老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure, and avoid redundancy. Also, be specific and clear about the teacher's qualities and your experience. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, my favourite teacher is Andrew, who taught my small business course last semester. He always encouraged students to participate in activities and gave practical advice on starting a small business, which I found very helpful.

建议: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because I have forgotten most of them. Also, they live far from my city, and when I was in primary school, we didn't have mobile phones or contact information to keep in touch.

建议: Use correct verb tenses and sentence structure. Be specific about how the teacher helped you and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I remember my favourite teacher from high school who was always ready to help me with my mathematics problems. Moreover, he courageously provided free assistance to needy children and held extra classes in the morning.

建议: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain your future plans clearly and provide specific details.

示例: Yes, I want to become a teacher in the future. Although I haven't prepared yet, I plan to take a course in early childhood education, which will help me become a kindergarten teacher. I also want to follow in the footsteps of my grandfather, who was a primary school teacher.

× Yes, my favorite teacher is the Andrew and he's the good professors.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher is Andrew and he's a good professor.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before a proper noun 'Andrew' and before the singular noun 'professors'. Proper nouns like names do not need 'the'. Also, 'professors' should be singular 'professor' to agree with 'he'.

× Yes, my favorite teacher is the Andrew and he's the good professors.

✓ Yes, my favorite teacher is Andrew and he's a good professor.

The noun 'professors' is plural but refers to a single person 'he', so it should be singular 'professor' to match the subject.

× I met him during the my last semester of small business.

✓ I met him during my last semester of small business.

The phrase 'the my' is incorrect; only one article or possessive pronoun should be used. Here, 'my' alone is correct.

× He always encouraged all the student to participate or activities and suggest how we can start the small business in condom.

✓ He always encouraged all the students to participate in activities and suggested how we can start a small business in condom.

'Student' should be plural 'students' to agree with 'all the'. Also, 'participate or activities' is incorrect; it should be 'participate in activities'. 'Suggest' should be past tense 'suggested' to match 'encouraged'. 'The small business' should be 'a small business' as it is not specific.

× He always encouraged all the student to participate or activities and suggest how we can start the small business in condom.

✓ He always encouraged all the students to participate in activities and suggested how we can start a small business in condom.

The verb 'participate' is followed by the preposition 'in' when referring to activities.

× He always encouraged all the student to participate or activities and suggest how we can start the small business in condom.

✓ He always encouraged all the students to participate in activities and suggested how we can start a small business in condom.

The verbs 'encouraged' and 'suggest' should both be in past tense to maintain tense consistency.

× No I'm not. I don't contact with my primary teachers because I always forget my primary teachers.

✓ No, I'm not. I don't contact my primary teachers because I always forget my primary teachers.

The verb 'contact' does not require the preposition 'with' after it.

× No I'm not. I don't contact with my primary teachers because I always forget my primary teachers.

✓ No, I'm not. I don't contact my primary teachers because I always forget my primary teachers.

The phrase 'contact with' is incorrect; 'contact' is a transitive verb and does not need 'with'.

× Now I only remember some of one or two teachers and they are very far away from my city and during the my primary school there was no option to take the mobile phones or their address.

✓ Now I only remember one or two teachers and they are very far away from my city, and during my primary school there was no option to take mobile phones or their addresses.

'Some of one or two teachers' is incorrect; 'one or two teachers' is correct. 'The my' is incorrect; only 'my' is needed. 'Mobile phones' and 'addresses' should be plural to match the context.

× Now I only remember some of one or two teachers and they are very far away from my city and during the my primary school there was no option to take the mobile phones or their address.

✓ Now I only remember one or two teachers and they are very far away from my city, and during my primary school there was no option to take mobile phones or their addresses.

The phrase 'the my' is incorrect; only 'my' should be used. Also, 'the mobile phones' is incorrect here because it refers to mobile phones in general, so no article is needed.

× I really remembers my favorite teachers from my high school civic world.

✓ I really remember my favorite teachers from my high school civic world.

The verb 'remember' should be in base form 'remember' to agree with the subject 'I' in present tense.

× He always ready to help me to always ready to lend help to solve my mathematics problem and because he is the very courageous to provide free assistance to all needy children's and provide extra class in the morning.

✓ He is always ready to help me and always ready to lend help to solve my mathematics problems because he is very courageous to provide free assistance to all needy children and provide extra classes in the morning.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'He'. 'Children's' is incorrect possessive; it should be plural 'children'. 'Class' should be plural 'classes' to match context. Also, sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× He always ready to help me to always ready to lend help to solve my mathematics problem and because he is the very courageous to provide free assistance to all needy children's and provide extra class in the morning.

✓ He is always ready to help me and always ready to lend help to solve my mathematics problems because he is very courageous to provide free assistance to all needy children and provide extra classes in the morning.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper connectors and verbs. Adding 'is' and restructuring improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes I want to become a teacher but right now I have a no preparation for this but in future I want to be take course early childhood childhood educator and which helped me to become a kindergarten teacher and I also want to follow footprint of my grandfather who was the one teacher in primary school.

✓ Yes, I want to become a teacher but right now I have no preparation for this. In the future, I want to take a course in early childhood education which will help me become a kindergarten teacher. I also want to follow in the footsteps of my grandfather who was a teacher in primary school.

The phrase 'a no preparation' is incorrect; 'no preparation' is correct without 'a'. 'Be take course' is incorrect; it should be 'take a course'. 'Early childhood childhood educator' is repetitive and unclear; corrected to 'early childhood education'. 'Which helped me' should be 'which will help me' for future intent. 'Follow footprint' should be 'follow in the footsteps'. 'The one teacher' is incorrect; 'a teacher' is correct.