艺术— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors, which affect naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, provide specific supporting details with linking words to improve coherence.

示例: No, I don't really like drawing, even when I have free time. This is because when I was in primary school, art was a main subject in my curriculum, and I never found it very interesting.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and incorrect word choices. To improve, answer directly, use appropriate vocabulary, and provide specific reasons with linking words to make your response coherent and natural.

示例: No, I don't enjoy going to galleries because I find them boring. Instead, I prefer online galleries where I can view paintings comfortably on my computer or TV.

建议: Your answer shows some relevant ideas but is hindered by grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions. Try to use correct grammar, avoid filler words, and organize your ideas logically with linking words to improve clarity and coherence.

示例: No, I am not very interested in learning more about art because I find it quite boring and have little experience. However, I sometimes draw when I feel stressed because it helps me relax.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors that affect clarity. To improve, respond directly, avoid redundancy, and provide specific examples with correct grammar and linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: Yes, I definitely learned drawing as a child. Like many kids, I enjoyed drawing things I saw around me, such as flowers and other objects in my daily life.

× I really drawings even I, umm, have free time.

✓ I really draw even when I have free time.

The word 'drawings' is a plural noun, but the sentence requires a verb. The correct verb form is 'draw' to express the action. Also, 'even I' is incorrect; it should be 'even when I'.

× the art, uh, art is one of uh, the main subjects in, in my, uh, curriculums

✓ art is one of the main subjects in my curriculum

The definite article 'the' before 'art' is unnecessary here. Also, 'curriculums' is less common; the plural of 'curriculum' is 'curricula'. The sentence is better without repeated 'uh' and 'in'.

× I think it's uh, not interesting idea.

✓ I think it's not an interesting idea.

The phrase 'not interesting idea' requires an indefinite article 'an' before 'interesting idea' because 'idea' is a singular countable noun.

× I find very par really powerings

✓ I find it very boring

The phrase 'par really powerings' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning seems to be 'very boring'. 'Powerings' is not a correct word here.

× we can accept to some wealth, have uh, online gallery

✓ we can have an online gallery

The phrase 'accept to some wealth' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'have an online gallery'. Also, 'an' is needed before 'online gallery' because 'online' starts with a vowel sound.

× I don't, uh, I'm not exciting about art.

✓ I don't, uh, I'm not excited about art.

The adjective 'exciting' describes something that causes excitement, but here the speaker describes their own feeling, so 'excited' is correct.

× I face very, uh, really boring and I don't have many experience about it.

✓ I find it very boring and I don't have much experience with it.

'Face' is incorrect here; 'find' is appropriate to express opinion. 'Experience' is uncountable, so 'much' is used instead of 'many'. Also, 'about' should be 'with' in this context.

× I can, uh, I will Draw Something to raise my stress.

✓ I can, uh, I will draw something to relieve my stress.

'Raise my stress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'relieve my stress' or 'reduce my stress'. Also, 'draw' should be lowercase unless at the beginning of a sentence.

× our every try when they were kids also love drawing drawings when they were kids.

✓ everyone when they were kids also loved drawing when they were kids.

'Our every try' is incorrect; 'everyone' is appropriate. 'Love' should be past tense 'loved' to match 'when they were kids'. 'Drawing drawings' is redundant; 'drawing' as a verb is sufficient.

× I uh often Draw Something, uh, some something I uh can see like flowers or something, umm in my life, umm and it's have me uh become.

✓ I often drew something, like flowers or something I could see in my life, and it helped me become...

'Draw' should be past tense 'drew' to match past time. 'Can' should be past 'could'. 'It's have me' is incorrect; 'it helped me' is correct. The sentence is incomplete but corrected as far as possible.