广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，句子结构不够清晰，建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

示例: Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me deeply as a child. I was a big fan of cartoon movies, and the ad featured some of my favorite cartoon characters on TV, which attracted my attention.

建议: 回答中表达不够准确，存在语法错误和重复，建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and other public transport like the Metro. These ads are placed conveniently, so passengers can easily notice them, which helps attract a lot of attention.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简化表达，避免重复，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

示例: Yes, I like advertisements because they provide useful suggestions about products I want to buy. Moreover, public service ads often help people learn how to protect the environment.

建议: 回答不完整且有重复，建议完整表达观点，避免重复，并用连接词连接句子，使表达更清晰。

示例: In my opinion, I like public service advertisements the most because they raise awareness about important issues like protecting the earth. They also encourage people to take positive actions.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议使用正确的主语和动词形式，避免模糊表达，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone. For example, when I watch TV programs, many pop-up ads appear, which I find quite annoying.

× Yes, there is a very interesting advertisement that make make a deep impression on me when I was when I was young because I was big fan of cartoon movies when I was young and the advertisement is have some cartoon features that I love very much on the TV.

✓ Yes, there is a very interesting advertisement that made a deep impression on me when I was young because I was a big fan of cartoon movies when I was young and the advertisement has some cartoon features that I love very much on the TV.

这里的错误主要是单复数形式错误。动词"make"应为过去式"made"，名词"fan"前应加不定冠词"a"，动词"is have"应改为单数形式"has"。这些错误影响了句子的时态和主谓一致。建议注意动词时态和名词单复数及冠词的正确使用。

× Yes, I always see a lot of advertisements on trains and other transports like the Metro, because the advertisements on the trains or the metrics on this transport are very convenient for people to work at, so people can see them very, very, very nice.

✓ Yes, I always see a lot of advertisements on trains and other transport like the Metro, because the advertisements on the trains or the Metro on this transport are very convenient for people to see, so people can see them very clearly.

这里"transports"应为不可数名词"transport"，"metrics"应为"Metro"，且句子中"work at"用法不当，应改为"see"。此外，"very nice"用来形容看到广告不合适，应改为"very clearly"。建议注意名词的单复数和正确的搭配用法。

× Well, I love advertisements very much because I think advertisements can help me to to give me some suggestions for the things I want to buy.

✓ Well, I love advertisements very much because I think advertisements can give me some suggestions for the things I want to buy.

这里"can help me to to give me"重复且冗余，正确表达应为"can give me"。建议避免重复使用相同的动词结构，简洁表达。

× Also, advertisements such like public advertisements can always can always help people learn to how to protect the earth.

✓ Also, advertisements such as public advertisements can always help people learn how to protect the earth.

"such like"用法错误，应改为"such as"。此外，"learn to how to"结构错误，应为"learn how to"。建议注意固定搭配和介词的正确使用。

× Well in my opinion I love the public service advertisements much the most because I think public service advertisements can help us re raise the awareness of of the important issues like protecting the earth.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I love public service advertisements the most because I think public service advertisements can help us raise awareness of important issues like protecting the earth.

"re raise"重复，应为"raise"；"the awareness of of"重复，应为"awareness of"；"the public service advertisements much the most"表达不自然，应为"public service advertisements the most"。建议注意重复词汇的删除和表达的自然流畅。

× Yes, I always see a lot of advertisements when you are on my phone.

✓ Yes, I always see a lot of advertisements when I am on my phone.

句中"you are on my phone"人称错误，应为第一人称"I am on my phone"。建议注意人称代词的一致性。

× For example, when I watch some TV programs on my phone, I always see a lot of catching advertisements split out.

✓ For example, when I watch some TV programs on my phone, I always see a lot of catchy advertisements pop up.

"catching advertisements split out"表达不正确，"catching"应为形容词"catchy"，"split out"应改为"pop up"表示广告弹出。建议学习常用形容词和动词短语的正确搭配。

× I feel some noise about it.

✓ I feel annoyed by it.

"feel some noise"表达不自然，应该用"feel annoyed"表示感到烦恼。建议使用恰当的形容词表达情感。