广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'catchy tunes and catchy lyrics' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about what made the advertisement impressive to you.

示例: Yes, I remember a toothpaste advertisement from my childhood that really impressed me because it used catchy tunes and colourful animations. Moreover, the lively background and engaging audio made me want to try the product immediately.

建议: Your answer is clear but contains some repetition and minor grammatical errors. Use linking words to improve flow and avoid repeating words like 'they'. Also, try to expand your answer with more specific details or examples.

示例: Since I live in a small town, I rarely use public transport. However, when I visit Tehran, I often take the underground trains, which are covered with numerous advertisements. Although they can be distracting, I usually ignore them as I focus on my journey.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains unclear phrases like 'Papa bad'. Make sure to finish your sentences and clarify your points. Use linking words to contrast your opinions and provide specific examples.

示例: It really depends on the situation. For example, when I'm searching for gadgets or clothes, I enjoy watching advertisements because they help me find new products. However, when I'm busy or focused on something important, I find ads distracting and prefer to ignore them.

建议: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to organise your ideas more clearly and use linking words to connect them. Also, be more specific about what makes the advertisements appealing to you.

示例: I prefer advertisements that come from authentic sources and use creative elements like catchy tunes and engaging videos. For instance, when new technology products are launched, their ads fascinate me because they showcase innovation and creativity effectively.

× Yes, I recall that when I was a child, they advertised a specific toothpaste and it gave me motivation to use it and I purchased it on that time.

✓ Yes, I recall that when I was a child, they advertised a specific toothpaste and it gave me motivation to use it and I purchased it at that time.

The phrase 'on that time' is incorrect; the correct preposition to use with 'time' in this context is 'at'. This is a common prepositional error. Using 'at that time' correctly indicates a specific point in the past.

× They used animations, movies and audios tools.

✓ They used animations, movies and audio tools.

The word 'audios' is incorrect here; 'audio' is an adjective describing 'tools'. Therefore, 'audio tools' is the correct phrase. Also, 'audio' is uncountable and should not be pluralised.

× But when I go to Tehran I have to use underground trains and they they are full of advertisement, they distract me and I sometimes ignore them.

✓ But when I go to Tehran I have to use underground trains and they are full of advertisements; they distract me and I sometimes ignore them.

The repetition 'they they' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'they'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. The sentence is also improved by separating clauses with a semicolon for clarity.

× Actually it's really depends on the occasion.

✓ Actually, it really depends on the occasion.

The phrase 'it's really depends' is incorrect because 'depends' is a verb that should not be preceded by 'is' in this context. The correct form is 'it really depends'. The contraction 'it's' (it is) is unnecessary here.

× When I want to look for a specific gadgets and clothes, I like to follow them and when I have something important to do, for instance when I want to search, I don't like Papa bad, they distract me and I.

✓ When I want to look for specific gadgets and clothes, I like to follow advertisements, but when I have something important to do, for instance when I want to search, I don't like pop ads because they distract me.

The original sentence has several issues: 'a specific gadgets' is incorrect because 'gadgets' is plural and should not have 'a'; 'Papa bad' seems to be a typo for 'pop ads'; the sentence ends abruptly with 'and I.' which is incomplete. The corrected sentence removes the article before plural nouns, clarifies 'pop ads', and completes the thought for clarity.

× I prefer advertisements which are really authentic sources and they they use catchy tunes, catchy lyrics and audio videos because they want to show they're creative and when the latest technology is released to the market, they advertise.

✓ I prefer advertisements which are really authentic sources and they use catchy tunes, catchy lyrics and audio videos because they want to show they're creative, and when the latest technology is released to the market, they advertise it.

The repetition 'they they' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'they'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'they advertise.' which is incomplete; adding 'it' clarifies that 'it' refers to the latest technology. This improves sentence completeness and clarity.