广告— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by avoiding repetition and making the sentences more concise. Try to directly state the main idea first, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid redundancy such as repeating 'after I bought'.

示例: Yes, there was an advertisement for a kitchen gadget called the Nicer Dicer that really caught my attention as a child. I begged my mom to buy it because it seemed very useful. However, after we got it, I realized it wasn't as helpful as I expected, which made the ad memorable to me.

建议: Your answer covers the topic but could be clearer and more organized. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing like 'the people that they're directly promoting'. Also, try to be more specific about the types of advertisements and their impact.

示例: Yes, there are many advertisements in public transportation, especially in metros, including large billboards and brochures. I find it overwhelming because companies invest a lot of money in these ads to directly promote their products to passengers.

建议: Your answer expresses your opinion clearly but could be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like 'my favorite program' and use smoother transitions to explain your feelings and reasons.

示例: To be honest, I don't like advertisements, especially those on TV. For instance, last week I was watching a show I enjoy, but I had to sit through five ads during it, which was quite frustrating. However, I understand that ads are necessary for companies to promote their products.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to list your points. Also, clarify your ideas and avoid confusing phrases like 'don't want to realize it for all people'.

示例: In my opinion, a good advertisement should be easy to understand and visually appealing. Additionally, it should be tailored to the target audience so that it effectively captures their attention.

× And as you guess, after I bought, after I bought it, it's very useless for me and it really stood out to me.

✓ And as you can guess, after I bought it, it was very useless for me and it really stood out to me.

The phrase 'as you guess' is incorrect because 'guess' should be in the modal verb form 'can guess' to express possibility. Also, 'it's very useless' should be in past tense 'it was very useless' to match the past event. Repeating 'after I bought' is redundant; it should be stated once.

× Yes, there's a huge amount of advertisement in public transportation, especially in metros and a huge billboards, many brochures and the people that they're directly promoting their products and force you to buy them.

✓ Yes, there are a huge number of advertisements in public transportation, especially in metros, huge billboards, many brochures, and people who are directly promoting their products and forcing you to buy them.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'a huge number of'. 'Amount' is used with uncountable nouns; 'number' is correct for countable nouns like advertisements. 'There's' (there is) should be 'there are' for plural. 'A huge billboards' is incorrect; 'a' should be removed or 'billboards' made singular. 'The people that they're' is awkward; 'people who are' is better. 'Force' should be 'forcing' to match the continuous action.

× And that's frustrating and I don't like it. But as I said, it's necessarily for them.

✓ And that's frustrating and I don't like it. But as I said, it's necessary for them.

'Necessarily' is an adverb, but the sentence requires the adjective 'necessary' to describe 'it'. Using the adverb here is incorrect.

× I think do you like. In my opinion, a good advertisement should have two main points.

✓ I think, in my opinion, a good advertisement should have two main points.

The phrase 'I think do you like' is ungrammatical and confusing. It should be removed or rephrased. Starting with 'I think, in my opinion,' is redundant but acceptable; better to choose one. The sentence structure needs correction for clarity.

× ...and you should pay attention on it and don't want to realize it for all people.

✓ ...and you should pay attention to it and not want to show it to all people.

'Pay attention' is followed by the preposition 'to', not 'on'. Also, 'don't want to realize it for all people' is incorrect; 'realize' is not used this way. The intended meaning is likely 'not want to show it to everyone' or 'not want everyone to notice it'.