艺术— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and complete. Avoid using '2nd' and incomplete phrases like 'or'. Try to provide a full explanation with linking words to make your response smoother and more coherent.

示例: Well, personally, I don't enjoy drawing because I'm not very skilled at it, and moreover, I lack interest in it.

建议: Your answer is good and includes reasons, but the last sentence is a bit awkward. Try to use more natural expressions and linking words to improve fluency and coherence.

示例: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because I appreciate the artistic mindset of various artists. I believe that every masterpiece tells a unique story, so I really love visiting these places to learn more about art.

建议: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and slightly unclear at the end. Try to use clearer phrasing and linking words to express your ideas more effectively.

示例: If I had the opportunity and enough time, I would like to learn more about art, especially about famous artists, to understand what inspired them and shaped their work.

建议: Your answer is understandable but contains filler words and some grammatical errors. Try to avoid fillers like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity and naturalness.

示例: When I was a kid, I learned drawing by tracing outlines or sketching, but I found it difficult to draw freely without these guides.

× Well, personally I really don't like drawing, first of all because I'm not good at it and 2nd I have no interest or.

✓ Well, personally I really don't like drawing, first of all because I'm not good at it and secondly I have no interest in it.

The phrase '2nd' should be written as 'secondly' for formal correctness and clarity. Also, the phrase 'no interest or' is incomplete and should be 'no interest in it' to correctly express lack of interest in drawing.

× Yes, I like to go to the gallery and appreciate the artistic mindset of various artists because I believe that in every masterpiece there is a story behind it. So I would really love visiting these.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the gallery and appreciate the artistic mindset of various artists because I believe that behind every masterpiece there is a story. So I would really love visiting them.

The phrase 'in every masterpiece there is a story behind it' is redundant and awkward; 'behind every masterpiece there is a story' is clearer. Also, 'visiting these' is vague; 'visiting them' correctly refers to the galleries or artworks previously mentioned.

× If given an opportunity and the luxury of time, I would like to learn more about art, especially the various artists, those who are well known and famous ones, I would like to know what made them.

✓ If given an opportunity and the luxury of time, I would like to learn more about art, especially about various artists, those who are well known and famous. I would like to know what made them successful.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks clarity. Adding 'about' before 'various artists' improves the sentence structure. Splitting into two sentences and completing the thought with 'successful' clarifies the meaning.

× When I was a kid, uh, I learned drawing by printing outlines or sketching drawings, but I really find it difficult to draw on my own without this outlines or guides.

✓ When I was a kid, uh, I learned drawing by printing outlines or sketching drawings, but I really find it difficult to draw on my own without these outlines or guides.

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' is singular and does not agree with the plural noun 'outlines'. It should be 'these outlines' to match the plural form.