艺术— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by making sentences more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as "drawing paintings" (just "drawing" is enough) and clarify ideas more smoothly. Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy drawing. Not only do I like creating my own artwork, but I also appreciate being surrounded by various styles of modern paintings from famous artists. When I was a child, my art teachers often told me that I had a natural talent for drawing.

建议: Your answer is relevant but a bit wordy and slightly awkward in phrasing. Try to use simpler and clearer expressions, and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like "because" or "which" to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I absolutely enjoy going to galleries because they expose me to different types and styles of art. This experience helps me broaden my knowledge and understanding of various painting styles.

建议: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms (e.g., "started watching"), and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words like "for example" or "recently" to organize your ideas better.

示例: Of course, I take every opportunity to deepen my knowledge about art and paintings. For example, about two months ago, I started watching an art documentary on YouTube that explained the history of art from its origins to contemporary times, which greatly enhanced my understanding.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and use past tense correctly. Also, avoid vague phrases like "one of the initial skills that" without finishing the idea. Use linking words to connect your sentences logically.

示例: Yes, I remember starting to learn drawing when I was about five years old. At first, I drew messy lines and unknown characters, but I gradually improved until I was around ten or eleven. I believe drawing is one of the fundamental skills that helps develop creativity.

× Not only I'm intrigued by drawing paintings, I also like to be surrounded by all types and styles of modern famous paintings from different artists.

✓ Not only am I intrigued by drawing paintings, but I also like to be surrounded by all types and styles of modern famous paintings from different artists.

The phrase 'Not only' requires inversion of the subject and auxiliary verb, so 'I'm' should be 'am I'. Also, 'but' is needed to connect the two clauses properly. This is a common structure in English for emphasis.

× you would put yourself in a situation that you were surrounded by different type and styles of art.

✓ you would put yourself in a situation where you were surrounded by different types and styles of art.

The phrase 'different type and styles' mixes singular and plural incorrectly. 'Types' should be plural to match 'styles'. Also, 'that' should be 'where' to refer to 'situation' properly.

× There was about two months ago when I started to watching an art documentary in YouTube that was explaining what was the origin of art till the contemporary art and that really affect my knowledge.

✓ About two months ago, I started watching an art documentary on YouTube that explained the origin of art up to contemporary art, and that really affected my knowledge.

The sentence has multiple tense and structure errors: 'There was about two months ago' is incorrect; 'started to watching' should be 'started watching'; 'in YouTube' should be 'on YouTube'; 'was explaining' should be 'explained' for past simple; 'what was the origin' should be 'the origin'; 'till' is better as 'up to'; 'affect' should be past tense 'affected' to match the past context.

× I've attended to draw some messy lines and unknown characters and I made my progress up to when I was 11 or 10.

✓ I remember that at the age of five, I started drawing some messy lines and unknown characters, and I made progress until I was 10 or 11.

'I've attended to draw' is incorrect; 'attended' is not used with 'to draw' here. The correct expression is 'started drawing'. Also, 'up to when I was 11 or 10' is awkward; 'until I was 10 or 11' is better. The age order is also corrected for clarity.

× However, I believe drawing is one of the initial skills that.

✓ However, I believe drawing is one of the initial skills that one should learn.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or clause after 'that'. Adding 'one should learn' completes the thought and makes the sentence grammatically correct.