老师— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答较为简洁，但缺少连贯的连接词和更具体的细节。建议在回答中使用连接词使表达更自然流畅，并补充具体例子说明老师如何帮助你。

示例: My favorite teacher is my Chinese teacher, Emily, because she always helps me when I face difficulties. For example, she provides useful information and practical suggestions that improve my understanding.

建议: 回答中使用了口语化的缩写和非正式表达，建议使用更正式的表达方式，并且可以补充说明原因使内容更丰富。

示例: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because I graduated about 12 years ago, and we have lost contact since then.

建议: 回答结构清晰，但缺少连接词和具体细节。建议使用连接词连接两部分内容，并举例说明老师如何关注心理健康和学业。

示例: My favorite teacher helped me in two ways: firstly, she paid close attention to my mental health by offering support when I felt stressed; secondly, she assisted me with my academic studies by explaining difficult concepts clearly.

建议: 回答简洁明了，但可以通过使用连接词使句子更流畅，同时补充一些理由使回答更具体。

示例: No, I do not want to be a teacher in the future because my major is finance; therefore, I plan to become a financial consultant instead, as I am more interested in that field.

× My favorite teacher not only paid attention on my mental health but also helped me with my academic studies.

✓ My favorite teacher not only paid attention to my mental health but also helped me with my academic studies.

动词短语 'pay attention' 后面应接介词 'to'，而不是 'on'。这是固定搭配，错误使用介词会导致表达不准确。建议记住 'pay attention to' 的正确用法。

× No, we lost contact with each other 'cause I have graduated from my primary school for about 12 years.

✓ No, we lost contact with each other because I graduated from my primary school about 12 years ago.

句中 'have graduated' 与时间状语 'for about 12 years' 搭配不当，且表达时间点应使用一般过去时 'graduated'，并用 'about 12 years ago' 表示大约12年前。'cause' 是口语缩写，正式写作中应使用 'because'。建议注意时态与时间状语的搭配。