老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy such as 'Her name was called Rachel' (better: 'Her name was Rachel'). Also, watch subject-verb agreement ('These subjects has' should be 'These subjects have'). Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, my favourite teacher was Rachel, who taught microbiology at university. Although the subject involved a lot of memorisation, she provided detailed notes which helped us revise effectively, so I really appreciated her teaching.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be more natural and concise. Instead of 'didn't get in touch', use 'am not in touch'. Also, avoid filler phrases like 'like 15 years ago'; say 'about 15 years ago'. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teachers because it was about 15 years ago, and back then we didn't have social media, so it's difficult to contact them now.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but could be more detailed and natural. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'in particular' to add clarity. Also, 'explaining in details' should be 'explaining in detail'. Try to avoid repeating 'help' too often.

示例: My favourite teacher helped me understand abstract concepts by explaining them in detail. For example, she provided clear examples and encouraged us to make notes, which improved our memorisation.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be more natural and concise. Instead of 'I've never thought to be a teacher', say 'I have never considered becoming a teacher'. Also, avoid ending sentences with prepositions like 'where my strength lies in' (better: 'where my strength lies'). Use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: No, I have never considered becoming a teacher because it is not where my strengths lie. I prefer working independently and do not enjoy teaching or guiding others.

× Her name was called Rachel who taught me microbiology in the university.

✓ Her name was Rachel, and she taught me microbiology at the university.

The phrase 'was called' is unnecessary here; 'Her name was Rachel' is sufficient. Also, 'in the university' should be 'at the university' as 'at' is the correct preposition for institutions. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× These subjects has a lot of things to memorize, but Rachel made detailed notes for us to better revise, so I liked her a lot.

✓ These subjects have a lot of things to memorize, but Rachel made detailed notes for us to revise better, so I liked her a lot.

The subject 'subjects' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' instead of 'has'. Also, 'to better revise' is better expressed as 'to revise better' for natural adverb placement.

× No, I didn't get in touch with my primary teachers because it has been like 15 years ago and at that time we did not have social media.

✓ No, I haven't been in touch with my primary teachers because it has been about 15 years, and at that time we did not have social media.

The present perfect tense 'haven't been in touch' is appropriate for an action continuing to the present. Also, 'it has been like 15 years ago' is incorrect; 'it has been about 15 years' is correct because 'ago' is not used with present perfect.

× Her name was called Rachel who taught me microbiology in the university.

✓ Her name was Rachel, who taught me microbiology at the university.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to attending or teaching at an institution; 'at' is the correct preposition to use with 'university' in this context.

× My favorite teacher helped me understand abstract concepts by explaining in details.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me understand abstract concepts by explaining in detail.

'In detail' is the correct phrase; 'in details' is incorrect. 'Detail' is uncountable in this context.

× Also, she helped to make notes for us to help us better memorize.

✓ Also, she helped us make notes to help us memorize better.

The phrase 'helped to make notes for us' is awkward; 'helped us make notes' is more natural. Also, 'better memorize' should be 'memorize better' for correct adverb placement.

× No, I've never thought to be a teacher because this is not where my strength lies in.

✓ No, I've never thought about being a teacher because this is not where my strength lies.

The verb 'think' is followed by 'about' plus gerund ('being'), not 'to be'. Also, 'lies in' should be 'lies' without 'in' at the end.