香水— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 質問に直接答えた点は良いですが、表現が不自然で意味が曖昧です。語順や語彙の選択を改善し、論理的なつなぎ言葉を使って理由を明確に述べてください。具体的には「the center of that」「good comfortable」「express my worrying to others」などは意味が取りにくいので、適切な表現に言い換え、文を短めに保つと良いです。例: トピック文→理由→具体例の順で、接続詞（because, so, for example）を使ってつなぎましょう。

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy wearing perfume because certain scents make me feel calm and confident. For example, a light floral fragrance helps me relax after a stressful day. I also choose different perfumes to match my mood.

建议: 答えはある程度明確ですが、文法や語順のミスが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。頻度や状況を述べる際は、適切な副詞（usually, rarely, often）や時間表現（on weekdays, at work, on holidays）を使って簡潔に言いましょう。また、理由や例を一つ入れると説得力が増します。

示例: Yes, I do. I usually wear perfume, but I rarely wear it to the office on weekdays. I tend to save nicer fragrances for holidays or special occasions because I prefer lighter scents at work.

建议: 回答は直接的で分かりやすいですが、言い回しが不自然です。理由を簡潔に述べる際は「people's preferences vary」や「it's hard to choose」などの自然な表現を使い、接続詞で理由を示すと良いです。可能なら代替案（例: ギフトカードを買う）を付け加えるとより豊かな回答になります。

示例: No, I probably wouldn't. People have different tastes in perfume, so it's hard to choose the right scent for someone else. Instead, I would buy a gift card or choose a more neutral present.

建议: 意図は伝わりますが、多くの文法や語彙の誤りがあり、意味が不明瞭な部分があります。まずは簡潔な主張をし、その後で理由を1〜2点述べましょう。語彙は正しい単語（e.g. "occasion", "premium", "sometimes"）を使い、過去形や受動態の誤用を避けてください。接続詞（however, sometimes, because）で文をつなぐと論理的になります。

示例: Not necessarily. Some perfumes can be expensive, especially designer or niche brands, but there are also affordable options available. Sometimes people buy perfume only for special occasions, which can make high-end bottles more costly.

× I like to use perfume. The center of that makes me very calm and good comfortable and I can choose one reflecting my mood.

✓ I like to use perfume. The scent makes me feel calm and comfortable, and I can choose one that reflects my mood.

'The center of that' is incorrect; 'scent' is the correct noun for smell. 'Makes me very calm and good comfortable' mixes adjectives/adverbs incorrectly; use 'makes me feel calm and comfortable'. Add 'that' before 'reflects' for the relative clause. Use parallel and natural adjective order and correct verb 'feel'.

× Besides, I can express my worrying to others.

✓ Besides, I can express my worries to others.

'Worrying' is a present participle used incorrectly here; the noun 'worries' is appropriate. Use plural 'worries' or 'my worry' depending on meaning. Change verb form to match noun object.

× I normally use perfume in daily life, especially in the holidays.

✓ I normally use perfume in daily life, especially on holidays.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'holidays' in English. 'In the holidays' is awkward; 'on holidays' or 'during holidays' are correct. Maintain present simple tense.

× I hardly can put perfume on to the office in weekly but I always put it on holiday.

✓ I can hardly wear perfume to the office during the week, but I always wear it on holidays.

Word order: 'can hardly' is more natural than 'hardly can'. Use 'wear perfume' rather than 'put perfume on to'. Use 'during the week' or 'to the office during the week'. 'In weekly' is incorrect; use 'during the week'. 'On holiday' should be 'on holidays'.

× No, I will not. The preference to the perfume by each person is different by the character or feeling of person. I can't choose anyone to others.

✓ No, I will not. Each person's preference for perfume is different depending on their character or feelings. I can't choose one for others.

'The preference to the perfume by each person' is incorrect word order and prepositions; use 'Each person's preference for perfume'. 'Different by the character or feeling of person' should be 'depending on their character or feelings'. 'I can't choose anyone to others' should be 'I can't choose one for others'—use 'for' to indicate intended recipient and 'one' to refer to a perfume.

× No, I don't. I don't think so. The paramount. It's not too expensive currently. Parium were took in the special occasion so the price of it could be more expensive.

✓ No, I don't. I don't think so. They are not very expensive now. Perfume is worn on special occasions, so its price can be higher for those types.

'The paramount' is fragmentary and unclear; remove it. Use 'They are not very expensive now' to speak generally about perfumes. 'Parium were took in the special occasion' is ungrammatical—use 'Perfume is worn on special occasions'. 'So the price of it could be more expensive' is redundant; use 'so its price can be higher for those types'. Correct passive and verb forms and subject agreement.