电脑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Ваш адказ натуральны, але ёсць некаторыя памылкі ў граматыцы і лексіцы, напрыклад, "computer it is such a efficient thing" лепш сказаць "a computer is such an efficient tool". Таксама варта пазбягаць паўтораў і зрабіць адказ больш сціснутым і лагічным, выкарыстоўваючы злучальныя словы.

示例: I use a computer in various situations because it is an efficient tool that helps me study and improve my productivity. Additionally, I sometimes use it to relax, for example, by playing games after a long day.

建议: Ваш адказ мае некаторыя граматычныя памылкі і не зусім лагічную структуру. Рэкамендуецца пачынаць з прамой адказы, выкарыстоўваць злучальныя словы і ўдакладняць інфармацыю больш натуральна.

示例: I first used a computer in my early childhood, although it was actually a laptop. My father gave it to me, downloaded a game, and we played it together.

建议: У вашым адказе ёсць некаторыя граматычныя памылкі і неадпаведнасці ў сэнсе, напрыклад, "if I hadn't, a computer" не зразумела. Рэкамендуецца выкарыстоўваць больш простыя і ясныя канструкцыі, а таксама звязваць думкі лагічна.

示例: Without a computer, my life would be more complicated because preparing for classes would be harder. However, I might spend more time outdoors and go for walks, which could make life more interesting.

建议: Ваш адказ зразумелы, але ёсць некаторыя граматычныя памылкі, напрыклад, "requires it" павінна быць "require it". Таксама варта выкарыстоўваць злучальныя словы для лепшай лагічнасці і пазбягаць паўтораў.

示例: Nowadays, it would be difficult for me to use a computer without an Internet connection because almost everything I do requires it. For example, I need the Internet to search for study materials, access books, and download games.

× I would use a computer in many situations because computer it is such a efficient thing which helps me study, improving my productivity and sometimes I use it just to chill out, for example play a game after a long day.

✓ I would use a computer in many situations because it is such an efficient thing which helps me study, improve my productivity, and sometimes I use it just to chill out, for example, play a game after a long day.

The phrase 'computer it is' is incorrect; 'it' should directly refer to 'a computer' without repeating the noun. Also, 'a efficient' should be 'an efficient' because 'efficient' starts with a vowel sound. Additionally, 'improving' should be 'improve' to maintain parallel structure with 'helps me study'. Adding commas improves clarity.

× First time I had tried a computer was in early childhood I guess, but it better to say it wasn't computer, it was a laptop.

✓ The first time I tried a computer was in early childhood, I guess, but it is better to say it wasn't a computer, it was a laptop.

The past perfect 'had tried' is unnecessary here; simple past 'tried' is correct. 'It better to say' should be 'it is better to say' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'wasn't computer' needs an article: 'wasn't a computer'.

× My father gave it to me and downloaded a game and my father and I played this game together.

✓ My father gave it to me, downloaded a game, and my father and I played this game together.

The sentence is correct but can be improved by removing the repeated subject 'my father' in the second clause for conciseness. Also, adding commas improves readability.

× I suppose that without a computer my life would be much more complicated because it is much harder to prepare for classes and studying without it.

✓ I suppose that without a computer, my life would be much more complicated because it is much harder to prepare for classes and study without it.

The phrase 'prepare for classes and studying' is inconsistent; 'prepare for classes and study' maintains parallel verb forms. Also, a comma after 'computer' improves sentence clarity.

× However, if I hadn't, a computer in my life would be also more interesting and I would go for a walk.

✓ However, if I didn't have a computer in my life, it would also be more interesting and I would go for a walk.

The phrase 'if I hadn't' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'if I didn't have a computer'. The sentence structure is corrected to clearly express the conditional meaning.

× Nowadays it would be difficult for me to use a computer without the Internet connection because almost all the things I do in my computer requires it.

✓ Nowadays, it would be difficult for me to use a computer without an Internet connection because almost everything I do on my computer requires it.

'The Internet connection' should be 'an Internet connection' as it is not specific. 'In my computer' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on my computer'. 'Almost all the things' is better expressed as 'almost everything' for naturalness.

× For example, searching for materials for study, books, download games.

✓ For example, searching for study materials, books, and downloading games.

The list is inconsistent; 'searching for materials for study' and 'download games' mix forms. Changing to 'searching for study materials, books, and downloading games' maintains parallel gerund forms and clarity.