艺术— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I were' nên là 'I was'. Ngoài ra, hãy cố gắng trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ như 'uhm'. Bạn nên thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, I like drawing because I was inspired by reading manga when I was a child. Although I don't have much time to practice now, I still enjoy doodling small things from my daily life.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng thì đúng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'my first galleries I went to was' nên là 'the first gallery I went to was'. Hạn chế sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh'. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng và có cấu trúc tốt hơn.

示例: Yes, I like going to galleries when I have free time. The first gallery I visited was in Australia, where I studied art and power engineering. I really enjoyed the experience.

建议: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'umm' và 'uh'. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ như 'its effect on human' nên là 'its effect on humans'.

示例: Yes, I would love to learn more about art, especially how it can help people and affect future generations. I am also interested in how art and psychology can improve together.

建议: Bạn cần sử dụng thì đúng, ví dụ 'I start to practicing' nên là 'I started practicing'. Tránh dùng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'uh' và 'umm'. Câu trả lời nên hoàn chỉnh và có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn.

示例: Yes, I did. I started practicing drawing when I was a child because I was inspired by reading comic manga, which is a well-known part of Japanese culture famous for its unique style and imagination.

× I were inspired by reading manga and start practicing my drawings since I were a child.

✓ I was inspired by reading manga and started practicing my drawings since I was a child.

The verb 'were' is incorrect for the singular subject 'I' in past tense; it should be 'was'. Also, 'start' should be in past tense 'started' to match the past time frame indicated by 'since I was a child'.

× I'm still have my thought for drawing uh, small thing, doodling umm every single daily stuff in my life.

✓ I still have my thoughts about drawing, uh, small things, doodling, umm, every single daily thing in my life.

The phrase 'I'm still have' is incorrect; 'have' is a main verb and should not be preceded by 'am'. Also, 'thought' should be plural 'thoughts' to match the context, and 'small thing' should be plural 'small things' to be consistent with 'doodling' and 'every single daily stuff'.

× when I have free times.

✓ when I have free time.

The noun 'time' in this context is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'times'. The correct phrase is 'free time'.

× my first galleries I went to was in Australia, uh, where I study approach, uh, it's about art and power engineering for the future.

✓ my first gallery I went to was in Australia, uh, where I studied, uh, an approach about art and power engineering for the future.

'Galleries' should be singular 'gallery' to match 'was'. 'Study' should be past tense 'studied' to match the past event. Also, 'study approach' is unclear; adding 'an' and rephrasing improves clarity.

× how its effect on human and the next generations, uh, how it's gonna improve in terms of art and psychologies.

✓ how it affects humans and the next generations, uh, how it's going to improve in terms of art and psychology.

'its effect' should be 'it affects' to use the correct verb form. 'Human' should be plural 'humans'. 'Psychologies' is incorrect; the singular 'psychology' is appropriate here.

× I start to practicing my drawing since I was a child because I was inspired by uh, reading comic manga.

✓ I started practicing my drawing since I was a child because I was inspired by, uh, reading comic manga.

'Start' should be in past tense 'started' to match the past time frame indicated by 'since I was a child'. Also, 'to practicing' is incorrect; it should be 'practicing' without 'to' or 'to practice'.

× It's umm, Japanese culture well known with their style and umm, imaginations.

✓ It's, umm, Japanese culture well known for its style and, umm, imagination.

The correct preposition is 'known for' not 'known with'. Also, 'their' should be 'its' to refer to the singular noun 'culture'. 'Imaginations' should be singular 'imagination' in this context.