艺术— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because it is a big part of my life. It is not only my career but also my passion and hope for the future. Drawing helps me express my feelings and relax after a busy day.

建议: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons why you like going to galleries. Also, check your vocabulary and sentence structure for clarity.

示例: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries, especially on weekends. Going to galleries is like a hobby for me because it inspires me as an artist and helps me improve my work and career.

建议: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and correct grammar. Try to organize your ideas with linking words and be more specific about what you want to learn. Avoid vague expressions and improve sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I want to learn more about art because it is a vast field. I try to learn something new every day, such as different styles and techniques, to improve my skills and understanding.

建议: Your answer is honest but contains grammatical errors and some repetition. Use correct verb tenses and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with details.

示例: Honestly, I did not learn drawing formally as a child because there was no one to teach me. I taught myself by practicing regularly and continued to improve on my own.

× I like drawing, actually drawing an Rs are part of my life.

✓ I like drawing, actually drawing and art are part of my life.

The phrase 'drawing an Rs' is incorrect because 'Rs' is not a proper plural noun here. It seems the student meant 'drawing and art'. The singular and plural forms must be used correctly to convey meaning clearly.

× There are not just my career, they are my hope, my future, my pass and now.

✓ They are not just my career; they are my hope, my future, my past and now.

The sentence structure is confusing and the word 'pass' should be 'past'. Also, 'There are not just my career' is incorrect; it should be 'They are not just my career' to agree with the plural subject 'they'.

× So. They are. More than you think for me.

✓ So, they mean more to me than you think.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Proper sentence structure requires combining fragments into a coherent sentence with correct word order.

× And I like drawing the.

✓ And I like drawing.

The phrase 'drawing the' is incomplete and incorrect. The sentence should end after 'drawing' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, I really like to go to gallery especially on weekends and going to gallery's for me like a hobby.

✓ Yes, I really like to go to galleries especially on weekends, and going to galleries is like a hobby for me.

The word 'gallery' should be plural 'galleries' when talking about going to multiple places. Also, 'gallery's' is possessive and incorrect here. The preposition 'to' is correctly used but the noun form needs correction.

× Two, no more artists and gallery makes me more inspiration for my fork and my carrier, so there's a slow import.

✓ Also, more artists and galleries give me more inspiration for my work and my career, so they are very important.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'Two' should be 'Also'; 'fork' should be 'work'; 'carrier' should be 'career'; 'gallery' should be plural 'galleries'; 'makes' should be 'give' to agree with plural subject; 'slow import' is incorrect and replaced with 'very important' for clarity.

× Yes, I really want to learn about art honestly I want to learn it every day as possible as I can do it and art is a big environment for me and even every day you find out knew thing about art is otherwise it's a something.

✓ Yes, I really want to learn about art. Honestly, I want to learn it every day as much as I can, and art is a big environment for me. Every day you find out new things about art; otherwise, it's something special.

The sentence is run-on and contains incorrect phrases like 'as possible as I can do it' which should be 'as much as I can'. 'Knew' should be 'new'. The modal verb 'can' is used incorrectly in the original and needs restructuring for clarity.

× Honestly, I've never draw, learn drawing when I were a kid because I learned by myself and there's no person to teach me there.

✓ Honestly, I've never drawn or learned drawing when I was a kid because I learned by myself and there was no person to teach me.

The verb 'draw' should be in past participle 'drawn' after 'have never'. 'Learn' should be 'learned' to match past tense. 'I were' is incorrect; it should be 'I was'. 'There's' should be 'there was' to match past tense.

× There wasn't any person to teach me and I just kept it going by myself.

✓ There wasn't any person to teach me, and I just kept going by myself.

The phrase 'kept it going' is incorrect here; 'kept going' is the correct expression. The pronoun 'it' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context.