艺术— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答不够自然且有语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，明确表达喜欢画画的原因，并使用恰当的词汇。

示例: Yes, I like drawing, especially creating my own messaging emojis. It is a relaxing and enjoyable activity during my breaks, and I often send these emojis to my friends.

建议: 回答内容混乱，语法和词汇使用不当。建议直接回答问题，清晰表达喜欢去画廊的原因，使用连词使句子连贯。

示例: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because the peaceful atmosphere inspires my creativity. Also, seeing different artworks helps me design better messaging emojis.

建议: 回答较长且有语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁表达愿望，合理使用连词，注意语法和词汇准确性。

示例: Yes, I would love to learn more about art. However, I am quite busy with my two children and part-time job. If I had the chance, I would take art lessons to improve my drawing skills.

建议: 回答语法错误多，表达不完整且不连贯。建议简洁明了地回答问题，使用正确的时态和连词，补充具体细节。

示例: Yes, I learned to draw from my grandfather because he raised me while my parents were busy. We often drew together by the riverside when they went fishing.

× Yes, I like a drawing especially I draw up messaging emojis by myself.

✓ Yes, I like drawing, especially drawing messaging emojis by myself.

这里动词后面应该用动名词形式，表示喜欢做某事，不能用不定冠词加名词。

× It's a very relaxing and enjoyable activity when I have a break time and I send a limo just to my friend and they will.

✓ It's a very relaxing and enjoyable activity when I have break time, and I send a limo just to my friend, and they will.

短语中“have a break time”应改为“have break time”，因为“break time”是不可数名词，不需要冠词。

× Yes, I like to go to the gallery because having experience in celebrity varta will inspiring my creativity for la messaging emojis and I like the peaceful atmosphere in the gallery and I also like to have a worker in the gallery.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the gallery because having experience with celebrity art will inspire my creativity for making messaging emojis, and I like the peaceful atmosphere in the gallery, and I also like to have a worker in the gallery.

介词“in”用错，应为“experience with”，表示“有……的经验”；动词“inspiring”应改为动词原形“inspire”，因为前面有情态动词或使役动词。

× Yes I would love to learn more about the artist. However now I'm in quite a busy.

✓ Yes, I would love to learn more about the artist. However, now I'm quite busy.

“I'm in quite a busy”结构错误，应该去掉“in”，直接用形容词“busy”修饰主语。

× but if I had a little chance to have a art lesson I would love to improve my drawing skills and the ability.

✓ but if I had a little chance to have an art lesson, I would love to improve my drawing skills and my ability.

“a art lesson”中“art”以元音音素开头，冠词应为“an”；“the ability”前缺少限定词，应改为“my ability”。

× Yes I learned how to draw from my Gran father because I was a raised by him and my parents were always busy and away open drawing by the Riverside because they will love the going fishing and when.

✓ Yes, I learned how to draw from my grandfather because I was raised by him, and my parents were always busy and away. I often drew by the riverside because they loved going fishing.

“was a raised”中“a”多余，应去掉；“open drawing”应改为“often drew”，动词时态和形式错误；“will love the going fishing”时态和结构错误，应改为过去时“loved going fishing”。