广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构较复杂且有重复，建议简化句子，避免冗余，并注意动词形式和时态的正确使用。

示例: Yes, I remember an Oreo advertisement from my childhood. It showed people dipping the cookie into milk and enjoying it, which was very memorable and fun to watch.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子结尾不完整。建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，并补充具体例子使内容更丰富。

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and buses because they have many passengers. Advertisers use these spaces to reach a large audience and promote their products effectively.

建议: 回答表达不流畅，词汇使用错误且重复，建议使用更准确的词汇和完整句子表达观点。

示例: Yes, I like advertisements because they are a creative way to promote products and have commercial value.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构混乱，建议使用完整句子并注意主谓一致，同时提供更具体的例子。

示例: I like advertisements that have catchy songs or funny stories. For example, Indian ads are often very humorous and make people laugh.

建议: 回答中表达不够清晰，词汇使用不当，建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子表达感受。

示例: Yes, I often see ads on my phone and computer. However, I find some ads annoying, especially pop-ups that might contain viruses.

× Every time the commercial came or during my favorite TV shows, it showed people drink, drinking the cookie into the milk and enjoying it, which made me very memorable and fun to watch it.

✓ Every time the commercial came or during my favorite TV shows, it showed people drinking the cookie into the milk and enjoying it, which made it very memorable and fun to watch.

这里动词短语应使用动名词形式表示正在进行的动作，'drink' 应改为 'drinking'。另外，'made me very memorable' 中 'me' 应改为 'it'，因为指的是广告本身。动名词用法错误和代词指代错误。

× Every time the commercial came or during my favorite TV shows, it showed people drink, drinking the cookie into the milk and enjoying it, which made me very memorable and fun to watch it.

✓ Every time the commercial came or during my favorite TV shows, it showed people drinking the cookie into the milk and enjoying it, which made it very memorable and fun to watch.

句中 'made me very memorable' 中 'me' 指代不明，应改为 'it' 指代广告本身。代词使用错误导致句意不清。

× Every day, advertisers use these spaces to reach a large audience, hoping that more people will notice their products and device decide to buy them.

✓ Every day, advertisers use these spaces to reach a large audience, hoping that more people will notice their products and decide to buy them.

句中 'device decide' 是错误的，'device' 应删除，直接用 'decide'。这是代词误用导致的语法错误。

× Because the ad advertisement, I think it is kind of artistic way to dis disseminate the product and it's also a kind of commercial value on it.

✓ Because of the advertisement, I think it is a kind of artistic way to disseminate the product and it also has commercial value.

句中 'Because the ad advertisement' 应为 'Because of the advertisement'，介词使用错误；'dis disseminate' 拼写错误；'a kind of artistic way' 前缺冠词；'it's also a kind of commercial value on it' 结构不当，应改为 'it also has commercial value'。

× With a song that's really catchy I think or they have a funny stories on in this ad ads.

✓ I like ads with a really catchy song or funny stories in them.

句子结构混乱，'a funny stories' 中 'a' 与复数 'stories' 不匹配；'on in this ad ads' 介词使用错误且重复。需要调整句子结构和冠词使用。

× With a song that's really catchy I think or they have a funny stories on in this ad ads.

✓ I like ads with a really catchy song or funny stories in them.

'a funny stories' 中 'a' 是单数冠词，但 'stories' 是复数，冠词和名词数不一致。

× People will laugh out when they have ads on TV.

✓ People will laugh out loud when they see ads on TV.

'laugh out' 用法不正确，正确表达应为 'laugh out loud'；'have ads on TV' 应改为 'see ads on TV'，动词搭配错误。

× But I feel sore annoyed when I see the ads on my computer because every time this all the rubbish things, maybe the virus will affect your computer and I really hate it that things pop out.

✓ But I feel so annoyed when I see ads on my computer because most of the time they are rubbish, maybe viruses will affect your computer, and I really hate those pop-up things.

'sore annoyed' 应为 'so annoyed'，形容词使用错误；'this all the rubbish things' 结构混乱，应改为 'most of the time they are rubbish'；'that things pop out' 应为 'those pop-up things'，代词和表达不当。