老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中表达不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连词连接细节，使表达更流畅。

示例: Yes, my favourite teacher is a sports coach because I love playing football and basketball. He is very kind and always gives me useful advice to improve my skills.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用简单句直接回答，并用连词说明原因，避免重复和不自然的表达。

示例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because some of them were strict and made me feel unhappy. Therefore, I prefer not to contact them now.

建议: 回答内容重复且表达不够连贯。建议先明确老师如何帮助，再用连词补充具体细节，使内容更丰富且逻辑清晰。

示例: My favourite teacher helped me by listening to my problems when I felt anxious about exams. She gave me advice and encouragement, which made me feel better and more confident.

建议: 回答中表达不够自然，语法和用词有误。建议用更准确的词汇表达观点，并用连词连接原因，使回答更流畅。

示例: No, I don't want to be a teacher because there are many teachers nowadays. Also, the fixed working hours from 9 to 5 limit my freedom, and I prefer a more flexible lifestyle.

× And because I love playing sports, especially football and basketball or some sports ball and I like it because he's very nice and also give up advice to do better in the future.

✓ And because I love playing sports, especially football and basketball or some ball sports, and I like it because he's very nice and also gives advice to help me do better in the future.

动词give在第三人称单数时应加-s，变为gives。这里是第三人称单数he，所以动词需要用第三人称单数形式。

× And because I love playing sports, especially football and basketball or some sports ball and I like it because he's very nice and also give up advice to do better in the future.

✓ And because I love playing sports, especially football and basketball or some ball sports, and I like it because he's very nice and also gives me advice to help me do better in the future.

短语give up advice是不正确的，正确表达是give advice，且需要加上间接宾语me，表示“给我建议”。

× MMM actually not as I'm not very communicate and connect with my primary school teacher and because some of them is very tough to behave with me and I feel depressed in that time and I don't want to connect them in the future.

✓ MMM actually not, as I don't communicate or connect well with my primary school teachers because some of them were very strict with me, and I felt depressed at that time, so I don't want to connect with them in the future.

动词communicate和connect后面需要加介词with，且主语和谓语不匹配，some of them是复数，谓语应为were。代词them需要加介词with。

× MMM actually not as I'm not very communicate and connect with my primary school teacher and because some of them is very tough to behave with me and I feel depressed in that time and I don't want to connect them in the future.

✓ MMM actually not, as I don't communicate or connect well with my primary school teachers because some of them were very strict with me, and I felt depressed at that time, so I don't want to connect with them in the future.

some of them指复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式were，而不是is。

× MMM actually not as I'm not very communicate and connect with my primary school teacher and because some of them is very tough to behave with me and I feel depressed in that time and I don't want to connect them in the future.

✓ MMM actually not, as I didn't communicate or connect well with my primary school teachers because some of them were very strict with me, and I felt depressed at that time, so I don't want to connect with them in the future.

描述过去的情况时，动词应使用过去时态，如didn't communicate, were, felt。

× So sometimes I will find teacher and communicate with me.

✓ So sometimes I will find a teacher and communicate with him.

动词communicate后面需要加介词with，且主语和宾语不明确，应补充宾语him。

× So sometimes I will find teacher and communicate with me.

✓ So sometimes I will find a teacher and communicate with him.

名词teacher前需要不定冠词a，表示泛指一个老师。

× So sometimes I will find teacher and communicate with me.

✓ So sometimes I will find a teacher and communicate with him.

communicate是及物动词，后面需要宾语，这里应为communicate with him，而不是with me。

× MMM, absolutely no, because I think nowadays teacher is overcrowding and I think being a teacher, you need to go, uh, from 9:00 to around 5:00.

✓ MMM, absolutely no, because I think nowadays teachers are overcrowded and I think being a teacher, you need to work from 9:00 to around 5:00.

teacher应为复数teachers，谓语动词用are。overcrowding用法不当，应改为overcrowded。

× MMM, absolutely no, because I think nowadays teacher is overcrowding and I think being a teacher, you need to go, uh, from 9:00 to around 5:00.

✓ MMM, absolutely no, because I think nowadays teachers are overcrowded and I think being a teacher, you need to work from 9:00 to around 5:00.

teacher应为复数teachers，谓语动词用are。

× MMM, absolutely no, because I think nowadays teacher is overcrowding and I think being a teacher, you need to go, uh, from 9:00 to around 5:00.

✓ MMM, absolutely no, because I think nowadays teachers are overcrowded and I think being a teacher, you need to work from 9:00 to around 5:00.

go from 9:00 to 5:00表达不准确，描述工作时间应使用work from 9:00 to 5:00。

× I think this control myself in my life.

✓ I think this controls me in my life.

this是第三人称单数，动词应加s变为controls。myself用法不当，应改为me。

× I think this control myself in my life.

✓ I think this controls me in my life.

主语this是第三人称单数，谓语动词control应加s，变为controls。

× I think this control myself in my life.

✓ I think this controls me in my life.

myself是反身代词，通常用于主语和宾语是同一人时，这里应使用宾格me。