生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by using more natural expressions and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of saying "It depends about my mood," say "It depends on my mood." Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly, and provide more specific details about what you do when you watch movies or eat something.

示例: Usually, I go out with my mom or friends on my birthday, depending on my mood. I prefer to relax and stay calm because it's a special day for me. For instance, I often watch my favorite movies and enjoy some delicious food to celebrate.

建议: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Practice forming simple, complete sentences to describe your past birthday celebrations.

示例: When I was young, I usually had big parties with my friends. For example, last year I celebrated my birthday with a fun party where we played games and enjoyed delicious food together.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer structure and more natural phrasing. Use linking words like "however" or "on the other hand" to contrast opinions. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as "many peoples" to "many people" and "others things" to "others think."

示例: I believe it is important to celebrate my birthday at my age. However, many people think it is unnecessary and prefer to stay at home. On the other hand, I feel that celebrating is a good way to relax and spend time on myself.

建议: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more natural expressions and clearer sentence structure. For example, say "children's birthdays" instead of "child birthday." Also, explain the tradition more specifically and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: In my opinion, children's birthdays are the most important to celebrate in China. This is because there is a tradition of giving gifts to children on their special day, which makes it very meaningful for them.

× Usually I'm going out with my mom or with my friends.

✓ Usually I go out with my mom or with my friends.

The sentence incorrectly uses the present continuous tense 'I'm going out' to describe a habitual action. Habitual actions should be expressed in the simple present tense, so 'I go out' is correct.

× It depends about my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

The verb 'depend' is followed by the preposition 'on', not 'about'. Therefore, 'depends on my mood' is the correct form.

× Now I'm seeing I'm a junior, that's why I'm I'm pretty young, so come for.

✓ Now I am a junior, that's why I am pretty young, so come for.

The phrase 'I'm seeing' is incorrect here; 'see' in this context is not used in the continuous form. The correct form is 'I am a junior'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and unclear; 'so come for' is not grammatically correct and should be omitted or clarified.

× The past my birthday I did uh, where we big party with Karwacki and whereas in spend time with my friends very well, also it was very.

✓ On my last birthday, I had a big party with Karwacki and spent time with my friends. It was very enjoyable.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'The past my birthday' should be 'On my last birthday'; 'I did uh, where we big party' is incorrect and should be 'I had a big party'; 'whereas in spend time' should be 'and spent time'; the sentence is incomplete and unclear, so it is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× many peoples argue about this statement because many people think that it's not so necessary any you can just stay at home

✓ many people argue about this statement because many people think that it's not so necessary and you can just stay at home

The word 'peoples' is incorrect here; the correct plural form is 'people'. Also, 'any' is incorrect in this context and should be 'and'.

× others things that you should celebrate because it's your birthday and you should spend time on yourself and just relax.

✓ others think that you should celebrate because it's your birthday and you should spend time on yourself and just relax.

The word 'things' is incorrect; the correct word is 'think' to express opinion. Also, 'spend time on yourself' is acceptable but 'spend time for yourself' or 'spend time by yourself' might be clearer.

× the child birthday in China because they have a tradition that they should celebrate and have a gift to give to the child

✓ the child's birthday in China because they have a tradition that they should celebrate and receive a gift

The phrase 'the child birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'the child's birthday' to show possession. Also, 'have a gift to give to the child' is awkward; 'receive a gift' is more natural.