老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택이 부정확하고 반복적인 말버릇(umm, uh, like)이 많아 자연스럽지 않습니다. 먼저 주제 문장으로 간단히 답하고, supporting details는 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 논리적으로 덧붙이세요. 또한 'picture' 대신 'teacher' 또는 'counselor'를 사용하고, 동사 형태와 관사(a/the)을 바로잡으세요. 발음 대신 의미 전달에 집중하고 문장 수는 2~4문장으로 유지하세요.

示例: Yes, I do. My favorite teacher was my high school counselor because she helped students find their own paths. For example, she gave practical advice about building healthy relationships and encouraged me to think independently.

建议: 의미는 전달되지만 문장이 다소 장황하고 반복적입니다. 'around like' 같은 불필요한 말줄임을 줄이고, 복수·단수형태(informations → information)와 전치사 사용(contact with)을 정확히 하세요. 연결어를 사용해 이유를 간결히 설명하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

示例: Not really. I graduated from primary school about twenty years ago, so it's difficult to contact my old teachers because I don't have their contact information anymore.

建议: 응답이 반복적이고 어휘 선택에 오류가 있습니다('Infirmary'는 부적절). 문법적으로는 시제와 목적어 형태를 정리해야 합니다. 질문에는 과거 방식(in what way … help you)을 물으므로 과거형을 사용하세요. 구체적인 예시를 한 문장으로 연결어(for example, when I struggled with a relationship)로 명확히 제시하면 좋습니다.

示例: She helped me by giving practical advice on how to handle personal conflicts. For example, when I had trouble with a friend, she suggested clear communication strategies and steps to rebuild trust.

建议: 답변이 매우 불분명하고 문장 구조가 무너져 있어 의도가 잘 전달되지 않습니다. 먼저 직업 희망을 명확히 말한 다음 이유와 계획을 간단히 덧붙이세요. 숫자나 기간을 말할 때는 정확하게 표현하고, 불필요한 말버릇을 제거하세요. 예: 'Yes, I want to be a history teacher because…' 형태로 시작하세요.

示例: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future, specifically a history teacher. I have always enjoyed studying history, and I plan to gain teaching qualifications over the next three years so I can teach at a secondary school.

× Yes, umm, definitely I have a favorite picture to uh was my high school counselor.

✓ Yes, umm, definitely my favorite teacher was my high school counselor.

The student used 'picture' instead of 'teacher' (wrong noun) and the verb phrase 'to uh was' is ungrammatical. Use a simple past copula 'was' with the subject 'my favorite teacher'. Also place 'definitely' before the subject to sound natural. Suggestion: say 'Definitely my favorite teacher was my high school counselor.'

× She always like navigate students to find their own way and give advice about umm the relationships between people so I can.

✓ She always liked to guide students to find their own way and gave advice about relationships between people so I could.

The student used 'like' as a filler instead of the past tense 'liked' and used the base verbs 'navigate' and 'give' without correct tense agreement. 'Navigate students' is awkward; use 'guide' or 'help'. Also 'so I can' should match past context 'so I could'. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense: 'She always liked to guide students... and gave advice... so I could.'

× Are you still in touch with your primary school teacher?

✓ Are you still in touch with your primary school teachers?

The question asks about 'teacher' but context refers to multiple teachers ('them' later). Use plural 'teachers' to match 'them'. If asking about one specific teacher, keep singular. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches the intended referent.

× Not really since I graduated my primary school around like 20 years ago.

✓ Not really; I graduated from primary school around 20 years ago.

Use 'graduated from' not 'graduated my', and omit filler 'like' in formal correction. Punctuation helps clarity. Suggestion: say 'I graduated from primary school around 20 years ago.'

× So it's umm, really completely challenging to contact them and then find their informations to get touch with them.

✓ So it's really difficult to contact them and find their information to get in touch with them.

'Completely challenging' is awkward; use 'difficult'. 'Informations' is uncountable and should be 'information'. Use the idiom 'get in touch with them'. Suggestion: 'it's really difficult to contact them and find their contact information.'

× Actually my high school teacher always like support me to find my own way.

✓ Actually my high school teacher always supported me in finding my own way.

'Always like support me to find' is ungrammatical. Use past tense 'supported' and 'support someone in doing something' or 'help someone to do something'. Suggestion: 'always supported me in finding my own way' or 'always helped me find my own way.'

× For example, if I struggle with like someone's relationship.

✓ For example, if I struggled with someone's relationship.

This fragment lacks proper tense and completeness. Change present 'struggle' to past 'struggled' to match past context and remove filler 'like'. Also make it part of a full sentence: 'For example, if I struggled with difficulties in a relationship.'

× She gave me really helpful Infirmary tips to get along with other people.

✓ She gave me really helpful informal tips to get along with other people.

'Infirmary' is incorrect; likely intended 'informal' or 'invaluable' or 'infirmary' is wrong noun. 'Helpful tips' is fine; choose 'invaluable' if meaning very useful. Suggestion: use 'invaluable tips' or 'helpful tips.'

× I would say in case of like can't touch like current history in the school, it would be about 3 to like to achieve my goal.

✓ I would say that if I can't teach current history in schools now, it would take me about three years to achieve my goal.

The original mixes modals and fragments. Use conditional 'if I can't teach' and express duration 'it would take me about three years'. Replace colloquial 'like' fillers. Suggestion: 'If I can't teach current history now, it would take about three years to achieve my goal.'

× I would I always wanted to be a teacher and to teach history.

✓ I always wanted to be a teacher and to teach history.

Remove redundant 'I would'. Use simple past 'wanted' for past desire. Suggestion: 'I have always wanted to be a teacher and to teach history.' if emphasizing ongoing desire.