老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Avoid confusion by using consistent pronouns and tenses. Also, try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. For example, directly state who your favourite teacher is and why, using linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: Yes, I do have a favourite teacher. Currently, my favourite teacher is a male who is nearly 60 years old. He is very kind and open-minded, and he has taught me many valuable lessons about life.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear pronouns. Make sure to use correct verb tenses and pronouns. Also, try to answer the question directly before adding supporting details with linking words. Be specific about your relationship now if possible.

示例: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school math teacher. She was very efficient and supportive. I remember when I failed an exam, she gave me a strong hug, which was very touching.

建议: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Try to organise your ideas logically and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain how your teacher helped you with specific details, using linking words to connect your points.

示例: My favourite teacher helped me during a difficult time in high school when I was neglecting my studies. She reminded me to take responsibility for my choices and encouraged me to work harder, which motivated me to improve.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors. Use correct verb forms and prepositions. Also, try to expand your answer slightly with linking words to explain your reasons more clearly.

示例: I don't want to be a teacher in the future because I have a clear plan for my life. For example, I want to learn how to make coffee and paint portraits, which are my true interests.

× Of course I have my favorite teacher, but in the different stage I have different favorite teacher.

✓ Of course I have my favorite teacher, but at different stages I have different favorite teachers.

The sentence incorrectly uses singular 'stage' and 'teacher' when referring to multiple stages and teachers. 'Stages' and 'teachers' should be plural to match the meaning of different times and multiple teachers.

× For now, I'm my favorite teacher is a male teacher.

✓ For now, my favorite teacher is a male teacher.

The phrase 'I'm my favorite teacher' is incorrect. The subject 'my favorite teacher' should be linked directly with 'is' without 'I'm' which is a contraction of 'I am' and does not fit here.

× It was almost 60 years old and she was very kind, have very open mind and teach me a lot of things about life.

✓ He was almost 60 years old and he was very kind, had a very open mind and taught me a lot of things about life.

The pronoun 'she' is inconsistent with 'male teacher' mentioned earlier; it should be 'he'. Also, 'have' and 'teach' should be in past tense 'had' and 'taught' to agree with 'was'.

× Ever since I remember my primary school teacher is my math teacher and she was a girl.

✓ Ever since I can remember, my primary school teacher was my math teacher and she was a girl.

The phrase 'Ever since I remember' is incorrect; it should be 'Ever since I can remember'. Also, 'is' should be 'was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I was remember he when I failed the exam, she gave me a very strong hug.

✓ I remember him when I failed the exam; she gave me a very strong hug.

'I was remember' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I remember'. Also, the pronoun 'he' should be 'him' as the object of the verb 'remember'.

× I was remember he when I failed the exam, she gave me a very strong hug.

✓ I remember him when I failed the exam; she gave me a very strong hug.

The object pronoun 'him' should be used instead of the subject pronoun 'he' after the verb 'remember'.

× It was so touch.

✓ It was so touching.

The adjective 'touch' is incorrect here; the correct adjective is 'touching' to describe an emotional experience.

× That was an unforgettable story in my high school I was a period was neglect my study and my favorite teacher was remind me to never let myself to without the right to choose the sentence I was reminded to.

✓ That was an unforgettable story in my high school. There was a period when I neglected my studies and my favorite teacher reminded me to never let myself lose the right to choose. I was reminded to do so.

The sentence has multiple tense errors: 'was neglect' should be 'neglected', 'was remind' should be 'reminded'. Also, sentence structure is corrected for clarity and proper tense usage.

× I'm afraid I'm not be a teacher in the future because I have a very clear plan to my future and I want to study a lot of things such as learning how to make a coffee and make portrait.

✓ I'm afraid I will not be a teacher in the future because I have a very clear plan for my future and I want to study a lot of things such as learning how to make coffee and paint portraits.

'I'm not be' is incorrect; the correct modal verb construction is 'I will not be'. Also, 'to my future' should be 'for my future'. 'Make a coffee' should be 'make coffee' and 'make portrait' should be 'paint portraits' for natural expression.