.