团队合作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ควรปรับปรุงโครงสร้างประโยคให้ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล เช่น ใช้ 'because' อย่างถูกต้อง และหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำซ้อน นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและถูกต้อง เช่น 'helps' แทน 'help' และ 'aspects' แทน 'aspect'

示例: Yes, I do. Working as a team helps improve many aspects of skills, especially communication. This is because when you work with others, communication is key. Although you can do many things alone, teamwork allows us to achieve more together.

建议: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและชัดเจน เช่น ใช้ tense ให้เหมาะสม และหลีกเลี่ยงคำฟุ่มเฟือย เช่น 'umm' นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมประโยคให้ลื่นไหลและเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน

示例: Yes, I have. When I was at university, I often teamed up with people I didn't know well. Working together helped me improve my skills significantly.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์ เช่น ใช้ 'has' แทน 'have' กับเอกพจน์ และใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ นอกจากนี้ควรให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนและครบถ้วน พร้อมใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความสมเหตุสมผล

示例: I have learned that everyone has unique skills, and by working as a team, we can use these skills to improve the world. For example, some people are good at communication and can present ideas clearly, while others are skilled at analyzing data.

建议: ควรปรับปรุงไวยากรณ์และโครงสร้างประโยคให้ถูกต้อง เช่น ใช้ 'there are' แทน 'there will be' และหลีกเลี่ยงคำฟุ่มเฟือย เช่น 'umm' รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหลและให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจน

示例: I think in any group, there are people who do not want to contribute and just stay in the group without helping. This is the part I dislike about teamwork.

× Working as a team help you improve many aspect of this skill such as communication skill.

✓ Working as a team helps you improve many aspects of this skill such as communication skills.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'Working as a team'. Also, 'aspect' should be plural 'aspects' because it refers to multiple parts, and 'communication skill' should be plural 'communication skills' to refer to the general ability.

× Because yeah, when you have to work with someone, the communication is the key.

✓ Because yeah, when you have to work with someone, communication is the key.

The phrase 'the communication' is incorrect here; 'communication' is an uncountable noun and does not need the definite article 'the' in this context.

× And I know that you can do anything by yourself, but as a team we can.

✓ And I know that you can do anything by yourself, but as a team, we can do more.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'do more' completes the thought and improves sentence structure.

× Yes, I have umm, When I'm in the university, I have to team up with the people who I'm not familiar with.

✓ Yes, I have. Umm, when I was in the university, I had to team up with people whom I was not familiar with.

The tense should be past ('was', 'had') to match the past experience. Also, 'whom' is the correct relative pronoun for the object of the clause.

× But for the work we have to work together and that help me improve my skill a lot.

✓ But for the work, we have to work together and that helps me improve my skills a lot.

The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'that'. Also, 'skill' should be plural 'skills' to indicate multiple abilities.

× I learned that everyone have the unique skill in their own way and they can use the skill to make the world better as a team.

✓ I learned that everyone has unique skills in their own way and they can use these skills to make the world better as a team.

The verb 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'everyone'. 'Skill' should be plural 'skills' because it refers to multiple abilities. Also, 'the unique skill' is incorrect; 'unique skills' is better.

× Someone better at the communication they can present the world, someone catering the data, someone who can.

✓ Some are better at communication and can present to the world, some handle data, and others contribute in their own ways.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting it with proper structure and conjunctions improves clarity.

× I think in the group of people there will be someone who are didn't want to do anything and they just staying on the group, but they don't contribute anything to the group.

✓ I think in a group of people there will be someone who doesn't want to do anything and just stays in the group, but they don't contribute anything to the group.

'Someone' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't want' and 'stays'. Also, 'are didn't want' is incorrect; it should be 'doesn't want'. 'On the group' should be 'in the group'.

× Umm, that the point I didn't like to work as a team.

✓ Umm, that's the point; I don't like working as a team.

The sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. Using 'that's the point' and 'I don't like working' improves clarity and correctness.