老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to reduce filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you liked the teacher with specific details.

示例: Yes, my favorite teacher was my 7th-grade physics teacher because he made lessons fun and interesting. He put a lot of effort into creating engaging activities, which helped me understand difficult concepts better.

建议: Avoid excessive filler words and repetition. Provide a clear and concise answer with supporting reasons using linking words. For example, explain why you are not in touch and add a relevant detail to enrich your response.

示例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because we were never very close. Although I enjoyed his classes, we did not develop a personal relationship.

建议: Reduce filler words and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Be more specific about the advice or suggestions given to show deeper understanding and enrich your answer.

示例: My favorite teacher helped me by arranging a meeting with my parents when I struggled with kinematics. He advised me to practice problems regularly and focus on understanding the basic principles, which greatly improved my performance.

建议: Work on grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

示例: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy helping others learn. For example, I often teach my little sister basic math, and I find it rewarding to work with children.

× Yes, uh, when I was at my 7th grade, I had a physics teacher, uh, that I, uh, enjoyed his classes so much.

✓ Yes, uh, when I was in 7th grade, I had a physics teacher, uh, whose classes I enjoyed so much.

The phrase 'when I was at my 7th grade' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for grades or years in school. Also, 'that I enjoyed his classes' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'whose classes I enjoyed' to properly link the teacher to the classes enjoyed.

× The reason I really like to be in his class and listen to what he teach was that he puts a lot of efforts into, uh, making the lesson more fun and more interesting for us.

✓ The reason I really liked being in his class and listening to what he taught was that he put a lot of effort into making the lesson more fun and more interesting for us.

The sentence mixes tenses and verb forms incorrectly. 'Like to be' should be 'liked being' to match past tense and gerund form. 'Listen' should be 'listening' to parallel 'being'. 'He teach' should be 'he taught' to match past tense. 'Puts' should be 'put' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Efforts' should be singular 'effort' as it is an uncountable noun here.

× As a matter of fact, no, I, uh, do not contact him.

✓ As a matter of fact, no, I do not contact him.

No grammatical error here; sentence is correct.

× Uh, I didn't contact him after I graduated, uh, because I think, uh, we were not really that close.

✓ Uh, I haven't contacted him since I graduated because I think we were not really that close.

The use of 'didn't contact' is less appropriate here; 'haven't contacted' is better to express an action continuing up to the present. Also, 'after I graduated' is better expressed as 'since I graduated' to indicate the time from graduation until now.

× I think he was never close to any other students as well.

✓ I think he was never close to any other students either.

The phrase 'as well' is less appropriate here; 'either' is the correct negative addition. No tense error.

× And I really just enjoyed being in his class, but I do not.

✓ And I really just enjoyed being in his class, but I do not now.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'but I do not.' It should clarify what is not done now, e.g., 'but I do not now' or 'but I do not keep in touch now.'

× Well, I remember, uh, he was, uh, the same physics teacher for us in 8th grade.

✓ Well, I remember he was the same physics teacher for us in 8th grade.

No grammatical error; sentence is correct.

× And I remember that, uh, I had a lot of problems in the concepts of kinematics.

✓ And I remember that I had a lot of problems with the concepts of kinematics.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; 'problems with' is the correct collocation.

× And he arranged a meeting with my parents and me and advised me and gave me a lot of suggestions on how to study.

✓ And he arranged a meeting with my parents and me, advised me, and gave me a lot of suggestions on how to study.

No major grammatical error; sentence is correct though could be improved with commas for clarity.

× Well, yes, I really enjoy teaching others.

✓ Well, yes, I really enjoy teaching others.

Sentence is correct.

× For instance, I have a little sister he is she is right now at five grade.

✓ For instance, I have a little sister; she is right now in fifth grade.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'he is she is' is incorrect pronoun usage; it should be 'she is.' 'At five grade' is incorrect preposition and ordinal number; it should be 'in fifth grade.' Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× And when I teach him his mathematics, pretty much the basics, I really enjoy it because I like working with children.

✓ And when I teach her mathematics, pretty much the basics, I really enjoy it because I like working with children.

The pronoun 'him' is incorrect because the subject is a sister (female); it should be 'her.'