电脑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Javobni qisqa, aniq va grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri gaplar bilan qayta tuzing. Boshlanishda mavzuga to‘g‘ri kirish (topic sentence) qiling, keyin qisqacha sabablarni ayting. Bog‘lovchi so‘zlardan (for example, because, so, and) foydalanib mantiqni yaxshilang. Grammatik xatolarga – fe’llar va zamonlarga, artikllarga va to‘g‘ri predloglarga e’tibor bering. Maksimal 4-5 jumla ichida qoling.

示例: I use a computer every day, especially when I study for the IELTS exam. For example, I practice my writing and complete exercises on my laptop. I also use online resources and apps to improve my vocabulary and grammar. This helps me prepare efficiently for the test.

建议: Javobni aniq vaqt bilan boshlang va sodda tuzilmadan foydalaning. Kerakli ma’lumotni bering: yosh, joy va nima o‘rganganingiz. Kerak bo‘lsa bir yoki ikki qo‘shimcha detal bilan to‘ldiring va ortiqcha takrorlardan qoching. Bog‘lovchi so‘zlar (when, because, so) bilan gaplar uyg‘unligini ta’minlang.

示例: I first used a computer when I was ten years old at school. We had an information technology class where we learned basic laptop skills. I remember practising typing and simple programs during those lessons.

建议: Bu savolga aniq fikrni ifoda etuvchi topic sentence bilan javob bering (e.g. Life would be difficult without a computer). So‘ng sabablar va natijalarni bering (work, study, communication). Grammatik jihatdan noto‘g‘ri iboralarni tuzating va noaniq so‘zlarni almashtiring. Nimadir “painful for my career” o‘rniga aniqroq ta’sirni ayting (e.g. it would harm my studies or job prospects). Maksimal 4 jumla bilan cheklang.

示例: Life would be much harder without a computer because I rely on it for studying and communicating. I use it to complete assignments and access learning materials, so losing it would slow my progress. It would also make finding information and contacting teachers more difficult.

建议: Savolga ro‘yobga chiqqan aniq misollar bilan javob bering: qachon va nima uchun qiyin bo‘lishini tushuntiring. Transportda yoki signal zaif joylarda internet muammosi va ekran hajmi kabi sabablarni sanab o‘ting. Bog‘lovchi so‘zlar (for example, when, because, therefore) va to‘g‘ri prepozitsiyalarni ishlating. Gaplarni qisqa va aniq qiling.

示例: It is difficult to use a computer when I am on a bus or in a car because the internet signal is unstable. Also, the laptop is not convenient to use in cramped or moving spaces. In those situations I prefer using my phone because it is more portable and easier to handle.

× Currently are you from the computer in everyday because these days I prepare for the IELTS exam and for the reason I try to improve my writing skills and I work on the LA my laptop in early.

✓ I use the computer every day because I am preparing for the IELTS exam, so I try to improve my writing skills and I work on my laptop in the morning.

The original sentence has incorrect word order, unnecessary words, and article/pronoun errors leading to unclear meaning. Suggestions: place subject before verb (I use), use correct adverbial phrase (every day), use present continuous for ongoing action (I am preparing), connect ideas with so or because, use correct possessive (my laptop), and use a clear time expression (in the morning).

× If I speak about my first time to use from the computer, I was 10 years old.

✓ If I talk about the first time I used a computer, I was 10 years old.

Use simple past for a completed action in the past (I used). 'Speak about my first time to use from the computer' is ungrammatical; use 'talk about the first time I used a computer.' Remove unnecessary preposition 'from.'

× This time I study at school and this time we have information studies and we learn how to work on the laptop.

✓ At that time I was studying at school; we had computer classes and learned how to use a laptop.

The sentence describes a past situation, so past tense is required (was studying, had, learned). Also 'information studies' is nonstandard; use 'computer classes' or 'IT lessons.' Use 'use a laptop' instead of 'work on the laptop.'

× From my perspective, I didn't live without the computer because computer is a vital thing for me to my daily life.

✓ From my perspective, I could not live without a computer because it is vital to my daily life.

Use modal 'could not' or 'cannot' to express inability. Use 'a computer' or 'the computer' consistently and include the pronoun 'it.' Replace 'vital thing for me to my daily life' with 'vital to my daily life.'

× Everyday I use from the computer and I try to improve my Alice score.

✓ Every day I use the computer and I try to improve my IELTS score.

Do not use 'use from the'; correct form is 'use the computer.' 'Everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverbial phrase): use 'every day.' 'Alice score' seems to be a typo for 'IELTS score.'

× It's a very painful for my career.

✓ It would be very harmful for my career.

'Painful' is not the right collocation for career consequences; use 'harmful' or 'detrimental.' Include appropriate verb phrase 'would be' or 'is' depending on meaning. Here conditional 'would be' fits the hypothetical context.

× There are many kind of conditions, for example I speak about it when I on the bus or on the car.

✓ There are many kinds of situations; for example, I am talking about it when I am on the bus or in the car.

Use 'kinds of' (plural) and 'situations' fits better. Use present continuous for ongoing situations (I am talking). Use correct prepositions: 'on the bus' and 'in the car.' Include commas for clarity.

× This time I do news from the laptop because it's very unknown for me.

✓ Sometimes I read the news on my laptop, but that is difficult for me.

'Do news' is incorrect; use 'read the news.' 'From the laptop' should be 'on my laptop.' 'Very unknown for me' is unidiomatic; use 'difficult for me' or 'unfamiliar to me.' Adjust tense/aspect to reflect habitual action (sometimes I read).

× And in this case I use from the on the my phone some convenient for me.

✓ In that case I use my phone because it is more convenient for me.

Remove incorrect sequence 'use from the on the my phone.' Correct form: 'use my phone.' Use 'more convenient' to compare, and keep word order 'it is more convenient for me.'