生日— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e kichu grammar mistake ache, ar kichu sentence onek boro, jar fole answer ta natural lage na. Apni chesta korun short ar clear sentence use korte, ar kichu specific details add korte, jemon apni ki koren birthday te, jodi kichu na kore thaken, taile seta keno?

示例: Usually, I don't do much on my birthday because I prefer to spend a quiet day at home. However, when I was a teenager, I used to celebrate with my friends and family, which was very exciting for me.

建议: Apnar answer e grammar khub kharap, ar sentence gulo incomplete. Apni chesta korun prothome direct answer dite, tarpor kichu specific details add korun. Linking words use korun jate answer ta logical lage.

示例: When I was young, I usually didn't do much on my birthday because my family didn't celebrate it with big parties. However, they sometimes gave me small surprises, which I appreciated a lot.

建议: Apnar answer e kichu redundancy ache, ar sentence gulo onek boro. Apni chesta korun short ar clear sentence use korte, ar kichu specific karon dite keno apni birthday celebrate korte bhalobashen na.

示例: I don't think celebrating my birthday is important because I see it as a normal day. I prefer to focus on my daily life rather than special celebrations.

建议: Apni jodi kono information na jan, tahole apni chesta korun kichu general idea dite, jemon China te kon type birthday important hote pare. Apnar answer e apni direct bolte paren na jani, kintu kichu guess korte paren. Ete answer ta natural ar effective hobe.

示例: I am not very familiar with birthdays in China, but I think the Chinese New Year is very important, so maybe birthdays of family elders are celebrated with respect.

× In my teenagers I am really excited about birthdays and all, but as I am getting older I am really not interested in this kind of days so I don't usually do anything.

✓ In my teenage years I was really excited about birthdays and all, but as I am getting older I am really not interested in these kinds of days so I don't usually do anything.

The phrase 'in my teenagers' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'in my teenage years' to refer to the period of adolescence. Also, 'this kind of days' is incorrect because 'kind' should be followed by a singular noun or 'kinds' with plural noun. Here, 'these kinds of days' is appropriate. The verb tense 'am' in 'I am really excited' should be past tense 'was' to match the past time frame 'in my teenage years'. Suggestion: Use 'in my teenage years' and 'these kinds of days' and adjust verb tense accordingly.

× In my teenagers I am really excited about birthdays and all, but as I am getting older I am really not interested in this kind of days so I don't usually do anything.

✓ In my teenage years I was really excited about birthdays and all, but as I am getting older I am really not interested in these kinds of days so I don't usually do anything.

The sentence refers to a past time period ('in my teenage years'), so the verb 'am' should be in the past tense 'was' to maintain tense consistency. Suggestion: Use past tense 'was' when referring to past experiences.

× To be honest, I didn't do anything. In my birthday, when I were young because my family's. Really give me surprises and I am not a kind of person who wants a big, big thing, so I prefer.

✓ To be honest, I didn't do anything on my birthday when I was young because my family didn't really give me surprises and I am not the kind of person who wants a big, big thing, so I prefer that.

'When I were young' is incorrect; the correct form is 'when I was young' because 'I' takes 'was' in past tense. Also, 'my family's' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'my family didn't really give me surprises'. The sentence structure is fragmented and needs to be combined properly. 'I am not a kind of person' should be 'I am not the kind of person'. Suggestion: Use 'was' with 'I' in past tense, complete sentences properly, and use 'the kind of person'.

× In my birthday, when I were young because my family's.

✓ On my birthday, when I was young, because of my family.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'birthday'; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'because my family's' is incomplete; it should be 'because of my family'. Suggestion: Use 'on' with specific days and 'because of' to indicate reason.

× I am not a kind of person who wants a big, big thing, so I prefer.

✓ I am not the kind of person who wants a big, big thing, so I prefer that.

The phrase 'a kind of person' should be 'the kind of person' when referring to a specific type. Also, the sentence ends abruptly; 'so I prefer' needs an object or explanation. Suggestion: Use 'the kind of person' and complete the sentence for clarity.

× I don't know anything about China or who birthday do I think is the most important to celebrate in China.

✓ I don't know anything about China or whose birthday I think is the most important to celebrate in China.

The phrase 'who birthday do I think' is incorrect. The correct form is 'whose birthday I think' to indicate possession. Also, the word order 'do I think' is incorrect in this statement. Suggestion: Use 'whose' for possession and correct word order in statements.

× So I couldn't give you the two that answer.

✓ So I couldn't give you the answer to that.

The phrase 'the two that answer' is incorrect and unclear. The correct phrase is 'the answer to that'. Suggestion: Use correct phrase 'the answer to that' for clarity.