电脑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答较为完整，但句子较长且缺少适当的连接词，导致表达不够流畅。建议使用连接词分隔句子，使表达更自然且逻辑清晰。

示例: I use the computer to read literature and find information because it provides extensive and comprehensive resources that are easy to search. Additionally, I watch movies on the computer since its screen is larger and more user-friendly than a mobile phone.

建议: 回答内容具体且结构清晰，但部分句子时态使用不够准确，建议注意时态一致性，提升表达准确性。

示例: I first used a computer when I was in primary school, mainly to play video games. I enjoyed it a lot, but I often played for too long, so my parents set a password to limit my usage. After that, I had to be more careful about how much time I spent on the computer.

建议: 回答表达了观点，但连接词使用不当，导致句子衔接不够自然。建议使用更合适的连接词，使表达更连贯。

示例: Life would be less convenient without computers. I wouldn't be able to access information quickly like I can on the Internet. Moreover, I wouldn't be able to play games or watch movies online, which would make life less enjoyable.

建议: 回答内容具体，但句子结构较为简单，建议使用更多连接词和复合句，使表达更丰富且自然。

示例: I find it difficult to use a computer in two conditions. Firstly, when the computer itself has problems, such as acting up or being infected by a virus. Secondly, when there is a network issue and websites won't load, which is very frustrating.

× I use the computer to read literature and find information because it provides extensive and comprehensive information that's easy to search and also watch movies on the computer because its screen is larger and more app friendly than the mobile phone.

✓ I use the computer to read literature and find information because it provides extensive and comprehensive information that's easy to search, and I also watch movies on the computer because its screen is larger and more app friendly than the mobile phone.

原句中缺少连接词，导致句子结构不完整。应在“search”和“also watch”之间加上“and I”使句子完整且流畅。

× I often play for too long, so my parents set a password to limit my usage.

✓ I often played for too long, so my parents set a password to limit my usage.

句子描述的是过去的情况，动词“play”应使用过去时“played”以保持时态一致。

× Life would be less convenient without computers. I wouldn't be able to access information quickly like I can on the Internet, so also I wouldn't be able to play games or watch movies online, which would make life less enjoyable.

✓ Life would be less convenient without computers. I wouldn't be able to access information quickly like I can on the Internet, and I also wouldn't be able to play games or watch movies online, which would make life less enjoyable.

“so also”用法不正确，应改为“and I also”连接两个并列句，使句子更自然流畅。

× I find it difficult to use a computer in two conditions. The first one is when there is a problem with the computer itself, when it's acting up or has a virus.

✓ I find it difficult to use a computer in two conditions. The first one is when there is a problem with the computer itself, when it's acting up or has a virus.

此句无明显冠词错误，保持原句。

× The second situation is when there is a network issue, the website won't load.

✓ The second situation is when there is a network issue and the website won't load.

原句中逗号连接两个独立分句，建议用连词“and”连接，使句子结构更清晰。