广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“a advertisement”应为“an advertisement”，“made me a mouse watering”应为“made my mouth water”。建议注意冠词使用和固定搭配，避免语法错误，同时简化表达，使语言更自然流畅。

示例: Yes, there was a TV commercial about chocolate that left a deep impression on me as a child. It made my mouth water, and I asked my mother to buy it for me because it looked so crunchy and creamy.

建议: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，存在语法错误和重复填充词。建议回答时注意句子完整，避免重复使用“uh”，并使用连贯的句子表达观点。

示例: Yes, advertisements are everywhere on trains and other types of transport, especially on screens inside train compartments. I think our lives are flooded with various kinds of advertisements.

建议: 回答中存在重复词汇和语法错误，如“a a knowledge”应为“knowledge”，表达不够简洁。建议减少填充词，使用更准确的表达，并简洁明了地说明理由。

示例: Yes, I like advertisements because they provide knowledge about different products. This helps me compare their advantages and disadvantages to make the best choice.

建议: 回答中充满了填充词，表达不连贯且有语法错误。建议减少“uh”等填充词，使用连贯的句子结构，并清晰表达观点。

示例: I like TV commercials that combine music and images because they really attract me. Some of them are like short movies, which makes them very engaging.

建议: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议完整回答问题，避免重复填充词，使用正确的语法结构，并清楚表达观点。

示例: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone and computer because it is very convenient to use these devices to watch ads. Publishers frequently send advertisements online.

× There was a advertisement that left the deepest impression on me when I was a child.

✓ There was an advertisement that left the deepest impression on me when I was a child.

冠词使用错误，'advertisement'以元音音素开头，应该用'an'而不是'a'。

× which made me a mouse watering and I asked my mother to buy it for me.

✓ which made my mouth water and I asked my mother to buy it for me.

短语错误，正确表达是'made my mouth water'，表示让人垂涎欲滴。

× It has to so crunchy and creamy.

✓ It is so crunchy and creamy.

句子结构错误，'has to so'不合适，应改为'It is so'来描述食物的口感。

× sure advertisements, uh, uh, was everywhere on train or any type of transport,

✓ sure advertisements, uh, uh, were everywhere on trains or any type of transport,

主谓一致错误，复数名词'advertisements'应搭配复数动词'were'，且'train'应为复数形式。

× especially, uh, in the, on the screen inside the train compartment or other vehicles.

✓ especially, uh, on the screen inside the train compartment or other vehicles.

介词使用错误，'on the screen'表示在屏幕上，'in the screen'不正确。

× I think our life is flooded with all kinds of.

✓ I think our life is flooded with all kinds of advertisements.

句子不完整，缺少宾语，需补充' advertisements'使句子完整。

× I like advertisements uh, because it is a good way to have a a knowledge of a range of uh, products,

✓ I like advertisements uh, because they are a good way to have knowledge of a range of uh, products,

主谓一致错误，复数主语'advertisements'应搭配复数动词'they are'，且'a knowledge'中不需要冠词'a'。

× I can compare advantages and disadvantages of different products from uh advertisements to make uh the best uh, choice.

✓ I can compare the advantages and disadvantages of different products from uh advertisements to make uh the best uh, choice.

缺少定冠词'the'，用于特指优势和劣势。

× maybe I like, uh, TV, uh, uh, commercials, uh, which combine music and the image, uh, it really attracts me and, uh, somewhere productive, uh, TV commercials, uh, just like, uh, short movies.

✓ maybe I like, uh, TV, uh, uh, commercials, uh, which combine music and images, uh, they really attract me and, uh, sometimes productive, uh, TV commercials, uh, are just like, uh, short movies.

单复数错误，'image'应为复数'images'；主谓一致错误，'it really attracts'应为'they really attract'；词汇错误，'somewhere'应为'sometimes'；缺少动词，补充'are'。

× often see much advertisements online iPhone, uh, because I think uh, it's very handy and uh, convenient to use phone, uh, to uh, watch the advertisements.

✓ I often see many advertisements online on my iPhone, uh, because I think uh, it's very handy and uh, convenient to use the phone, uh, to uh, watch advertisements.

量词错误，'much'用于不可数名词，'advertisements'为可数名词应使用'many'；缺少主语'I'；缺少介词'on'；缺少定冠词'the'。

× So uh, the, uh, the publisher often, uh, send.

✓ So uh, the, uh, publisher often, uh, sends them.

句子不完整，缺少宾语；主谓一致错误，'publisher'为单数，动词应为'sends'。