电脑— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, say 'I prefer using a computer when I study or watch movies on Netflix because I enjoy the big screen.' Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and keep the answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: I prefer using a computer when I study or watch movies on Netflix because the big screen enhances my viewing experience.

建议: Your answer provides good content but can be improved by using correct grammar and clearer linking words. For example, say 'The first time I used a computer was in my childhood at the computer lab in my school. It was a great experience. Since then, I have learned to use computers well, and now I have two at home.' This makes your answer more natural and coherent.

示例: The first time I used a computer was in my childhood at my school's computer lab. It was a great experience. Since then, I have learned to use computers well, and now I have two at home.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but contains some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. For example, 'I have my notes in egg' is unclear. Instead, say 'I keep my notes on it.' Also, use linking words like 'for example' to connect ideas. A better answer would be: 'My life would be incomplete without a computer because I use it for everything. For example, I study on it and keep my notes there. Also, when I feel bored, I watch movies on Netflix.'

示例: My life would be incomplete without a computer because I use it for everything. For example, I study on it and keep my notes there. Also, when I feel bored, I watch movies on Netflix.

建议: Your answer repeats the same idea and has grammar errors. To improve, be concise and clear. For example, say 'It would be difficult for me to use a computer when new technology is introduced because I might find it hard to learn at first.' This avoids redundancy and improves clarity.

示例: It would be difficult for me to use a computer when new technology is introduced because I might find it hard to learn at first.

× I prefer using computer when I am studying or when I have to watch a movies on Netflix because I can enjoy watching movies in the big screen.

✓ I prefer using a computer when I am studying or when I have to watch movies on Netflix because I can enjoy watching movies on the big screen.

The word 'computer' is countable and requires an article 'a' before it. Also, 'a movies' is incorrect because 'movies' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'In the big screen' should be 'on the big screen' because we use 'on' for screens.

× In my childhood when I was in US Extended, I used a computer for first time in the computer lab at my school and it was a great experience.

✓ In my childhood when I was in US Extended, I used a computer for the first time in the computer lab at my school and it was a great experience.

The phrase 'for first time' is missing the definite article 'the'. It should be 'for the first time' to indicate a specific occasion in the past.

× Since then I have learned how to use it and now I have two computers at my home.

✓ Since then I have learned how to use it and now I have two computers at home.

The phrase 'at my home' is less common; 'at home' is the correct and natural expression in English.

× I think my life would be incomplete without a computer because nowadays I have a habit to use computer for everything.

✓ I think my life would be incomplete without a computer because nowadays I have a habit of using a computer for everything.

The phrase 'have a habit to use' is incorrect; it should be 'have a habit of using'. Also, 'use computer' needs an article 'a' before 'computer'.

× Like I study in my computer and I have my notes in egg.

✓ For example, I study on my computer and I have my notes in Evernote.

The phrase 'study in my computer' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'notes in egg' is unclear; likely the intended word is 'Evernote', a note-taking app.

× In fact, when I feel bored I watch movies on Netflix.

✓ In fact, when I feel bored, I watch movies on Netflix.

A comma is needed after the introductory phrase 'In fact' to separate it from the main clause.

× I think it would be difficult for me to use a computer when a new technology will come, becauses I might feel some difficulties while learning it a while learning a new technology.

✓ I think it would be difficult for me to use a computer when new technology comes, because I might feel some difficulties while learning it.

In conditional sentences, the future tense 'will come' is incorrect; the simple present 'comes' should be used. Also, 'becauses' is a typo and should be 'because'. The phrase 'a while learning a new technology' is redundant and incorrect; it should be removed.