休息— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện: Tránh tiếng ồn (uh, um) và lặp từ; mở đầu trực tiếp với câu chủ đề; sửa ngữ pháp (watch television, surf the net) và dùng linking words để rõ ràng. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (khi nào, những chương trình bạn xem hoặc trang web bạn ghé thăm) để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

示例: Lately I usually relax in my dormitory. I often watch TV dramas or surf the internet in the evenings, especially catching up on news websites and social media. Because I have a quiet lifestyle, I rarely go out with friends and prefer staying in to recharge.

建议: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp ý (stay at home, stay inside) và thành ngữ không chính xác (“rent out my energy”); dùng cụm từ tự nhiên như “drain my energy”. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể (ai bạn trò chuyện, bằng ứng dụng nào, tần suất). Giữ câu ngắn gọn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (surfing → surf, update the news).

示例: I usually relax alone because I’m an introvert. Occasionally I chat with close friends via messaging apps like WhatsApp or WeChat in the evenings, which helps me feel connected without leaving the dorm.

建议: Cải thiện: Tránh filler và dùng từ chính xác (beat, not bit; recharge your batteries). Nên đưa thêm lý do cụ thể và ví dụ (thể loại nhạc, khi nào bạn nghe) dùng linking words like “because” or “for example”. Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

示例: Yes, I find listening to music very relaxing because it helps me focus and forget daily stress. For example, I listen to soft acoustic or lo-fi tracks in the evening to unwind and recharge after a long day.

建议: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và sửa ngữ pháp (surf → surf the net, update the news, chat with my friends). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp và sau đó liệt kê 2–3 hoạt động kèm chi tiết (khi nào, tần suất, mục đích). Tránh dùng cụm từ không tự nhiên như “rent out my energy”.

示例: To relax, I usually stay in my dorm and surf the internet in the evenings. I read news articles, chat with friends online, and sometimes watch short videos to unwind after studying.

× to watch the televisions or to surfing the net

✓ to watch television or to surf the net

Use base form after 'to' (infinitive). 'To' + verb requires the base form 'surf', not 'surfing'. Also 'television' is uncountable here, so use 'television' not 'the televisions'. Suggestion: Use 'to watch television' and 'to surf the internet'.

× I stay in there

✓ I stay there

Do not use both 'in' and 'there' together; 'there' already indicates location. Remove 'in'. Suggestion: Say 'I stay there' or 'I stay in the dormitory.'

× I have the sedentary lifestyle

✓ I have a sedentary lifestyle

Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun phrase 'sedentary lifestyle'. 'The' is incorrect here. Suggestion: Use 'a sedentary lifestyle.'

× I usually stay inside the dormitory to surfing the net

✓ I usually stay inside the dormitory to surf the net

After 'to' use the base verb 'surf' (infinitive), not the -ing form 'surfing'. Suggestion: Use 'to surf the net'.

× update the new and chatting with my friend through the through the screen

✓ update news and chat with my friend through the screen

Use 'update news' (no 'the') and parallel verb forms 'chat' to match 'update'. Remove duplicate 'the'. Suggestion: Use parallel verbs and correct noun forms: 'update news and chat with my friend through the screen.'

× chatting with my friend through the through the screen

✓ chatting with my friends through the screen

Plural 'friends' is more natural when speaking generally. Also remove duplicated words. Maintain number agreement. Suggestion: Say 'chat with my friends through the screen.'

× to refresh their mind

✓ to refresh their minds

When speaking about people in general, pluralize 'mind' to 'minds' to agree with plural 'people' or use 'one's mind'. Suggestion: Use 'refresh their minds' or 'refresh one's mind.'

× make people immerse themselves into uh, the bit and escape the reality

✓ make people immerse themselves in the beat and escape reality

Use 'in' not 'into' with 'immerse oneself in something'. 'Beat' (music beat) is correct spelling. Do not use 'the' before 'reality' in this context. Suggestion: Say 'immerse themselves in the beat and escape reality.'

× I also believe that it make people refresh and recheck the battery after a hard working day

✓ I also believe that it makes people feel refreshed and recharge their energy after a hard working day

Subject 'it' requires third person singular verb 'makes'. 'Refresh' needs to be in adjective form 'feel refreshed' and 'recheck the battery' is incorrect idiom; use 'recharge their energy'. Suggestion: Use 'it makes people feel refreshed and recharge their energy.'

× I tend to stay inside the dorm and surfing the net

✓ I tend to stay inside the dorm and surf the net

After 'and' joining two verbs with same subject, use base forms in parallel: 'stay' and 'surf', not 'surfing'. Suggestion: Keep verbs parallel: 'stay... and surf...'.

× I also update the news and chatting with my friend to the screen

✓ I also update news and chat with my friend on the screen

Use 'on the screen' for communicating via screens. Use parallel verbs 'update' and 'chat' and no article 'the' before 'news'. Suggestion: Say 'update news and chat with my friend on the screen.'

× I hardly go outside because it can rent out my energy

✓ I hardly go outside because it can drain my energy

'Rent out my energy' is incorrect collocation; correct verb is 'drain' meaning reduce energy. Suggestion: Use 'drain my energy'.

× I prefer staying at home and recover by myself

✓ I prefer staying at home and recovering by myself

After 'prefer' with gerund structure, keep parallel gerund 'recovering'. 'By myself' is acceptable. Suggestion: Use parallel gerunds: 'preferring staying... and recovering...' but better: 'I prefer to stay at home and recover by myself.'