广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中有较多重复和语法错误，表达不够自然。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用连贯的句子描述广告内容和印象。

示例: Yes, I remember a coconut juice advertisement from my childhood. It impressed me because it featured a beautiful woman, which made the ad very attractive.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议使用完整句子并避免重复，同时用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains because I usually travel by train. These ads are placed to catch passengers' attention during their journey.

建议: 回答不够清晰，语法和词汇使用不准确。建议直接表达观点，并用具体理由支持，同时减少语气词。

示例: Actually, I don't like advertisements because they can be annoying and interrupt what I'm doing.

建议: 回答较好，但表达略显简单。建议丰富细节，使用更多连接词和具体例子，使回答更自然流畅。

示例: I prefer advertisements that target young people and promote mental health or education because they have a positive impact on society and individuals.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和重复，表达不够连贯。建议使用正确时态，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone because smartphones are very common nowadays, so ads appear everywhere on these devices.

× I think about the coconut juice juices ad advertisement.

✓ I think about the coconut juice advertisement.

这里“juice”是不可数名词，不需要复数形式“juices”，应使用单数形式。

× This ad advertisement uh made me really impress impressive because because uh, there is a beautiful woman in there, so that's why it's attractive me.

✓ This advertisement impressed me because there is a beautiful woman in it, so that's why it attracts me.

“impress”是动词，需用过去式“impressed”表示过去发生的动作；“impressive”是形容词，不能直接用作动词；“attractive”是形容词，不能直接跟宾语，应使用动词“attract”。

× I tend to see a lot of advertisement on the train because I usually take the train to to other places.

✓ I tend to see a lot of advertisements on the train because I usually take the train to other places.

“advertisement”应使用复数形式“advertisements”，表示很多广告。

× So that's why UMM often seem advertising on the train to show people, uh, watch it.

✓ So that's why I often see advertisements on the train to show people, uh, watch it.

“seem”是动词，意思是“似乎”，此处应使用“see”表示“看到”；“advertising”作为名词时应用复数形式“advertisements”。

× Actually I don't like, uh, seeing a lot of advertisements because it's so troublesome, uh, most of the time, uh, right now the, the leader often, umm, show advertisement to people catching.

✓ Actually, I don't like seeing a lot of advertisements because it's so troublesome most of the time. Right now, the leader often shows advertisements to people catching them.

“show”动词需与主语“the leader”保持第三人称单数一致，改为“shows”；“advertisement”应使用复数形式“advertisements”。

× Well, I prefer to see some youthful advertisement which can improve our mental health and develop, umm, our knowledge.

✓ Well, I prefer to see some youthful advertisements which can improve our mental health and develop our knowledge.

“advertisement”应使用复数形式“advertisements”，表示多种广告。

× Well, I always seen a lot of advertisement on my phone because in today's society people use, use, use the phone is very common.

✓ Well, I always see a lot of advertisements on my phone because in today's society, using the phone is very common.

“seen”是过去分词，需用一般现在时“see”与“always”搭配；“advertisement”应用复数“advertisements”；“people use, use, use the phone is very common”结构混乱，改为“using the phone is very common”。

× So that's why I always seen a lot of advertising on my phone.

✓ So that's why I always see a lot of advertisements on my phone.

“seen”应改为一般现在时“see”；“advertising”作为名词时应用复数形式“advertisements”。